Too Ordinary
an afternoon passes97 total reviews
Comment from words
Like your graceful, contemplative write.
I especially like you're second stanza.
I do spend a lot of time in meditation with the analytical mind turned off.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Like your graceful, contemplative write.
I especially like you're second stanza.
I do spend a lot of time in meditation with the analytical mind turned off.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Good for you. I wish I was better at it. Thank you.
Comment from poetbear
I took photos there.
I remember that time and place so very well.
Reads well and makes sense.
Great flow and feeling.
Lots said between the lines.
Well written and great to reD.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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I took photos there.
I remember that time and place so very well.
Reads well and makes sense.
Great flow and feeling.
Lots said between the lines.
Well written and great to reD.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you. Naturally, I enjoyed reading your review as well. LOL
Comment from visionary1234
Had to read this a couple of times to disconnect my frontal cortex as per your request Victor, but finally 'got' your silence/stillness in all things, even the crappy things like getting old. Loved your thunderstorm's 'peaceful violence'. Got a chuckle from your photo as I've just come back from London.
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Had to read this a couple of times to disconnect my frontal cortex as per your request Victor, but finally 'got' your silence/stillness in all things, even the crappy things like getting old. Loved your thunderstorm's 'peaceful violence'. Got a chuckle from your photo as I've just come back from London.
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Ha. That must have been a bit of irony, eh? Thank you, my dear.
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We love irony dear! :))))) at least it requires wit!
Comment from DanielEkine
Very refined muse and verses that stands out for me, "a garden
where simplicity grows
a life to love
tree house,
sitting time
like poetry imprisoned
by structure"
The presentation, rhyme and connectivity from between the verses is refreshing.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Very refined muse and verses that stands out for me, "a garden
where simplicity grows
a life to love
tree house,
sitting time
like poetry imprisoned
by structure"
The presentation, rhyme and connectivity from between the verses is refreshing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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As is your review. Thank you.
Comment from Irish Rain
I loved this, beginning to end, especially the peaceful violence of the thunderstorm, and seeking the fall...just beautiful...Blessings...Judy
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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I loved this, beginning to end, especially the peaceful violence of the thunderstorm, and seeking the fall...just beautiful...Blessings...Judy
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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How very nice of you, Judy. Thank you.
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You are entirely welcome!
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was very liberating to read. It forced me to follow and I couldn't figure where it was taking me. I liked the style and the stuttered cadence to it. Great imagery and emotion
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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This was very liberating to read. It forced me to follow and I couldn't figure where it was taking me. I liked the style and the stuttered cadence to it. Great imagery and emotion
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from Zue65
Well I enjoyed your poem, poets are like that, we do indulge in passing off the time by writing and be inspired by the afternoon, the view, the thoughts, the emotions it brings, captured in beautiful lines, as you did in this poem. God bless.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Well I enjoyed your poem, poets are like that, we do indulge in passing off the time by writing and be inspired by the afternoon, the view, the thoughts, the emotions it brings, captured in beautiful lines, as you did in this poem. God bless.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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:)
Comment from GregoryCody
This is a strong piece. Very strong.
tree house,
sitting time
like poetry imprisoned
by structure
That's fantastic. I often feel the same way.
Great piece.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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This is a strong piece. Very strong.
tree house,
sitting time
like poetry imprisoned
by structure
That's fantastic. I often feel the same way.
Great piece.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much. I appreciate it.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
We all need to find that time of day we can just be no matter what it is for us. I loved the poem and I'm glad you found your place :)
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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We all need to find that time of day we can just be no matter what it is for us. I loved the poem and I'm glad you found your place :)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
My, this is a wonderful poem. Liked the rhythm that that the poem evokes. it starts slowly and then moves faster reaching a crescendo. It is like listening to a symphony playing 'Eine Kleine Nachtmusik' by Mozart or 'Toccata and fugue in D minor' by Bach. Absolute brilliance and this enhances the imagery that your words have painted.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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My, this is a wonderful poem. Liked the rhythm that that the poem evokes. it starts slowly and then moves faster reaching a crescendo. It is like listening to a symphony playing 'Eine Kleine Nachtmusik' by Mozart or 'Toccata and fugue in D minor' by Bach. Absolute brilliance and this enhances the imagery that your words have painted.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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:)
