Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. Great job with the water haiku. Great use of descriptive words. I like the picture that you used. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the excellent review.

reply by rrabinow on 27-Jul-2014

You are welcome.

Comment from bertodi

Excellent

I like this because I do not know how often I have told pupils of how much water we are made up, of how the moon is travelling away at many miles a year from the earth and the moon is the magnetic pull of the seas and oceans and US.. well said-

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014

Thank you for the excellent review.

Comment from Kenneth Schaal

Excellent

I like this, but it reads more like senryu to me. The rules, though appear to be heavily influenced by western culture, so who knows? Best of luck. Kenny

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014

I feel your pain, Kenny, having to endure heretical attempts at pseudo haiku (pseudo haiku! that's mine now).
I mean no disrespect; it's just that haiku purists vary like store brand string beans (store brand string beans!! That's gold!)

Thank you for the excellent review.

reply by Kenneth Schaal on 26-Jul-2014

That is good.

Comment from Set in Stone

Excellent

I really like this one. It gives the reader something to think about. Your words draw strong pictures and the poem itself has strong visual appeal with its balanced lines.
Nicely done.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014

Thank you, SIS, for the terrific review.