Breezes part 2
Wind beneath my wings.81 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Some on told me once that when you find a penny, it's the Holy Spirit saying hi. That has stuck with me forever and now I actually say hi back. I know, I'm ridiculous. Anyway, I enjoyed reading your free flowing poem. It's peaceful and brings a great message.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Some on told me once that when you find a penny, it's the Holy Spirit saying hi. That has stuck with me forever and now I actually say hi back. I know, I'm ridiculous. Anyway, I enjoyed reading your free flowing poem. It's peaceful and brings a great message.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the support , great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from rjuselius
this would be excellent lyrics:) i love the metaphor of the wind being after all holy spirit, it turns the poem upside down.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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this would be excellent lyrics:) i love the metaphor of the wind being after all holy spirit, it turns the poem upside down.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Rebekka, for this lovely review and comments. Blessings, Roy,
Comment from krys123
Roy;
and magnificent picture that you have chosen for your poem which complements it so much. One a thank you for your authors notes which to help in evaluating your poem's review.
Using the breeze as an imaginary force of faith and holy inspiration is very enlightening. Also the imagery and metaphor using God's breath as a holy inspiration is truly inventive and creative.
Throughout this poem your use of descriptive and expressive imagery, in a way, Help solidify your topic in concept of the Holy Spirit.
Your rhyming is neither forced nor labored while your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Roy;
and magnificent picture that you have chosen for your poem which complements it so much. One a thank you for your authors notes which to help in evaluating your poem's review.
Using the breeze as an imaginary force of faith and holy inspiration is very enlightening. Also the imagery and metaphor using God's breath as a holy inspiration is truly inventive and creative.
Throughout this poem your use of descriptive and expressive imagery, in a way, Help solidify your topic in concept of the Holy Spirit.
Your rhyming is neither forced nor labored while your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for this comprehensive and inspiring review and comments, I appreciate the fantastic input into my poetry you have Alex, words can't express my gratitude, blessings, Roy.
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You are extremely and sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from LIJ Red
I thought the trees flapping made the wind blow. Just kidding-short reviews being less helpful. I see no way I can improve on your excellent work here.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I thought the trees flapping made the wind blow. Just kidding-short reviews being less helpful. I see no way I can improve on your excellent work here.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you, it's as good a theory as anything else, in the short poems it's to know what to say, thanks for the great stars though, blessings, Roy,
Comment from fastdigits
Ah, the wind beneath my wings, a poem
written in the form of a song that sings
as it floats down the screen in a warm
cascade of thoughtful verse that makes
one stop and think and then begin to
sing.
Well done
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Ah, the wind beneath my wings, a poem
written in the form of a song that sings
as it floats down the screen in a warm
cascade of thoughtful verse that makes
one stop and think and then begin to
sing.
Well done
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the great comments and review,blessings, Roy.
Comment from RYME4U
Very well written. I like the lyrical quality here and the rhyming is nicely done. I like the spiritual nature of the poem and the way it is presented.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Very well written. I like the lyrical quality here and the rhyming is nicely done. I like the spiritual nature of the poem and the way it is presented.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review, and comments. Blessings, Roy,
Comment from Pyrrho
Mmmm. I was unaware that the Holy Spirit had any duties after he lay with the human Mary and fathered the son that is not the son of the Father. But it reads well and is in a positive voice.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Mmmm. I was unaware that the Holy Spirit had any duties after he lay with the human Mary and fathered the son that is not the son of the Father. But it reads well and is in a positive voice.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Drew Delaney
The rhyming is all good but the east and sleet. I was trying to think what would help but no suggestions at present. I think in songs, you are more liberated than in poems. I may be wrong, but that is something I have noticed. Thanks for sharing this. Lovely!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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The rhyming is all good but the east and sleet. I was trying to think what would help but no suggestions at present. I think in songs, you are more liberated than in poems. I may be wrong, but that is something I have noticed. Thanks for sharing this. Lovely!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Drew, for the observation, I have thought about it without losing the integrity of the song, thank you for the great review and comments, blessings, Roy,
Comment from Acquired Taste
This is indeed a spiritual piece. It just flows so beautiful and your phrases are comforting and soothing to the reader. I find it also very visual. I imagine it must be beautiful being presented by a choir. Lovely. AT=/
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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This is indeed a spiritual piece. It just flows so beautiful and your phrases are comforting and soothing to the reader. I find it also very visual. I imagine it must be beautiful being presented by a choir. Lovely. AT=/
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for these great comments and review, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh breath of God that moves my soul,
who opens eyes and makes me whole,
please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day!
This was very spiritually uplifting. A great spiritual song done in good AABB rhyming. Very emotive and moving. Comforting and soothing.
Thank you for the terrific author notes also.
Love, Y.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Oh breath of God that moves my soul,
who opens eyes and makes me whole,
please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day!
This was very spiritually uplifting. A great spiritual song done in good AABB rhyming. Very emotive and moving. Comforting and soothing.
Thank you for the terrific author notes also.
Love, Y.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for these delightful words and review, blessings, Roy.
