If Hippos Lived in Cities
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Comment from c_lucas
Hippos have yet to meet the Great White Hunter Sawyer. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Hippos have yet to meet the Great White Hunter Sawyer. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Charlie, thanks so much - Sawyer is an animal lover, not hunter LOL :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from royowen
A beautiful poem Brooke I've always admired your ability to ramp up this style of poem seemingly withou effort! A lovely theme, they no angst, nothing to disturb! Wonderfully crafted, I know these things require effort so well done, nice 7676 rhyming, even meter, blessings, Brooke,
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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A beautiful poem Brooke I've always admired your ability to ramp up this style of poem seemingly withou effort! A lovely theme, they no angst, nothing to disturb! Wonderfully crafted, I know these things require effort so well done, nice 7676 rhyming, even meter, blessings, Brooke,
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Roy - there's already far too much angst in the world without my making a contribution to it :-) Brooke
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You're right Brooke, a gentle person are you! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Tatarka2
Who wouldn't love this poem? I can't begin to imagine how long it must have taken you to get the perfect meter here, just right. That's what I learned from your course; that what looks and reads like it's humorous and effortless is often a carefully constructed piece of art. It's made me appreciate poetry even more. Congratulations on another poem that both kids and adults can enjoy.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Who wouldn't love this poem? I can't begin to imagine how long it must have taken you to get the perfect meter here, just right. That's what I learned from your course; that what looks and reads like it's humorous and effortless is often a carefully constructed piece of art. It's made me appreciate poetry even more. Congratulations on another poem that both kids and adults can enjoy.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend :-) yep, that effortless sound takes oodles of effort. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
A clear & great message done in a pleasant style full of rhyme and rhythm and lighted humor which no one can deny. I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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A clear & great message done in a pleasant style full of rhyme and rhythm and lighted humor which no one can deny. I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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giovanni, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
You rhythm's tempo and meter I done exceptionally well which helps it flows smoothly throughout the poem and where the rhyming helps with this flowing and is neither forced nor labored throughout.
Artistically your imagination is ingeniously creative and very inventive And your imagery portrays within the lines and words a picturesque descriptive and expressive wonder Of the hippo trying to fit in the human's habitat of the hand given pat downs and mud baths.
Thanks for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may are your endeavors be as good as this one.
Alex
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Brooke;
You rhythm's tempo and meter I done exceptionally well which helps it flows smoothly throughout the poem and where the rhyming helps with this flowing and is neither forced nor labored throughout.
Artistically your imagination is ingeniously creative and very inventive And your imagery portrays within the lines and words a picturesque descriptive and expressive wonder Of the hippo trying to fit in the human's habitat of the hand given pat downs and mud baths.
Thanks for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may are your endeavors be as good as this one.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Alex, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome Brooke.
Alex
Comment from wordsfromsue
Hippos aren't dangerous, some humans are just wusses. :-)
I'll take animals anyday! At least we could put our elbows on the table and burp and the hippo wouldn't faint. :-)
I do enjoy your whimsical writing, Brooke. :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Hippos aren't dangerous, some humans are just wusses. :-)
I'll take animals anyday! At least we could put our elbows on the table and burp and the hippo wouldn't faint. :-)
I do enjoy your whimsical writing, Brooke. :-)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Sue, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
WOW! Loud applause, Brooke! Bravo! I have no words for how good this is.
Have I ever mentioned, maybe subtly hinted, that you need to find a publisher for kids' books? You're sitting on a gold mine here, with just what you already have. If I neglected to mention it before, I'm telling you now. :)
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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WOW! Loud applause, Brooke! Bravo! I have no words for how good this is.
Have I ever mentioned, maybe subtly hinted, that you need to find a publisher for kids' books? You're sitting on a gold mine here, with just what you already have. If I neglected to mention it before, I'm telling you now. :)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Phyllis, thank you so much. I'm actually in the process of organizing my portfolio into things like animal poems as a preliminary step to work on finding a publisher. My daughter knows I'm doing it, so she will stay on my case. LOL :-) Brooke
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Good, good, GOOD! Thanks for telling me. I'm glad Miranda is on it. I've found that daughters are the best naggers. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
"I want a hippopotamus for Christmas" comes to mind as I read this funny poem. This speaks to the general idea of acceptance and understanding. Happy days.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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"I want a hippopotamus for Christmas" comes to mind as I read this funny poem. This speaks to the general idea of acceptance and understanding. Happy days.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Bill, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Brooke,
What, a dangerous hippo? Where? Brutus, in the pix looks like a friendly sort. I could swear I see a smile forming at the side of his mouth!
Fun dread.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke,
What, a dangerous hippo? Where? Brutus, in the pix looks like a friendly sort. I could swear I see a smile forming at the side of his mouth!
Fun dread.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Jax :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I guess some people think more literally than others. Funny. Cute, clever, and witty, Brooke, as usual. A sound ballad format. I spot those Hippo's occasionally when I'm eating out. Kenny
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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I guess some people think more literally than others. Funny. Cute, clever, and witty, Brooke, as usual. A sound ballad format. I spot those Hippo's occasionally when I'm eating out. Kenny
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Kenny, some people are so literal-minded that it's hard to believe. I wrote a poem based on a picture once, about a ladybug and butterfly who meet on the same leaf and become friends. A nice lady marked me down and explained to me that bugs can't actually talk and make friends. I always have wondered if she believed I actually believed I'd overheard their conversation. LOL :-) Thanks so much for your review :-)
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There's some nice 'uns.
