Greenwood
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Comment from adewpearl
Your opening sets the stage effectively and also introduces the main character well
An intriguing situation with fascinating characters - will this be the first chapter of a novel?
Brooke
Your opening sets the stage effectively and also introduces the main character well
An intriguing situation with fascinating characters - will this be the first chapter of a novel?
Brooke
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from A Matter Of Words
This looks like a wonderful start to a novel. The story is well-written and presents a quandary for Donna, which turns out to be the person in disguise. Excellent. I
This looks like a wonderful start to a novel. The story is well-written and presents a quandary for Donna, which turns out to be the person in disguise. Excellent. I
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Eric1
It may have been hard to pare down author, but the result is brilliant, a great story with a great ending, believable well drawn characters and an atmosphere that reminded me of Mrs Danvers in Rebecca. Great story should do very well!
It may have been hard to pare down author, but the result is brilliant, a great story with a great ending, believable well drawn characters and an atmosphere that reminded me of Mrs Danvers in Rebecca. Great story should do very well!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
I think the story moved along quite well, however, I got confused at the end. I reread and could not make the pieces call into place. Assuming it was my own error I will grade it accordingly. Best of luck. AT=/
I think the story moved along quite well, however, I got confused at the end. I reread and could not make the pieces call into place. Assuming it was my own error I will grade it accordingly. Best of luck. AT=/
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Msmasero
I don't think it came across as very hard to write this. It's flowing, it's predictable though.
You should have placed these Dona's thoughts "Dona hoped she was about to learn about her birth mother....."
After she had received the news from the lawyer.then there would have been a surprise element.
Just my humble suggestion.
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I don't think it came across as very hard to write this. It's flowing, it's predictable though.
You should have placed these Dona's thoughts "Dona hoped she was about to learn about her birth mother....."
After she had received the news from the lawyer.then there would have been a surprise element.
Just my humble suggestion.
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Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Pyrrho
Well, the lawyer being a female was as much of a shock to me as is the fact that SHE is Donna's mother. It still does not explain where the large inheritance came from. Excellent prose, however.
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Well, the lawyer being a female was as much of a shock to me as is the fact that SHE is Donna's mother. It still does not explain where the large inheritance came from. Excellent prose, however.
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Comment Written 29-Jul-2014