Too Ordinary
an afternoon passes97 total reviews
Comment from Bryan G
This a great poem about connecting with self. The key to understanding is to know yourself. To be at one with all things begins with the quiet moment embracing the universe. I have read that the way of the haiku is a twenty-four hour a day experience. That is what I hope to achieve in my life. Thanks for making me think about the important things.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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This a great poem about connecting with self. The key to understanding is to know yourself. To be at one with all things begins with the quiet moment embracing the universe. I have read that the way of the haiku is a twenty-four hour a day experience. That is what I hope to achieve in my life. Thanks for making me think about the important things.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from Trybuck
I've always loved thunderstorms and I like the way you described them here - peaceful violence - a comfort and companion..
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I've always loved thunderstorms and I like the way you described them here - peaceful violence - a comfort and companion..
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from kiwijenny
Ooooo I did that shut off cortex thing and really reveled in this....I love storms and I loved your positive spin on this...the storm rolls in a a comfort and companion to me.......loved it....I am feeling contemplative today because it is raining and the world is greening around me
God bless
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Ooooo I did that shut off cortex thing and really reveled in this....I love storms and I loved your positive spin on this...the storm rolls in a a comfort and companion to me.......loved it....I am feeling contemplative today because it is raining and the world is greening around me
God bless
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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:)
Comment from dragonpoet
It is sometimes hard to let yourself sit in silence and take in things around you. I like the storms 'peaceful violence' oxymoron. But a good thunderstorm that does no damage is a violent war of nature that creates peaceful flowers.
I also like the stumble with confidence at the end which we all have once in a while.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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It is sometimes hard to let yourself sit in silence and take in things around you. I like the storms 'peaceful violence' oxymoron. But a good thunderstorm that does no damage is a violent war of nature that creates peaceful flowers.
I also like the stumble with confidence at the end which we all have once in a while.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
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You're welcome/
Joan
Comment from Emily George
Your poem has a steady rhythm to it as if strolling along, which you state in your first line
"A walk, a pace"
I love the 3rd verse its structure is without fault
Clever tap dance at the end. Fred Astaire. LOL
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Your poem has a steady rhythm to it as if strolling along, which you state in your first line
"A walk, a pace"
I love the 3rd verse its structure is without fault
Clever tap dance at the end. Fred Astaire. LOL
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Ha ha. Oh, that's the best compliment in a loong time. And funny too. Thank you.
Comment from DR DIP
shit! i love the way you write you are just so expressive with beautiful phrases:
a walk, a pace, a place
senses...mine
a sense of time
and the will
to wrestle it
LOVE THIS! well done and thanks for sharing Vic
dip
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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shit! i love the way you write you are just so expressive with beautiful phrases:
a walk, a pace, a place
senses...mine
a sense of time
and the will
to wrestle it
LOVE THIS! well done and thanks for sharing Vic
dip
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I'm taking my meds, Dr.
Comment from adewpearl
good assonance and alliteration in pace/place
good alliteration in life to love and in comfort and companion
effective imagery in your closing
you create mood beautifully in this evocative poem
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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good assonance and alliteration in pace/place
good alliteration in life to love and in comfort and companion
effective imagery in your closing
you create mood beautifully in this evocative poem
Brooke
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Why Brooke, I'm blushing. :)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very nicely done, Victor. THe need to tap it... great ending. Here is a man who knows how to enjoy every moment of life, from his past to his present. He turns a stumble into a tap dance.... THAT is the attitude to cultivate, if you can. :)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Very nicely done, Victor. THe need to tap it... great ending. Here is a man who knows how to enjoy every moment of life, from his past to his present. He turns a stumble into a tap dance.... THAT is the attitude to cultivate, if you can. :)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Thank you, dear.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, victor, excellent imagery explored through the stillness that brings things into focus, I love this free verse and enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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this is an excellent write, victor, excellent imagery explored through the stillness that brings things into focus, I love this free verse and enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from Nosha17
You are sitting, reflecting on old memories of things that were important in your life. Nice imagery, well chosen words. I like the picture of the guards in London. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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You are sitting, reflecting on old memories of things that were important in your life. Nice imagery, well chosen words. I like the picture of the guards in London. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
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Thank you.
