Ah, To Be Twenty-One Again!
Poetic Snippet112 total reviews
Comment from janalma
How well I remember those days. When I was young and thought in September that Christmas was so long in coming. Now in September, I think, 'Oh my gosh, it's almost Christmas and I haven't even started shopping.' Lol. Anyway, your poem tells it like it is. Time is a roller coaster ride--slow at first, going up, but gangbusters from then on.
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How well I remember those days. When I was young and thought in September that Christmas was so long in coming. Now in September, I think, 'Oh my gosh, it's almost Christmas and I haven't even started shopping.' Lol. Anyway, your poem tells it like it is. Time is a roller coaster ride--slow at first, going up, but gangbusters from then on.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Moonwillow,
I believe you've captured the quickening of time with this limited poetic snippet... I know I'm aging just reading this... did I really need reminding? Great job and wonderful construction... an enjoyable read... thanks.
With our thoughts we create,
a time warp,
James xx
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Hi Moonwillow,
I believe you've captured the quickening of time with this limited poetic snippet... I know I'm aging just reading this... did I really need reminding? Great job and wonderful construction... an enjoyable read... thanks.
With our thoughts we create,
a time warp,
James xx
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from costellsgirl33
Hahaha, I couldn't agree with you more!
I noticed years ago, as I got older, time started to go by more quickly. It's actually quite scary. I am only 33 but it seems like yesterday I was 25.......
Great job, lol! I love it
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Hahaha, I couldn't agree with you more!
I noticed years ago, as I got older, time started to go by more quickly. It's actually quite scary. I am only 33 but it seems like yesterday I was 25.......
Great job, lol! I love it
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from nancyjam
Great illustration for this poem which conveys
A truth about time.
When we're young we want it to speed up - then
We get closer to death we wish it would slow down!
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Great illustration for this poem which conveys
A truth about time.
When we're young we want it to speed up - then
We get closer to death we wish it would slow down!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from jennyindy
Oh yes, you have captured time/age perspective spot on! I love the final line especially because it starts with verbage that plays off the last word of the first line. Drag vs. Flies, and then using the bat cliché to represent the aged perspective is perfect, conjuring up terms that could apply to those of us well past our twenties. For example:
She's gone batty, or
That old bat!
Great job,
Jenny
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Oh yes, you have captured time/age perspective spot on! I love the final line especially because it starts with verbage that plays off the last word of the first line. Drag vs. Flies, and then using the bat cliché to represent the aged perspective is perfect, conjuring up terms that could apply to those of us well past our twenties. For example:
She's gone batty, or
That old bat!
Great job,
Jenny
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from abbasjoy
Such a profound message in such few lines. I totally agree with the statement, and will add, "therefore use everyday wisely."
What amazes me is that the number of hours in the day never changes. It's definitely what we do with those 24 hours that matter, and will cause us to change.
It's all about perspective.
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Such a profound message in such few lines. I totally agree with the statement, and will add, "therefore use everyday wisely."
What amazes me is that the number of hours in the day never changes. It's definitely what we do with those 24 hours that matter, and will cause us to change.
It's all about perspective.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Lulube
I can appreciate your point of view on life's clock but I disagree with the age. but that is just my life and it wasn't till I was a mom at 30 yrs,. that time now has gone by fast and I am wondering how many years are left.
lulube
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I can appreciate your point of view on life's clock but I disagree with the age. but that is just my life and it wasn't till I was a mom at 30 yrs,. that time now has gone by fast and I am wondering how many years are left.
lulube
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from SilverWoulfCreations
giggle. Yes it can certainly do that. Time itself Can be a trickster. Very short sweet and to the point. Thank you for sharing.
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giggle. Yes it can certainly do that. Time itself Can be a trickster. Very short sweet and to the point. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Andrewajgblue
Ah, now this Is something we can all relate too, it certainly does fly by, this was a short and to the point poem, I thought it was presented really nicely , the picture went really well with it , great work:!
Andrew
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Ah, now this Is something we can all relate too, it certainly does fly by, this was a short and to the point poem, I thought it was presented really nicely , the picture went really well with it , great work:!
Andrew
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from songlines
To the point and true! I remember my mother-in-law telling me that on my 21st birthday - and not believing! But of course now I know it is true. You write well and encourage me to try a snippet myself before time has flown any further.
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To the point and true! I remember my mother-in-law telling me that on my 21st birthday - and not believing! But of course now I know it is true. You write well and encourage me to try a snippet myself before time has flown any further.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
