Ten Dandelions
a counting poem for children126 total reviews
Comment from Dustybones
How original, love this one, every acpect is right on the button. I what to know where you got all of your poetry writing talent so I can get some for myself. Is ther enough to share?
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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How original, love this one, every acpect is right on the button. I what to know where you got all of your poetry writing talent so I can get some for myself. Is ther enough to share?
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Dusty, thank you so very much for your generosity and encouragement :-) I think my talent comes from the love of poetry my dad instilled in me and the love of reading I've had all my life - and I'm more than willing to share that :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Good children's style poem using repetition in the counting and good rhymed quatrains with a fine upbeat flow and tone.
Nice slant rhyme of lawn and gone. Nice alliteration of P in first stanza, G and S in the second; nice consonance of V in fourth stanza. Nice alliteration or F in flavor and fairy folk.
Good closing note of hope and new birth.
Well done, as usual, and nicely presented.
Love,
rd
Three dandelions volunteered
to feed a hummingbird,
until a rabbit came along
and gobbled up the third.
Two dandelions worried
that they were only two,
until one's petals withered,
for she was just too blue.
One dandelion remaining
then turned to silken seeds,
and gentle breezes blowing
are all one flower needs.
The seeds were widely scattered
and planted in the ground,
till dandelions sprouted
with blossoms that abound.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Good children's style poem using repetition in the counting and good rhymed quatrains with a fine upbeat flow and tone.
Nice slant rhyme of lawn and gone. Nice alliteration of P in first stanza, G and S in the second; nice consonance of V in fourth stanza. Nice alliteration or F in flavor and fairy folk.
Good closing note of hope and new birth.
Well done, as usual, and nicely presented.
Love,
rd
Three dandelions volunteered
to feed a hummingbird,
until a rabbit came along
and gobbled up the third.
Two dandelions worried
that they were only two,
until one's petals withered,
for she was just too blue.
One dandelion remaining
then turned to silken seeds,
and gentle breezes blowing
are all one flower needs.
The seeds were widely scattered
and planted in the ground,
till dandelions sprouted
with blossoms that abound.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you, rama devi. I'm glad you enjoyed this counting poem.
Brooke
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:-))
Comment from robina1978
Lovely children's poem and it does not only teach them to count but to love your favourite flowers too. I enjoyed your poem, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Lovely children's poem and it does not only teach them to count but to love your favourite flowers too. I enjoyed your poem, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Ine, thank you so much, my friend, for this generous response to my counting poem :-) Brooke
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Ten Dandelions' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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'Ten Dandelions' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Duchess, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Brooke, you're very welcome :-)the Duchess
Comment from kiwisteveh
Well, you know my thoughts about dandelions!
However, this is another of your lovely counting poems - you should gather them up and put them all together in a book - publish perhaps?
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Well, you know my thoughts about dandelions!
However, this is another of your lovely counting poems - you should gather them up and put them all together in a book - publish perhaps?
Steve
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Steve, thank you so much. I am in the process of going through my portfolio and organizing poems that would fit together in groups, and counting poems is among the categories :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
Your love for the dandelion plant comes through in this poem. I mean how many other persons could come up with 10 completely different descriptive verses for the dandelion.
good rhyming and good imagery
lulube
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Your love for the dandelion plant comes through in this poem. I mean how many other persons could come up with 10 completely different descriptive verses for the dandelion.
good rhyming and good imagery
lulube
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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lulube, thank you so much - yep, love those gorgeous flowers :-) Brooke
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lol and my 5 footers are back and thriving.
lulube
Comment from Leineco
Very fun counting poems. . .especially for princesses :-)
The 4th stanza though. . .did you mean for the "stayed" to drop down to line two? I only ask, because it seems to fall more naturally at the end of line one (to my ear anyway)
Either way. . . very cute poem :-)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Very fun counting poems. . .especially for princesses :-)
The 4th stanza though. . .did you mean for the "stayed" to drop down to line two? I only ask, because it seems to fall more naturally at the end of line one (to my ear anyway)
Either way. . . very cute poem :-)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Leineco - I will have to revisit that stanza :-) Brooke
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Very nice rhyming poem. Great creative mind created this. Very well written. Good form and content. Great job! Keep writing!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Very nice rhyming poem. Great creative mind created this. Very well written. Good form and content. Great job! Keep writing!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Raphael, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
love this children's poem of counting from ten to one
good visual through verses to portray message
good enjambment through verses to allow free flow
good rhyme through out verses
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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love this children's poem of counting from ten to one
good visual through verses to portray message
good enjambment through verses to allow free flow
good rhyme through out verses
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Smoothiecool - thank you so much :-) Brooke
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most welcome
have a blessed weekend
cheers ..SC >> Faye
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Another excellent dandelion poem that will each Sawyer more than just how to count down. The last stanza provides info on how plant seeds are spread for a new season. The rhymes seem natural and unforced. This is a very good read. Thanks for sharing with your old friend, Bob
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Another excellent dandelion poem that will each Sawyer more than just how to count down. The last stanza provides info on how plant seeds are spread for a new season. The rhymes seem natural and unforced. This is a very good read. Thanks for sharing with your old friend, Bob
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Bob, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem, my friend :-) Brooke
