Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "CHAPTER TRES, PART UNO"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from deepwater
You can't answer a question with a question." Soni turned and smiled. "You can always tell when I need help. How do you do that?" This is called a friend nice writing
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You can't answer a question with a question." Soni turned and smiled. "You can always tell when I need help. How do you do that?" This is called a friend nice writing
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
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Comment from Lynette Marie
He sopped up runny egg yolk with a piece of biscuit. -- Excellent detail. It sets the atmosphere and gives the scene greater depth.
I'm still loving the character of the grandfather. The pic you chose fits so well with this chapter. Well written. I found nothing negative to mention.
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He sopped up runny egg yolk with a piece of biscuit. -- Excellent detail. It sets the atmosphere and gives the scene greater depth.
I'm still loving the character of the grandfather. The pic you chose fits so well with this chapter. Well written. I found nothing negative to mention.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
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Comment from SilverWoulfCreations
Love message here. To close one size and look within understanding our own connection to the divine source of life is a gift we all have available to us. I greatly enjoyed this piece. Thank you very much for sharing.
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Love message here. To close one size and look within understanding our own connection to the divine source of life is a gift we all have available to us. I greatly enjoyed this piece. Thank you very much for sharing.
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Comment from PrincessinPurple
This is a good chapter. I can see the characters in my mind. I do like the image as well. I didn't catch any error reading the chapter. It is a good read so far.
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This is a good chapter. I can see the characters in my mind. I do like the image as well. I didn't catch any error reading the chapter. It is a good read so far.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
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You're welcome!
Comment from kimdebfred
What a good story. Seems like you have been writing a long time. well good luck with your work and i pray that it takes you far. I like the way the sentences blend in together.
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What a good story. Seems like you have been writing a long time. well good luck with your work and i pray that it takes you far. I like the way the sentences blend in together.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Comment from layoung
Wonderful! The dialogue flows smoothly and the character is so well written. I enjoyed the specific details you give and the strong verbs.
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Wonderful! The dialogue flows smoothly and the character is so well written. I enjoyed the specific details you give and the strong verbs.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Barbara - I liked the fact that you are able to make me ponder what he is, memory, ghost/spirit... There is smooth dialogue, and creativity around your scene work that I found painted great pictures for me to visualize your story.
Nicely penned.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
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Dear Barbara - I liked the fact that you are able to make me ponder what he is, memory, ghost/spirit... There is smooth dialogue, and creativity around your scene work that I found painted great pictures for me to visualize your story.
Nicely penned.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you Maureen, coming from you means so much. I appreciate it. You just made my day.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I just love your character, Soni. And that last part in the cemetery was just marvelous. Was her grandfather there in body or just spirit? You leave it to the reader to decide which is a great hook, Barbara. Very well done!
:) Bev
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I just love your character, Soni. And that last part in the cemetery was just marvelous. Was her grandfather there in body or just spirit? You leave it to the reader to decide which is a great hook, Barbara. Very well done!
:) Bev
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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You're very welcome, Barbara. :) Bev
Comment from Pyrrho
him some coffee ... up some runny egg ... did some paperwork ... do some soul ...
Here is a vignette by Bertrand Russell about the word ... some.
Do you have some apples? "No," he replied.
Do you have any apples? "No," he replied.
Do you have apples," "Yes," he replied and smiled ecstatically.
him pretty bad. I ... it is dialog so acceptable, but bad=>badly correct grammar.
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him some coffee ... up some runny egg ... did some paperwork ... do some soul ...
Here is a vignette by Bertrand Russell about the word ... some.
Do you have some apples? "No," he replied.
Do you have any apples? "No," he replied.
Do you have apples," "Yes," he replied and smiled ecstatically.
him pretty bad. I ... it is dialog so acceptable, but bad=>badly correct grammar.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I got it and I will take care of it immediately. I had an editor say the same thing about 'that', I try not to use it and will follow suit with 'some'.
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I got it and I will take care of it immediately. I had an editor say the same thing about 'that', I try not to use it and will follow suit with 'some'.
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When I am editing my prose I use the word-finder to locate all: that's, some's, any's and All-of-a-sudden's=>suddenly's
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never thought of that, good idea.
Comment from GracieAnn
Barbara, you have created a believable setting for this western adventure and appropriate vernacular for the day. The story is well set with an intriguing hook at the end. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Barbara, you have created a believable setting for this western adventure and appropriate vernacular for the day. The story is well set with an intriguing hook at the end. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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