Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Yikes, this most definitely is a horror poem of large dimensions, Bill. The killer kills just as matter of factly as having lunch or taking a shave.

Can't say that I loved the theme but your poetic execution is supreme. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

Thank you, Gloria.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Bill, sometimes I wonder and worry about you. You seem to have all at one time far too many sides. I often wonder, how you manage them all, keeping each one at bay until it is needed. Some might even call or think you a schizoid, but not me. you are my buddy so I know you won't send the terror squad after me, right old buddy?

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

You're safe, nomi. (Just don't cross me.) : )

Comment from Blue Hendrix

Excellent

Nicely written poem very nice flow. I didn't see
any Corrections that need to be made. Nice imagery good word choices and I think you just did an overall very good job.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

Thanks, Blue

reply by Blue Hendrix on 21-Jul-2018

Your very welcome

Comment from trimple

Excellent

Hi there, Bill

What a nasty piece of work he is!

Good rhyme use and meter

uneasy read... :)

kind regards

trimple

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

Thanks, T, for he kind review. Bill

reply by trimple on 21-Jul-2018

Pleasure, Billiam :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks about the terror Phil was sentenced to be at the hospital for the killing of his peers for treatment until his mind is clear for the killing; operation is over; now he is retiring; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018

Thanks, ALD

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good rhyming couplets with excellent use of proximate rhyme like pipe/spike and though/hole
good alliteration in plastic pipe
and crayons colored
definitely horror as this psychotic man prepares to kill the nurse caring for him Brooke

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014

Thank you, Brooke, for the astute review.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Whoa, Bill! A sharp pipe wielding, red crayon eating, crazed cannibalistic killer named Phil, but is truly Satan's right hand man (and I use the term "man" very loosely here), Beelzebub in disguise. Many believe that Beelzebub and Satan are one in the same, but it's not so. Beelzebub is the devil's commander and the chief demon in Hell, just below Satan's command. He's in charge of tormenting souls here on earth, like those addicted to drugs and alcohol, for example.

Well done, and a rousing horrific treat! Wasn't this a contest entry at one time?

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thank you for reviewing, Dean. I used the author note section to identify the picture and was DQed.

reply by Dean Kuch on 28-Jul-2014

Oh, I am sorry to hear that, Bill. Well, if it is any consolation, I lost too, LOL... I know misery loves company, my friend. :}

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

this is definitely a horror/thriller poem. It's a very enjoyable read although horror isn't my thing. Great rhyme and meter.
Teresa

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you, Teresa, for the excellent review.

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. Old Phil seems normal while he goes about his days But he is just waiting until he can find the right killing tool. He finds a pipe that can make a hole in his victim. He picks a nurse and his killing has begun again.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you, Nellie, for the excellent review.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very good. I like how you describe the thoughts of this criminally insane man. Very original slant and good rhyme and rhythm. Great job!

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you, R4U, for the excellent review.