Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from Sankey
A great chapter. Thanks again have always loved your style. One of my favourite writers. Love the mystery of Indian lore and senses. Only one spag but it might be a language peculiarity you are using.
"Gus went to get (a) load of feed for the horses.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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A great chapter. Thanks again have always loved your style. One of my favourite writers. Love the mystery of Indian lore and senses. Only one spag but it might be a language peculiarity you are using.
"Gus went to get (a) load of feed for the horses.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the catch. I have added and a in the correct spot. I hate when I make those stupid mistakes.
Comment from lindalcreel
Hopefully, she'll ask him straight out what he was doing. If he lies, then I would send him packing, but he might not want to talk because he doesn't know who to trust. I think as they get to know each other, he may begin to open up and she'll realize he's a good guy.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Hopefully, she'll ask him straight out what he was doing. If he lies, then I would send him packing, but he might not want to talk because he doesn't know who to trust. I think as they get to know each other, he may begin to open up and she'll realize he's a good guy.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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We'll have to wait and see. I have a feeling some bad stuff is going to happen first. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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My pleasure:)
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Always my pleasure:)
Comment from AAud
I like that you show us Soni's uncertainty as well as her strength.
I only spotted one typo: "Gus went to get load of feed for the horses." (Insert "a" between "get" and "load")
One potential suggestion regarding the line, "You've saddled your own horse." I'm from the east, so maybe this doesn't apply, but instead of saying "saddled a horse" we say "tacked" I didn't know if you might want to write "You've tacked your own horse ..."
I thought it was a nice touch, showing Soni visiting her parents' graves. I liked her visit from Kuruk. He's a great mystical character.
Because this is a romance, I'm eager for that aspect of the story to come into play. But I'm enjoying how the story is unfolding.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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I like that you show us Soni's uncertainty as well as her strength.
I only spotted one typo: "Gus went to get load of feed for the horses." (Insert "a" between "get" and "load")
One potential suggestion regarding the line, "You've saddled your own horse." I'm from the east, so maybe this doesn't apply, but instead of saying "saddled a horse" we say "tacked" I didn't know if you might want to write "You've tacked your own horse ..."
I thought it was a nice touch, showing Soni visiting her parents' graves. I liked her visit from Kuruk. He's a great mystical character.
Because this is a romance, I'm eager for that aspect of the story to come into play. But I'm enjoying how the story is unfolding.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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I will double check it. I'll ask my Texas friends. I have always heard saddled, but I will check. I do write romance that's the main part of the story, but I don't write your traditional romance. I always add a real story line. I hope you stick with me.
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I definitely will stick with you. I like that you have that story line, and that it's a non-traditional romance.
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Thank you
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Barb,
Nice chapter for Soni to contemplate her responsibilities, and what to do about Jim.
~~ Isn't Jim the guy their caring for? Shouldn't this read (Alex), not Jim, when Tatiana is talking with Soni?? ~~
"Why didn't you and Jim have your own children?"
I like the bit where Grandpa sneaks up on Soni ('-')
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Hi Barb,
Nice chapter for Soni to contemplate her responsibilities, and what to do about Jim.
~~ Isn't Jim the guy their caring for? Shouldn't this read (Alex), not Jim, when Tatiana is talking with Soni?? ~~
"Why didn't you and Jim have your own children?"
I like the bit where Grandpa sneaks up on Soni ('-')
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the catch!!! WOW!! I caught on as I was posting. I guess old age is hitting my brain. I appreciate you having my back.
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You're welcome... ('-')
I think it's Murphy's Law that it's easier to catch someone else's boo boos than one's own.
I'm going to go and pay Chase and Paige a visit now. Cheers...
Comment from abbasjoy
This is another suspenseful chapter as everyday there seems to be more secrecy about Jim, rather than answers.
Soni is very fortunate to have Alex and Tatiana, as well as her grandfather, as she really has a lot of responsibility on her young shoulders.
I really like the interaction between the characters, they are all very close, and even those who are not actually related to Soni, are so close to her, that they seem like family.
Another interesting chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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This is another suspenseful chapter as everyday there seems to be more secrecy about Jim, rather than answers.
Soni is very fortunate to have Alex and Tatiana, as well as her grandfather, as she really has a lot of responsibility on her young shoulders.
I really like the interaction between the characters, they are all very close, and even those who are not actually related to Soni, are so close to her, that they seem like family.
Another interesting chapter.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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My pleasure.
abbasjoy
Comment from Ben Colder
Another good write crediting the Lipan Apache. Mighty big ranch but I would bet she will handle thugs well. Blessings to you. Barb
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Another good write crediting the Lipan Apache. Mighty big ranch but I would bet she will handle thugs well. Blessings to you. Barb
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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I hope she can handle it. She's a little unsure of herself, right now. Thank you for the kind and encouraging review.
Comment from angelface2
"What he's doing now?" or what's he doing now?
Lord said it wasn't met (meant) to be.
Very good chapter, Barbara. First sentence above, I am not sure is wrong. Just thought it might be. Nicely done. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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"What he's doing now?" or what's he doing now?
Lord said it wasn't met (meant) to be.
Very good chapter, Barbara. First sentence above, I am not sure is wrong. Just thought it might be. Nicely done. Miss Sally
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this helpful review. I can't believe I made those stupid mistakes.
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We all do that, Barbara. That's one reason for the reviews, isn't it? Glad to help. Miss Sally
Comment from rmj09
This is a story that pulls on your coat strings. The dialogue brings you smoothly forward and is clear and understood. The emotion felt are fear, confusion, pride and respect. The narrative answers what the dialogue left off. The focus remains clear and helps with the development of the story.
Keep writing.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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This is a story that pulls on your coat strings. The dialogue brings you smoothly forward and is clear and understood. The emotion felt are fear, confusion, pride and respect. The narrative answers what the dialogue left off. The focus remains clear and helps with the development of the story.
Keep writing.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara.
Dad would know and (would) have already done it."
She patted her leather vest pocket,(no comma) and then strolled off with Goliath and Mack by her side.
Goliath nuzzled Soni,(no comma) before she added.(,)
Moments later, Soni sat straighter. "Grandfather, how did you know where to find me?" (Soni is still speaking; no new paragraph here) "How did you know I was here?"
"You can't answer a question with a question." (New paragraph)
Soni turned and smiled. "You have always known when I need help. How do you do that?"
Soni petted Mack (and said), "Yes, you're a good boy too," before she mounted the horse.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Good chapter, Barbara.
Dad would know and (would) have already done it."
She patted her leather vest pocket,(no comma) and then strolled off with Goliath and Mack by her side.
Goliath nuzzled Soni,(no comma) before she added.(,)
Moments later, Soni sat straighter. "Grandfather, how did you know where to find me?" (Soni is still speaking; no new paragraph here) "How did you know I was here?"
"You can't answer a question with a question." (New paragraph)
Soni turned and smiled. "You have always known when I need help. How do you do that?"
Soni petted Mack (and said), "Yes, you're a good boy too," before she mounted the horse.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this helpful review. I will get on it.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
As Alice remarked in Through the Looking Glass - curiouser and curiouser. It seems their 'guest' is recovering fast, but is up to something.
Intriguing göimpse of the Indian spirit beliefs as well.
Patrick
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Hi Barbara,
As Alice remarked in Through the Looking Glass - curiouser and curiouser. It seems their 'guest' is recovering fast, but is up to something.
Intriguing göimpse of the Indian spirit beliefs as well.
Patrick
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
