haiku (watching the flowers)
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Comment from Set in Stone
Interesting paradox, isn't it? They need sun but die if the sun doesn't disappear to let the rain fall on them. I never thought about it quite that way. Quite profound for a poem written with so few words. I'm impressed!
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Interesting paradox, isn't it? They need sun but die if the sun doesn't disappear to let the rain fall on them. I never thought about it quite that way. Quite profound for a poem written with so few words. I'm impressed!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from LIJ Red
This calls for another haiku, beginning with your third line, retaining your second, then a sartori commenting that many things are needed to blossom. Which means that your work is excellent.
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This calls for another haiku, beginning with your third line, retaining your second, then a sartori commenting that many things are needed to blossom. Which means that your work is excellent.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Jean Lutz
I ponder, too. I like the color scheme. My understanding of haiku is that it captures a snapshot of what one looks upon. For me this seems to reflect rather than show a concrete image.
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I ponder, too. I like the color scheme. My understanding of haiku is that it captures a snapshot of what one looks upon. For me this seems to reflect rather than show a concrete image.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from dennis0530
It is true that all living plants need sunlight and water.
Flower bearing plants especially respond to the warmth of the sun to open full bloom. But equal to this is their need for water. However, because of not being taken care of by humans, they rely on rain for moisture requirement.
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It is true that all living plants need sunlight and water.
Flower bearing plants especially respond to the warmth of the sun to open full bloom. But equal to this is their need for water. However, because of not being taken care of by humans, they rely on rain for moisture requirement.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from royowen
A good entry in this nature haiku poetry contest, it's true that without life giving rain, the sun would evaporate more moisture, water nourishes and sun brings growth! A worthy entry in this contest, well done, good luck in the contest! blessings, Roy.
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A good entry in this nature haiku poetry contest, it's true that without life giving rain, the sun would evaporate more moisture, water nourishes and sun brings growth! A worthy entry in this contest, well done, good luck in the contest! blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, but it isn't done to the contest requirements. you have three fragmented sentences instead of one complete thought and a line of insight. I just don't want you to be dismissed from the contest.
flowers lean
toward the sun's warm rays
they thirst for rain
just an example of how it should be. the first two lines or the last two lines create a single thought.
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this is very well written, mystery writer, but it isn't done to the contest requirements. you have three fragmented sentences instead of one complete thought and a line of insight. I just don't want you to be dismissed from the contest.
flowers lean
toward the sun's warm rays
they thirst for rain
just an example of how it should be. the first two lines or the last two lines create a single thought.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
