Skeletons
free verse60 total reviews
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Some unique words in that closet of secrets. i love that skeleton. Kind of funny. This is a good written poem. Sort of reminds me of that song Randy Travis sung. 'Digging up bones.' I'm sure, we are carry our secrets to the grave. You never know what bones are buried in their donjon. I got a smile out of this crafty poem. Good imagination went into the making of this gem. Cadaver, that is. Count your doubloon. wackydo
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Some unique words in that closet of secrets. i love that skeleton. Kind of funny. This is a good written poem. Sort of reminds me of that song Randy Travis sung. 'Digging up bones.' I'm sure, we are carry our secrets to the grave. You never know what bones are buried in their donjon. I got a smile out of this crafty poem. Good imagination went into the making of this gem. Cadaver, that is. Count your doubloon. wackydo
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the great review on this:)
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My pleasure.
Comment from RGstar
I guess this is written with near experience. So many skeletons, yet the question remains....is it right or wrong to let them out...who do they hurt? Are the answers worth more than the questions, will the y speak to us in tongue with a language we do not understand or a language we chose not to understand?
I guess those skeletons never die...or maybe with time they might.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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I guess this is written with near experience. So many skeletons, yet the question remains....is it right or wrong to let them out...who do they hurt? Are the answers worth more than the questions, will the y speak to us in tongue with a language we do not understand or a language we chose not to understand?
I guess those skeletons never die...or maybe with time they might.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you RG for the great review;)
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Skeletons' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Nothing could be more interesting than a death bed confession. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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'Skeletons' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Nothing could be more interesting than a death bed confession. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much:)
TAB_that's me, you're more than welcome.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from kiwisteveh
This starts off seemingly as a tale of supernatural - real skeletons in the closet, but by the end there is more of a feeling that this is the old metaphor - that you are talking about a relative who took secrets to the grave.
Interesting piece.
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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This starts off seemingly as a tale of supernatural - real skeletons in the closet, but by the end there is more of a feeling that this is the old metaphor - that you are talking about a relative who took secrets to the grave.
Interesting piece.
Steve
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you Steve:)
Comment from mfowler
Your central metaphor of 'the skeletons in the closet' plays out effectively throughout the course of your poem. These are the mysteries presumably of a mother with a terrifying past that has clearly affected the person whose voice narrates this story. Sadly, she takes her secrets to the grave (masked from death bed confessions by dementia) leaving the voice unsatisfied. I enjoyed the central imagery immensely and the support images you create (eg heavy, oxidized chains, so old, that wrapped
around her), keep the poem intact as a whole, and add immensely to the emotional impact of your verse.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Your central metaphor of 'the skeletons in the closet' plays out effectively throughout the course of your poem. These are the mysteries presumably of a mother with a terrifying past that has clearly affected the person whose voice narrates this story. Sadly, she takes her secrets to the grave (masked from death bed confessions by dementia) leaving the voice unsatisfied. I enjoyed the central imagery immensely and the support images you create (eg heavy, oxidized chains, so old, that wrapped
around her), keep the poem intact as a whole, and add immensely to the emotional impact of your verse.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from faragon
Very nicely written and a very good subject! We all have skeletons in our closets...some we share...most we keep. I like the way the poem flows and the use of the pictures as well!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Very nicely written and a very good subject! We all have skeletons in our closets...some we share...most we keep. I like the way the poem flows and the use of the pictures as well!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks:)
Comment from tbacha58
As all of those who knew the truth
passed away, my only hope would be
a death bed confession,
but it was not to be as dementia
crowded in her head, tainting the memories.
Ok T. And what brought up this amazing poem my friend. You are unbeatable, your idea`s form in that brain of yours at night, and here you come out a winner. Loved the combination of each paragraph , strong vocabulary , and a daring poem. Very well done T. Enjoyed reading it. Love u Terry xoxo
I am fine will write to you tomorrow. I was sleeping all day. xoxo
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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As all of those who knew the truth
passed away, my only hope would be
a death bed confession,
but it was not to be as dementia
crowded in her head, tainting the memories.
Ok T. And what brought up this amazing poem my friend. You are unbeatable, your idea`s form in that brain of yours at night, and here you come out a winner. Loved the combination of each paragraph , strong vocabulary , and a daring poem. Very well done T. Enjoyed reading it. Love u Terry xoxo
I am fine will write to you tomorrow. I was sleeping all day. xoxo
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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I wrote this when I was thinking of my Mom and all the things she kept secret from her past before she married my Dad. We never learned the whole story (stories). Thanks for the great review:) I hope you were not sick that you were sleeping all day. My prayers with you.
Comment from rrabinow
I enjoyed reading your poem. I like how you describe what skeletons are to people. I agree that sometimes things are just locked away and a person may never want to have them come out. Great poem. I like the picture that you used.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I like how you describe what skeletons are to people. I agree that sometimes things are just locked away and a person may never want to have them come out. Great poem. I like the picture that you used.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much:)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Victoria K
I really enjoyed this poem.
Personifying the skeletons is an excellent touch; the image of them hiding with teeth chattering is particularly vivid.
I'm sure you have hit on a universal theme, as many of us have degrees of "skeletons" in our closet. As life progresses, it becomes harder and harder to hide them!
Very well done.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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I really enjoyed this poem.
Personifying the skeletons is an excellent touch; the image of them hiding with teeth chattering is particularly vivid.
I'm sure you have hit on a universal theme, as many of us have degrees of "skeletons" in our closet. As life progresses, it becomes harder and harder to hide them!
Very well done.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much:)
Comment from Set in Stone
Great use of a sustained metaphor. I am really impressed with the way you've been able to work those "skeletal" terms and images into each stanza. The last stanza really ties things together well. Very nicely done!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Great use of a sustained metaphor. I am really impressed with the way you've been able to work those "skeletal" terms and images into each stanza. The last stanza really ties things together well. Very nicely done!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thank you very much:)
