If Hippos Lived in Cities
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Comment from prefabmouse
Awesome poem. I like that you wrote about something that is so absurd and unlikely that it actually makes the reader think about how that would work out for the hippos. I like that you gave them a human personality. Very good job.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Awesome poem. I like that you wrote about something that is so absurd and unlikely that it actually makes the reader think about how that would work out for the hippos. I like that you gave them a human personality. Very good job.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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prefabmouse, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
When we were at Animal Kingdom in Disney World in 2006, we took the safari trip. Two hippos ran right in front of our jungle buggy. It was just like we were right in deepest Africa, and I don't think they liked us.
Of course, your poem is another cracker-jack nonsensical masterpiece. A hippo in a restaurant? checking out the subway? getting a massage at a local spa? a facial mud pack? This would make a fantastic picture book? ..."Dottie the Hippopottymus".
I think many people don't take to strangers, especially weird strangers. If aliens landed in a city park, it wouldn't take long before someone grabbed a gun and fired off a shot. Our motto, shoot first and ask questions later. But I realize you are writing this as a children's nonsense poem. The key word in your poem, for kids of any age, is "If".
"If hippos lived in cities"
Nicely penned! And I had a six left.
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke
When we were at Animal Kingdom in Disney World in 2006, we took the safari trip. Two hippos ran right in front of our jungle buggy. It was just like we were right in deepest Africa, and I don't think they liked us.
Of course, your poem is another cracker-jack nonsensical masterpiece. A hippo in a restaurant? checking out the subway? getting a massage at a local spa? a facial mud pack? This would make a fantastic picture book? ..."Dottie the Hippopottymus".
I think many people don't take to strangers, especially weird strangers. If aliens landed in a city park, it wouldn't take long before someone grabbed a gun and fired off a shot. Our motto, shoot first and ask questions later. But I realize you are writing this as a children's nonsense poem. The key word in your poem, for kids of any age, is "If".
"If hippos lived in cities"
Nicely penned! And I had a six left.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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thank you so very much, my generous friend - as always, I love your comments :-) Brooke
Comment from rjuselius
haha. lol! i love this delightfully light-hearted piece of poetic art! what about hippos in nylon stockings and a 50s skirt? anyhoo,
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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haha. lol! i love this delightfully light-hearted piece of poetic art! what about hippos in nylon stockings and a 50s skirt? anyhoo,
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, rebekka :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
A well written poem and a strong case for ending discrimination, for urban sophistication. But, in choosing the hippo, you kinda push the envelope. Well, they are prettier than manatees.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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A well written poem and a strong case for ending discrimination, for urban sophistication. But, in choosing the hippo, you kinda push the envelope. Well, they are prettier than manatees.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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LIJ, thank you so much :-) that's what poets are for, pushing the envelope :-) Brooke
Comment from words
How utterly delightful.
I can see you happily sharing your table.
I would lo e to see one at Starbucks ... they would certainly liven up the place.
I am a huge fan of your whimsy,Brooke. Am having a rather tedious day and you just brightened it up for me.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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How utterly delightful.
I can see you happily sharing your table.
I would lo e to see one at Starbucks ... they would certainly liven up the place.
I am a huge fan of your whimsy,Brooke. Am having a rather tedious day and you just brightened it up for me.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Diane, thank you so much, my friend. Starbucks, now that WOULD be fun LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from DALLAS01
Now here is a whimsical thought for ones to wrap their mind around. It conjures a clear picture of Hippo's among us.
Nice choice of art work.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Now here is a whimsical thought for ones to wrap their mind around. It conjures a clear picture of Hippo's among us.
Nice choice of art work.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Dallas, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
Hi Brooke, love your author notes...but you are so right...LOL...just picture it...you, Sawyer, and a Hippo...all out to dinner...LOL...Miranda could get so great pictures...LOL...Yes!!! I would love to see a Hippo in the city...can't be anymore dangerous than what is out there...I love the one...Very nicely written....Luff Linda xxoo Love
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke, love your author notes...but you are so right...LOL...just picture it...you, Sawyer, and a Hippo...all out to dinner...LOL...Miranda could get so great pictures...LOL...Yes!!! I would love to see a Hippo in the city...can't be anymore dangerous than what is out there...I love the one...Very nicely written....Luff Linda xxoo Love
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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I love the idea of the family portrait taken by Miranda LOL Thanks so much, Linda :-) Brooke
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LOL...you are so welcome...LOL...xxoo
Comment from evilynne
Hippos may be dangerous but they are marvelous subjects for poetry as you have proved. Your imagination is great. I wish I had your great knowledge of meter, syllables, etc. Those things just don't come so easy to me. All I know is that I enjoy everything you write!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Hippos may be dangerous but they are marvelous subjects for poetry as you have proved. Your imagination is great. I wish I had your great knowledge of meter, syllables, etc. Those things just don't come so easy to me. All I know is that I enjoy everything you write!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Evi, thank you so very much for your generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from heyjude
Brooke, you must have so much fun coming up with
all of these poems. This flows and rhymes well.
I think we'd have to make that an outdoor eatery
to be with the hippo.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Brooke, you must have so much fun coming up with
all of these poems. This flows and rhymes well.
I think we'd have to make that an outdoor eatery
to be with the hippo.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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heyjude, thank you :-) Yep, at age 63 I demand my efforts be for fun :-) Brooke
Comment from Gargantuan2
Well, this would certainly lead to a whole new meaning to eating like a hippo. Imagine how sturdy that table would have to be too. Thank you for the imaginative imagery, I think it is rather unique :) !!!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Well, this would certainly lead to a whole new meaning to eating like a hippo. Imagine how sturdy that table would have to be too. Thank you for the imaginative imagery, I think it is rather unique :) !!!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Gargantuan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
