Too Ordinary
an afternoon passes97 total reviews
Comment from costellsgirl33
This reminded me of how I felt/feel when I come into work . I haven't had my job very long but it's like.....jeez! It's all to ordinary.....to easy and I don't do ordinary or easy.
Most people prefer those things but I do not, maybe when I get older.
Your poem is wonderful and so well put together. The flow is perfect and I love the image.
Great job my friend
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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This reminded me of how I felt/feel when I come into work . I haven't had my job very long but it's like.....jeez! It's all to ordinary.....to easy and I don't do ordinary or easy.
Most people prefer those things but I do not, maybe when I get older.
Your poem is wonderful and so well put together. The flow is perfect and I love the image.
Great job my friend
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you, my dear.
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You are very welcome
Arnetta
Comment from kiwigirl2821
There are many things to "enjoy" when it comes to people, thoughts, places etc. This one gave me pause to consider a few wonderful moments spent ... Well done Victor! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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There are many things to "enjoy" when it comes to people, thoughts, places etc. This one gave me pause to consider a few wonderful moments spent ... Well done Victor! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, my dear. For everything.
Comment from Aplgwest
Impulsiveness and accident and throwing off the shackles of restriction may lead us to places we might never otherwise go. "Put on that t-shirt" puts me in mind of youth and how we should never completely give it up. I enjoyed. --Elaine
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Impulsiveness and accident and throwing off the shackles of restriction may lead us to places we might never otherwise go. "Put on that t-shirt" puts me in mind of youth and how we should never completely give it up. I enjoyed. --Elaine
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Elaine.
Comment from livelylinda
victortouche: amazingly gentle, yet a walk through a man's life in minimalistic terms. I had to read it several times and it is brilliant. Cotton ball soft and comforting. This is truly six star worthy, but, of course I'm out so virtual today. You have set the tone for my day! livelylinda
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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victortouche: amazingly gentle, yet a walk through a man's life in minimalistic terms. I had to read it several times and it is brilliant. Cotton ball soft and comforting. This is truly six star worthy, but, of course I'm out so virtual today. You have set the tone for my day! livelylinda
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Cotton ball soft. I love that! Thank you.
Comment from Lacy Mariah
This was a great poem. I love the way you were able to take many different images and out them together in a way that flows smoothly and gives you a clear mood and picture in your mind. Sometimes I find poems like this a little chaotic, but I was entranced by this one.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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This was a great poem. I love the way you were able to take many different images and out them together in a way that flows smoothly and gives you a clear mood and picture in your mind. Sometimes I find poems like this a little chaotic, but I was entranced by this one.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Lacy.
Comment from Sueswrite
I really enjoyed reading this and reread it once more slowly to feel the whole concept of your thoughts. It's very beautiful indeed. My favorite lines are "tree house. Sitting time. Like poetry imprisoned by structure." Wow. Beautiful! Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I really enjoyed reading this and reread it once more slowly to feel the whole concept of your thoughts. It's very beautiful indeed. My favorite lines are "tree house. Sitting time. Like poetry imprisoned by structure." Wow. Beautiful! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Sue.
Comment from dthomas6985
Hello, how are you? First of, very well said. I enjoyed the emotion involved, this was very good reading. Sad, to a point, but nice nice read. Blessinhs to you.:-)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Hello, how are you? First of, very well said. I enjoyed the emotion involved, this was very good reading. Sad, to a point, but nice nice read. Blessinhs to you.:-)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Darrin. Loved your profile and the attitude it conveys. Smiles.
Comment from ArtGal
Oh Victor, you always amaze me! I took my time, and read it all very slowly, three times. I get it all! I have to say BRAVO! Oh so very good, each chosen word, every phrase, it all fits in and makes sense, and I love this!!! What more can I say, but I can give you a 6 because you definitely deserve it for this one. Love, love. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Oh Victor, you always amaze me! I took my time, and read it all very slowly, three times. I get it all! I have to say BRAVO! Oh so very good, each chosen word, every phrase, it all fits in and makes sense, and I love this!!! What more can I say, but I can give you a 6 because you definitely deserve it for this one. Love, love. . .Sharon
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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:) Thank you.
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You're so very welcome.
Comment from ravenblack
Such a feeling of peace, a little longing and hard-won contentment. Tree house/ sitting time/ like poetry imprisoned/ by structure- that image just breathes pure poetry. And each image/stanza rolls into another in both sense and flow- thunderstorm's peaceful violence to sailor living as if on shore leave to storm not as foe but friend to complete acceptance, rolling with the waves, the fall both season/ falling leaves and a fall stirring the tea leaves, fortune in a cup and come what may, ready to greet it. A stumble can become a dance. The need to tap it suggests a cane/blindness and it does not matter. You will roll with the waves. This is your best in a while and it is a six (no bones about it) but I am out. Seriously. Excellent, fully-realized poem.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Such a feeling of peace, a little longing and hard-won contentment. Tree house/ sitting time/ like poetry imprisoned/ by structure- that image just breathes pure poetry. And each image/stanza rolls into another in both sense and flow- thunderstorm's peaceful violence to sailor living as if on shore leave to storm not as foe but friend to complete acceptance, rolling with the waves, the fall both season/ falling leaves and a fall stirring the tea leaves, fortune in a cup and come what may, ready to greet it. A stumble can become a dance. The need to tap it suggests a cane/blindness and it does not matter. You will roll with the waves. This is your best in a while and it is a six (no bones about it) but I am out. Seriously. Excellent, fully-realized poem.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you my friend. Your interpretation just a joy to read.
Comment from closetpoetjester
As we steer the vehicle of our timely existence, indeed it is with much pleasure we rely on memories to spur us on, to keep participating with the game or dance of life, no matter what it throws us and how we might change along the way. Nicely done Viktor. I also feel at ease listening to the sounds of thunder clouds at play. Great to see your muse in control again. BTW You're FAR from ordinary. You'd do well to remember that.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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As we steer the vehicle of our timely existence, indeed it is with much pleasure we rely on memories to spur us on, to keep participating with the game or dance of life, no matter what it throws us and how we might change along the way. Nicely done Viktor. I also feel at ease listening to the sounds of thunder clouds at play. Great to see your muse in control again. BTW You're FAR from ordinary. You'd do well to remember that.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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:) Thank you.
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Pleasure.
