Pistol Pete, Mom and Me
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Romance and Other Gross Stuff"Jack has a problem. His mom is his coach.
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Gretchen.
Sorry, I'm once again far behind. This is a great chapter showing exactly how a kid would react seeing the flirtatious behaviour between his mother and Coach Parker. I like the conversation in the cafeteria, again a great reflection on how kids would react to their parent's, especially mothers coaching the boys team.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Hi, Gretchen.
Sorry, I'm once again far behind. This is a great chapter showing exactly how a kid would react seeing the flirtatious behaviour between his mother and Coach Parker. I like the conversation in the cafeteria, again a great reflection on how kids would react to their parent's, especially mothers coaching the boys team.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Just call me backwards Nellie. It's rather interesting reading a book backwards - LOL.
Eeewwwww! Poor Jack, he can't win for all the popularity of his mom.
As always, you are spot on with Jack's pov.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Just call me backwards Nellie. It's rather interesting reading a book backwards - LOL.
Eeewwwww! Poor Jack, he can't win for all the popularity of his mom.
As always, you are spot on with Jack's pov.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax ('-')
Comment Written 04-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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I don't care how you read it, just the fact that you're readig it is good.I appreciate the review. Gretchen
Comment from Bill Schott
I like that Jack has such a narrow point of view. His opinions test the reader to see whether his or her investment in the narrator's opinion is rewarded by creating an argument that creates continued interest in sticking with the story.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I like that Jack has such a narrow point of view. His opinions test the reader to see whether his or her investment in the narrator's opinion is rewarded by creating an argument that creates continued interest in sticking with the story.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Most young kids have a narrow view of the world. Great review. Thanks. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love this story and I can see so many lessons that a middle schooler can learn from it.
The whole point is to win. (I hope Jack learns it takes an entire team to win.)
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I love this story and I can see so many lessons that a middle schooler can learn from it.
The whole point is to win. (I hope Jack learns it takes an entire team to win.)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Yup, a learning is coming. I am so glad, now, that my coach said...no practice, no play...but at the time i was not a happy camper.
I like the way this is plaing out(pardon the pun:-)
padumachitta
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Hi. Yup, a learning is coming. I am so glad, now, that my coach said...no practice, no play...but at the time i was not a happy camper.
I like the way this is plaing out(pardon the pun:-)
padumachitta
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the awesome comments. Gretchen
Comment from adewpearl
I love his reaction to the touching arms LOL
good use of non-verbal communication with the rolling eyes
such a realistic reaction that a boy his age would have to watching his mom and a man being flirty with each other
I just love Billy's admiration of Jack's mom and his even following her advice about healthy eating - it is obvious he feels about Jack's mother the way Jack should feel
great dialogue between Jack and Billy :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I love his reaction to the touching arms LOL
good use of non-verbal communication with the rolling eyes
such a realistic reaction that a boy his age would have to watching his mom and a man being flirty with each other
I just love Billy's admiration of Jack's mom and his even following her advice about healthy eating - it is obvious he feels about Jack's mother the way Jack should feel
great dialogue between Jack and Billy :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful review and the insightful comments. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
It's interesting looking through the eyes of an adolescent, I don't think I'd enjoy being a teenager again, seeing things through their limited peripheral vision, I loved the level on which this was written, I takes perception to do so, as seen through eyes of an adolescent! Good work Gretchen, well written, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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It's interesting looking through the eyes of an adolescent, I don't think I'd enjoy being a teenager again, seeing things through their limited peripheral vision, I loved the level on which this was written, I takes perception to do so, as seen through eyes of an adolescent! Good work Gretchen, well written, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
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You're welcome, Roy.
Comment from A Matter Of Words
You do an excellent job with Jack's perceptions of his mother as coach and his attitude toward winning is all there is. Nice handling of the scene between "Deidre" and Coach Parker. You do just enough to give a sense that something is going on. Well done, Gretchen.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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You do an excellent job with Jack's perceptions of his mother as coach and his attitude toward winning is all there is. Nice handling of the scene between "Deidre" and Coach Parker. You do just enough to give a sense that something is going on. Well done, Gretchen.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the nice comments. Gretchen
Comment from Jay Squires
Good chapter, Gretchen. Rutledge is testing the limits by not letting Aaron go to practice. Will Dee cave. If she doesn't will the relationship between mother and child be strained. We all know the answer to that! And, this is Jack's story, primarily.
You have a spacing problem with the last paragraph... unless it is a kind of preface for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Good chapter, Gretchen. Rutledge is testing the limits by not letting Aaron go to practice. Will Dee cave. If she doesn't will the relationship between mother and child be strained. We all know the answer to that! And, this is Jack's story, primarily.
You have a spacing problem with the last paragraph... unless it is a kind of preface for the next chapter.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you for pointing out the last paragraph. Not real sure what to do with it. LOL. Thanks for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Misrael
Well it looks like Jack is in for it no matter what happens. With his mom as coach it has to be very embarrassing for him and then the guys on the team are mad at him. But I have a feeling that things will turn out alright in the end. I think that this story is very good for those kids in middle school because it shows how people can be so bigoted. Good read.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Well it looks like Jack is in for it no matter what happens. With his mom as coach it has to be very embarrassing for him and then the guys on the team are mad at him. But I have a feeling that things will turn out alright in the end. I think that this story is very good for those kids in middle school because it shows how people can be so bigoted. Good read.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Like most kids, he's embarrassed by her no matter what she does. LOL. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
