Skeletons
free verse60 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
I guess we all have secrets and skeletons locked away in our history. This is very well done Teresa. I am out of sixes but I wish I had one left for this.
Good picture and artwork.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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I guess we all have secrets and skeletons locked away in our history. This is very well done Teresa. I am out of sixes but I wish I had one left for this.
Good picture and artwork.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Janet:)
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Teresa
I appreciated this theme of secrets kept. I think, as children, our parents tried to hide the truth from us as a protective instinct. Maybe they believed we would not be able to process the information or they were just embarrassed to broach a tender subject.
Loved the metaphors you used to describe this effect.
Skeletons always dredge up an image of the grave, which is where all the family secrets are buried. Makes one wonder if we grew up too protected? Only time may tell...
Nice work with this emotionally charged write. It was a pleasure to absorb. Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Hi Teresa
I appreciated this theme of secrets kept. I think, as children, our parents tried to hide the truth from us as a protective instinct. Maybe they believed we would not be able to process the information or they were just embarrassed to broach a tender subject.
Loved the metaphors you used to describe this effect.
Skeletons always dredge up an image of the grave, which is where all the family secrets are buried. Makes one wonder if we grew up too protected? Only time may tell...
Nice work with this emotionally charged write. It was a pleasure to absorb. Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thanks Bill:)
Comment from boxergirl
Oh wow. This is a powerful free verse about how we like to keep our family secrets locked up nice and tight. I loved the whole closet imagery. Very poignant ending with the secrets locked away forever.
Did Dean show you how to do that skeleton thingy? lol
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Oh wow. This is a powerful free verse about how we like to keep our family secrets locked up nice and tight. I loved the whole closet imagery. Very poignant ending with the secrets locked away forever.
Did Dean show you how to do that skeleton thingy? lol
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Yes, Dean showed me the animated thingy:) Thank you so much for the awesome gift of the six!!
Comment from padumachitta
Hi Teresa. I figure the six says it all:-)
I loved the images in this, the way the words flowed and made me look at my thoughts, the final ..oh so final, loss of claritiy...the skeleton now perhaps still,,,but never buried...
good one, padumachitta
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Hi Teresa. I figure the six says it all:-)
I loved the images in this, the way the words flowed and made me look at my thoughts, the final ..oh so final, loss of claritiy...the skeleton now perhaps still,,,but never buried...
good one, padumachitta
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much my friend for the awesome rating!!
Comment from Karen B.
I love your imagery of the skeletons wanting out but being held down by heavy chains, not allowing they/she to ever be free. Your poem raises some interesting issues, especially with so many digging up family histories nowadays. Very well written and a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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I love your imagery of the skeletons wanting out but being held down by heavy chains, not allowing they/she to ever be free. Your poem raises some interesting issues, especially with so many digging up family histories nowadays. Very well written and a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thanks Karen:)
Comment from GWHARGIS
IS this based on some remnant of truth? I loved the use of the skeleton as an actual thing an not a metaphor for secrets. Great imagery and heartbreaking ending. Sometimes it is best to let things be buried with the person. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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IS this based on some remnant of truth? I loved the use of the skeleton as an actual thing an not a metaphor for secrets. Great imagery and heartbreaking ending. Sometimes it is best to let things be buried with the person. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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It the metaphor of buried secrets of my Mom. Thanks for the great review:)
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
Well done! This poem has so many hidden meanings within the stanzas that it really resonates with the reader. I love the way you give life to the literal "skeletons in the closet" as if they were living entities! The mention of the chain weighing her down really gives rise to great imagery as the reader considers the hidden secrets they themselves possess that weigh heavily upon them. I love the GIF at the end of the poem of the moving skeleton symbolizing its freedom now that the individual who kept them locked up has passed on. The photo at the top of the page is also perfect for this free verse piece. The bone colored background used in this poem is a nice addition as well uniting the photo, background color, and poem together beautifully! Excellent imagery created in the description on the woman's pink-tinged lips, and the line describing the "heavy, oxidized chains" that prevented her from sharing her deepest secrets! Just a richly detailed poem that reverberates with the reader long after the poem has been finished. Well designed and exquisitely written!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Well done! This poem has so many hidden meanings within the stanzas that it really resonates with the reader. I love the way you give life to the literal "skeletons in the closet" as if they were living entities! The mention of the chain weighing her down really gives rise to great imagery as the reader considers the hidden secrets they themselves possess that weigh heavily upon them. I love the GIF at the end of the poem of the moving skeleton symbolizing its freedom now that the individual who kept them locked up has passed on. The photo at the top of the page is also perfect for this free verse piece. The bone colored background used in this poem is a nice addition as well uniting the photo, background color, and poem together beautifully! Excellent imagery created in the description on the woman's pink-tinged lips, and the line describing the "heavy, oxidized chains" that prevented her from sharing her deepest secrets! Just a richly detailed poem that reverberates with the reader long after the poem has been finished. Well designed and exquisitely written!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thanks for all the comments and for the wonderful gift of the six. Thanks too for noticing the bone-colored background:)
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Youre very welcome i like to notice all elements of a piece if youre like me you are very particular about your colors and photo choices to enhance your writing! :)
Comment from livelylinda
Teresa: once I crept out of the closet, 95% of all my skeletons followed right behind. I was fascinated by the creeping, moving little picture of skeleton at the end of your poem. I kept watching it move and kept giggling. . .I humor so easily. . . I love how you have written, in a rambling, yeah, it happened, sort of way, nonchalantly. And, I just love that creeping skeleton! Linda
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Teresa: once I crept out of the closet, 95% of all my skeletons followed right behind. I was fascinated by the creeping, moving little picture of skeleton at the end of your poem. I kept watching it move and kept giggling. . .I humor so easily. . . I love how you have written, in a rambling, yeah, it happened, sort of way, nonchalantly. And, I just love that creeping skeleton! Linda
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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I'm glad you liked the moving skeleton:) and thanks for the great review.
Comment from ravenblack
Many times what one considers skeletons are merely bones and it is our curiosity that assembles them into a skeleton suitable for Halloween. Sometimes it is best to let the bones stay buried. Besides, clavicles make good hangers.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Many times what one considers skeletons are merely bones and it is our curiosity that assembles them into a skeleton suitable for Halloween. Sometimes it is best to let the bones stay buried. Besides, clavicles make good hangers.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the great review. I loved your comment about them making great hangers:)
Comment from Eric1
Well we all have some sort of skeletons in our cupboard, at least that is what I'm always being told! this is a wonderful poem Theresa, It flows so smoothly, My wife says her closet is full of skeletons, I think she's after a new wardrobe!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Well we all have some sort of skeletons in our cupboard, at least that is what I'm always being told! this is a wonderful poem Theresa, It flows so smoothly, My wife says her closet is full of skeletons, I think she's after a new wardrobe!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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thanks ERic:)
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You are welcome my friend
