Too Ordinary
an afternoon passes97 total reviews
Comment from Zinnia48
This is so beautiful and dense with imagery, that I don't know where to start. Maybe at the ending. I love, love, love that imate of stumbling with confidence, and how this becomes a dance. Great, deep, vivid images.. thanks. Caroline
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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This is so beautiful and dense with imagery, that I don't know where to start. Maybe at the ending. I love, love, love that imate of stumbling with confidence, and how this becomes a dance. Great, deep, vivid images.. thanks. Caroline
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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A wonderful intensive review. I thank you.
Comment from L.M.Mullins
My frontal cortex is shut off most evenings. Loved the free flow of this verse you have written. Your words pull many different emotions as one reads and reflects almost at the same time. Nice piece.
LM
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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My frontal cortex is shut off most evenings. Loved the free flow of this verse you have written. Your words pull many different emotions as one reads and reflects almost at the same time. Nice piece.
LM
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I am glad you stopped by. Please do so again.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I did as you asked, Doug. I shut down the frontal cortex of my old brain-pan, and simply went with the flow. And I enjoyed the experience immensely.
I especially enjoyed the feeling of linear movement I got while reading your wonderfully written words. And, near the end, I truly felt the need to tap it...
Excellent writing.~Dean
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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I did as you asked, Doug. I shut down the frontal cortex of my old brain-pan, and simply went with the flow. And I enjoyed the experience immensely.
I especially enjoyed the feeling of linear movement I got while reading your wonderfully written words. And, near the end, I truly felt the need to tap it...
Excellent writing.~Dean
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Awe shucks, pardner. :)
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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
I loved this one, Victor! Very unique premise and well presented.
"Senses ... mine
A sense of time" ... really liked the impact made by the
repetition of Senses and sense.
Strong ending ... "and I, the need
to tap it".
Great write!
Connie
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I loved this one, Victor! Very unique premise and well presented.
"Senses ... mine
A sense of time" ... really liked the impact made by the
repetition of Senses and sense.
Strong ending ... "and I, the need
to tap it".
Great write!
Connie
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you ever so much, Connie.
Comment from TOMORAL
My frontal cortex shut off, and the rhythm of your poem soothed my mind. This is beautifully written and expressed. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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My frontal cortex shut off, and the rhythm of your poem soothed my mind. This is beautifully written and expressed. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from victor 66
Living and appreciating a day is hardly "ordinary", What I got from your piece, is the feeling of remembrance, reflection and the joy that is in someway, relived. It is a very nice read. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Living and appreciating a day is hardly "ordinary", What I got from your piece, is the feeling of remembrance, reflection and the joy that is in someway, relived. It is a very nice read. Best wishes.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Tonulak
Hi Doug,
Yes, that's what the reader has to do; shut off the frontal cortex and just bask in the poem. I liked the metaphor of the old Tee shirt, when writing is so comfortable and easy. Great job with this one, amigo--Ted
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Hi Doug,
Yes, that's what the reader has to do; shut off the frontal cortex and just bask in the poem. I liked the metaphor of the old Tee shirt, when writing is so comfortable and easy. Great job with this one, amigo--Ted
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Hi Amigo. Thank you as always. If U want, I would enjoy an update by U, via PM. But, I am not pushing. And I have not devoted enough time to many things. :)
Comment from Alan K Pease
You pause at each step reaching our desire for something new to see you write in such beautiful prose. I let the poem filter through my mind and enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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You pause at each step reaching our desire for something new to see you write in such beautiful prose. I let the poem filter through my mind and enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Alan.
Comment from mrsmajor
Hello,
One day we all will learn the peace of solitude, the time to allow each thought to pass through an open mind, and allow the next to come alive...you have given us a moment in your solitude to enjoy what you saw there..heard their, and the meaning for you!
I enjoyed reading this prose poem, it was my pleasure.
Thanks for sharing
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Hello,
One day we all will learn the peace of solitude, the time to allow each thought to pass through an open mind, and allow the next to come alive...you have given us a moment in your solitude to enjoy what you saw there..heard their, and the meaning for you!
I enjoyed reading this prose poem, it was my pleasure.
Thanks for sharing
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you, my dear.
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You're very welcome...
Hugs,
Comment from tfawcus
I haven't enjoyed a poem so much for a long time. Wonderful close with the urge to join the tap dance of life even if only with the blind man's stick.
What a startling image of truth in your third stanza:
"tree house,
sitting time
like poetry imprisoned
by structure"
and how well you capture the reflections of age with :
"I seek the fall,
the turn,
the stirring
of tea leaves "
This is a poem that seems to have arisen from some deep place within - more than mere words.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I haven't enjoyed a poem so much for a long time. Wonderful close with the urge to join the tap dance of life even if only with the blind man's stick.
What a startling image of truth in your third stanza:
"tree house,
sitting time
like poetry imprisoned
by structure"
and how well you capture the reflections of age with :
"I seek the fall,
the turn,
the stirring
of tea leaves "
This is a poem that seems to have arisen from some deep place within - more than mere words.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I have enjoyed ur review so very, very, much. Oh, that i could just sit at your B&B, and have coffee with you.
