Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I'm not sure if the colored lines add or detract from the content. Other than that, good use of internal rhyme, alliteration and assonance. I like the concept of being a single strand in the family tree. I'm working on mine when I find time.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks, Shari. Yeah, I know the colors won't matter when they judge it, but I had fun playing with it. I just got back from my cousins' reunion. 8-)

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

chromatic colors, pieces placed in patterns...excellent use of alliteration
vivid descriptive detail that is easy and inviting to visualize
effective metaphor of the family as tapestry
I love the genuine emotion and imagery in your closing words
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Brooke! 8-)
Inspired by attending a cousins' reunion. We are a colorful group.lol

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

This is lovely - it is so creative with the colors and the strands. I would not have thought about arranging family relationships that way, but it is spot on. Best wishes on good luck in the contest. AT=/

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, AT. It came to me in a vision...well, not really...I was at a cousins' reunion and realized we were certainly a colorful bunch but knitted together will love. 8-)

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

I like your use of color in the format though it almost gave my eyes a nervous breakdown. Your flow and rather intricate use of rhyme stitched it all together.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks so much. I appreciate your review and so sorry if the colors strained your eyes. 8-)

reply by ravenblack on 31-Jul-2014

Oh, no biggie. My optometrist will be sending you the bill.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I absolutely love this ....I have often thought families were tapestry....but you wove it together so well.......I am glad you are a strand of yours and I am a strand of mine.......well done...
God bless

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks, Jenny. I just got back from a cousins' reunion. We are a colorful group, but I am blessed with strong family ties. 8-)

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi Boxergirl,

Like the artwork, your formatting compliments it, and the poem is well stated.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Jax. I appreciate the review! 8-)

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, boxergirl, you did an excellent job writing this free style poem about the tapestry of who you are. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thank you very much for your review and kind comments. 8-)

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Karen;
another word you could use that does you well is just one small thread that probably could fit in nicely at the ending.
I really did love the which you did in encompassing a tapestry to fulfill the family tree and your composition is outrageously great for each line has its own colors that show the different colors of a tapestry. Very ingenious and inventive and creative as your imagination really takes a foothold in your poem.
Your imagery is very descriptive and expressive throughout In your picture is very complementary to your poem.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks, Alex. I like your suggestion. 8-)

I changed the last part to "one single strand" because I had already used the word thread earlier. I think it works much better than the original. The change was a great suggestion. Thanks so much! 8-)

reply by krys123 on 01-Aug-2014

You are so sincerely welcome Karen.
Alex

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

It sounds like a very firmly bound tapestry or family unit. Well chosen words and imagery to convey your message. I spotted an error, in line 4, it should read eons ago-hope you don't mind. Good luck in the contest, nice presentation. Faye

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Never will I mind. Thanks so much, Faye! 8-)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Boxergirl - What a lovely idea - good use of metaphor to describe your family tree as a tapestry. The use of colour in your text enhances the words. A good read - Kind regards Dorothy............Good Luck in the Contest

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014

Thanks, Dorothy. I kind of impressed myself with the whole color thing. I'm not very computer savvy. lol