Breezes part 2
Wind beneath my wings.81 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
"And God sent the south wind to cool the land." Sometimes you use punctuation - sometimes not? One line I got stuck on (didn't flow) 'then west you swing brings rain released' how about 'swinging west the rains you release' that would rhyme as well? I know how passionate you are about praising the Lord.
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"And God sent the south wind to cool the land." Sometimes you use punctuation - sometimes not? One line I got stuck on (didn't flow) 'then west you swing brings rain released' how about 'swinging west the rains you release' that would rhyme as well? I know how passionate you are about praising the Lord.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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I guess I'll have to disagree with you Kaye, musically it scans beautifully, but thanks for the great review and comments, Roy,
Comment from GWinterwin
I like this song about the wind or the holy spirit as it refers to. Good word flow and rhyming make it a neat poem with a neat message.
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I like this song about the wind or the holy spirit as it refers to. Good word flow and rhyming make it a neat poem with a neat message.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for lovely remarks and review! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Sueswrite
This is written very nicely. I had read part 1, and I was happy to see part 2. I love how you quote sections of the Bible, referring to your poem. Your photo attached is just perfect. Best wishes to you!
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This is written very nicely. I had read part 1, and I was happy to see part 2. I love how you quote sections of the Bible, referring to your poem. Your photo attached is just perfect. Best wishes to you!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you for these really nice words and excellent review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Irish Rain
Beautiful reflections here on 'the breath of God', the Holy Spirit, I especially liked the phrase...'Oh breath of wind, you're like the sea...who keeps it filled, who makes it be?'...such mysteries are only His...I loved this...Blessings...Judy
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Beautiful reflections here on 'the breath of God', the Holy Spirit, I especially liked the phrase...'Oh breath of wind, you're like the sea...who keeps it filled, who makes it be?'...such mysteries are only His...I loved this...Blessings...Judy
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the outstanding review and remarks, I really appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
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You are always welcome!
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Oh breath of God that moves my soul
who opens eyes and makes me whole
please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day.
This verse alone, is the most inspiring and beautiful, I have read and reviewed in quite sometime. Thank you Roy, for this wonderful poem.
Love, tell Elaine hello, we are getting ready to go west again soon.
:-) Carolyn
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Oh breath of God that moves my soul
who opens eyes and makes me whole
please dwell with me, forever stay,
In sun or storm, in night and day.
This verse alone, is the most inspiring and beautiful, I have read and reviewed in quite sometime. Thank you Roy, for this wonderful poem.
Love, tell Elaine hello, we are getting ready to go west again soon.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you Carolyn for this wonderful review and comments, you've made my day! Blessings from us to you and Larry! Roy,
Comment from DR DIP
really nice, really nice!
Just one question Roy, in the first verse:
Oh little wind who bids you rise,
do unseen hands mould width and size,
You've changed, and blow now from the east,
then west you swing brings rain released
did you mean:
Oh little wind who bids you rise,
to unseen hands mould width and size,
You've changed, and blow now from the east,
then west you swing brings rain released
The only reason I say this is I don't understand the flow on
from the first line, if the second line starts with a question?
but when I change it the second line then doesn't work so I am a bit confused otherwise its a great song.
just curious or totally ignorant, I am one or the other lol
with respect, dipster
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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really nice, really nice!
Just one question Roy, in the first verse:
Oh little wind who bids you rise,
do unseen hands mould width and size,
You've changed, and blow now from the east,
then west you swing brings rain released
did you mean:
Oh little wind who bids you rise,
to unseen hands mould width and size,
You've changed, and blow now from the east,
then west you swing brings rain released
The only reason I say this is I don't understand the flow on
from the first line, if the second line starts with a question?
but when I change it the second line then doesn't work so I am a bit confused otherwise its a great song.
just curious or totally ignorant, I am one or the other lol
with respect, dipster
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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I don't know what you're talking about Dip, they're both questions? Thank you for the great review, blessings, Roy.
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forget about it..the no question mark threw me
dip
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You were right about the question mark! Dip,
Comment from DALLAS01
Enjoyed the poem. A wonderful metaphor. This has great rhythm and rhyme. Favorite stanza is:
Are you friend or are you foe,
will you howl or gently blow,
will you let me see your face,
or run away without a trace?
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Enjoyed the poem. A wonderful metaphor. This has great rhythm and rhyme. Favorite stanza is:
Are you friend or are you foe,
will you howl or gently blow,
will you let me see your face,
or run away without a trace?
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for these great comments and review, blessings, Roy.
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Roy,
I six star love this second part, my friend. The last stanza so ties it all up in a bow. Such a wonderful message in this. The artwork is awesome and compliments your work.
Well done!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jackie
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Hi Roy,
I six star love this second part, my friend. The last stanza so ties it all up in a bow. Such a wonderful message in this. The artwork is awesome and compliments your work.
Well done!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jackie
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Jackie, for this wonderful review, your are very generous, I appreciate it so much, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Interesting take on the religious side of poetry. A delightful picture is painted as the Holy Spirit. Well expressed with a nice even flow of verse.
A very enjoyable read. Smiles, Robin :)
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Interesting take on the religious side of poetry. A delightful picture is painted as the Holy Spirit. Well expressed with a nice even flow of verse.
A very enjoyable read. Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Robin for this delightful review and comments blessings, Roy.
Comment from seaglass
This worship song, addressing the Holy Spirit, but yet, giving full glory to the Father is inspiring. The rhyme and meter are even and flowing as a song should be. It would very nice to hear this with its melody.
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This worship song, addressing the Holy Spirit, but yet, giving full glory to the Father is inspiring. The rhyme and meter are even and flowing as a song should be. It would very nice to hear this with its melody.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for these delightful words and accompanying review, I will get around to posting the whole song, if I can get off my backside, blessings Roy.
