If Hippos Lived in Cities
rhyming quatrains in 7/6/7/6132 total reviews
Comment from costellsgirl33
If hippos lived in the city we'd have more kids wanting to go on field trips to the city! lol
And I'd be a faster runner like I was when I was in high school :)
Such a lovely poem, one that made me smile. Very light hearted and funny. I loved it
It would be quite the surprise to go out to eat and have a hippo at the next table ;)
Great job
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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If hippos lived in the city we'd have more kids wanting to go on field trips to the city! lol
And I'd be a faster runner like I was when I was in high school :)
Such a lovely poem, one that made me smile. Very light hearted and funny. I loved it
It would be quite the surprise to go out to eat and have a hippo at the next table ;)
Great job
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Costellsgirl, thanks so much for your humor and your review :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome :)
CG :)
Comment from isurp
Your rhyming quatrains have very pleasing rhythm and rhyme. The whimsical nature of hippos in cities is a fun concept. The only line I stumbled on was "laze and thud." I'm sure you considered flood or crud but all in all it was delightful. -Steve
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Your rhyming quatrains have very pleasing rhythm and rhyme. The whimsical nature of hippos in cities is a fun concept. The only line I stumbled on was "laze and thud." I'm sure you considered flood or crud but all in all it was delightful. -Steve
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Steve, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, I enjoyed reading your poem and found its analogy with modern-day society to be thought-provoking. I don't think the hippos would be welcomed on an airplane. Truth of the matter is that over the years, seating has become smaller to accommodate more while prices increase. Of special note:
for I, for one, like hippos,
and I would love to be
the one to share my table
at any eatery.
(I liked that poem because I've had an idea or a new trend which might be an old trend for diners at restaurants ... one large table (like on cruise ships) for diners who might otherwise dine alone, but might like some company ... chancy but interesting, and one has to keep an open mind and have a sense of humor.)
A fun, but thought-provoking poem. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, I enjoyed reading your poem and found its analogy with modern-day society to be thought-provoking. I don't think the hippos would be welcomed on an airplane. Truth of the matter is that over the years, seating has become smaller to accommodate more while prices increase. Of special note:
for I, for one, like hippos,
and I would love to be
the one to share my table
at any eatery.
(I liked that poem because I've had an idea or a new trend which might be an old trend for diners at restaurants ... one large table (like on cruise ships) for diners who might otherwise dine alone, but might like some company ... chancy but interesting, and one has to keep an open mind and have a sense of humor.)
A fun, but thought-provoking poem. LateBloomer
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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I like the community table idea too :-) Thanks so much, Latebloomer, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
The thought of a Hippo in a city is an entertaining one, and one loose on the underground in London, certainly raises a smile ...
You'd probably be surprised by how fast they can move on land when they want to.
Patrick
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke,
The thought of a Hippo in a city is an entertaining one, and one loose on the underground in London, certainly raises a smile ...
You'd probably be surprised by how fast they can move on land when they want to.
Patrick
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Patrick :-) Brooke
Comment from Janie King
Very entertaining. I kind of like to share my dinner table with something a bit smaller. I did enjoy the poem and the rhythm it had. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Very entertaining. I kind of like to share my dinner table with something a bit smaller. I did enjoy the poem and the rhythm it had. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Janie - you want smaller? Maybe I can hook you up with a jackal. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from zanya
This one is a little gem and raises a chuckle simultaneously - what a wonderful imaginative journey we are taken on here with all its magical possibilities -
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This one is a little gem and raises a chuckle simultaneously - what a wonderful imaginative journey we are taken on here with all its magical possibilities -
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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zanya, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from lakeport
If hippos lived in cities, indeed that's a very lovely and imaginary story poem,very nice rhyming. I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Hugs!lakeport.
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If hippos lived in cities, indeed that's a very lovely and imaginary story poem,very nice rhyming. I enjoyed reading it.God bless you.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Erich, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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your very welcome.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: very cute and made me giggle. . .sharing a table with a hippo could be a bit awkward I think! But, a fun ride. Do you share all these fun poems with Sawyer? I would bet that he giggles, too, if you do.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Brooke: very cute and made me giggle. . .sharing a table with a hippo could be a bit awkward I think! But, a fun ride. Do you share all these fun poems with Sawyer? I would bet that he giggles, too, if you do.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) I'm saving them all for Sawyer. Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Ha, very nice and funny. I like the notes too, there are many would yell that out. It's nice think that people would welcome the unfamiliar in our ranks. I hope so.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Ha, very nice and funny. I like the notes too, there are many would yell that out. It's nice think that people would welcome the unfamiliar in our ranks. I hope so.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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thank you so much, lancellot :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
I doubt it. people are more likely to shoo away or ban hippos. So a warm and rousing welcome they may get from the zoo.It is a fun poem to read .Imagining them wallowing in the expensive mud inside a spa made me smile.
I did not realise that they were dangerous .They always seem very smug in their slushy homes and somehow they don't have that dangerous 'look'
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I doubt it. people are more likely to shoo away or ban hippos. So a warm and rousing welcome they may get from the zoo.It is a fun poem to read .Imagining them wallowing in the expensive mud inside a spa made me smile.
I did not realise that they were dangerous .They always seem very smug in their slushy homes and somehow they don't have that dangerous 'look'
Comment Written 27-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Sanku, thank you so much :-) Yep, they are evidently quite the killers, but not in my world of make believe :-) Brooke
