Comment from Cian Mateo

Excellent

I continue to enjoy this storyline.

The dialogue is good; your description good.

One thing you might look at. ...and dropped the (reins), allowing...

Look forward to your next post.
Cian Mateo

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Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Good post, Barbara. I particularly enjoyed the spiritual aspect when she was in the cemetery. You continue to build intrigue around this mysterious visitor.

One typo noticed: and dropped the reigns, - reins


Well done.

Av

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Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Your settings and descriptions are always outstanding. They make me feel like I'm sitting right there in the action. However, southerners don't scoop runny eggs up onto a biscuit. They sop them up. Seriously, just joking. Thanks for another great chapter. :-)

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Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

Excellent job. I didn't find any grammar corrections needed. I enjoyed this chapter. Your dialog seems very believable. I love that. Great chapter.

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Comment from Raphael Montonaro

Exceptional

A SIX BANGER!!............Great content, great dialogue and back-up narrative. Very well written and formed for easy reading. No great mis-tooks here. Great job!

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Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Barbara this is very good writing....thank you for her talk to the grave stones that was an excellent way to let us know what is happening...and I love the Grandfather and the Indian wisdom....she knows what to do...I like that ending...there is a typo...reigns.....reins
Well done...an intriguing read
God bless

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Comment from Auroraboreal800

Excellent

Excellent narrative and dialogues as well, I like the scene in the cemetery, and the solid and believable characters. Very well written Barbara. Can't wait for more.
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Comment from Sonaleeka

Excellent

I loved the chapter,though i did not read the previous chapters .I can say it's very well written and easy to understand.keep writing and have a great day.

God bless!

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Comment from Liandra

Excellent

I honestly couldn't find errors!

You're dialogue brings your characters and the scenery alive, and along with the descriptive words, it was easy to see the picture.

This is a moving story, I felt her emotions as she knelt by her mom and dad's grave. As for Midnight, I had a black mare, a very high spirited mare named September. We were 'glued' together and she was one of the highlights of my life.

Thanks for sharing,

:) Liandra

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I got it and I will take care of it immediately. I had an editor say the same thing about 'that', I try not to use it and will follow suit with 'some'.

Comment from Kausar_Javeria

Excellent

Hello there~!
I've been away due to my exams so I missed a few chapters. I've read them and I've finally caught up. Let me tell you that this book is really good.
Loved the ending. Like a mild cliff-hanger.
Great Job!

JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

(^_^)/~KAUSAR~(^_^)

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