Comment from amaranthblue

Excellent

Wow, I was completely entranced by this and it only pulled me in further with each new line... The beauty, the wonder, a complete celebration of love and life... This really filled me with joy and hope and the love in the words was a tangible feeling of beauty... Thank you for sharing these words my friend...

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

Another exquisite poem from you...sorry, it took me so long to read and review it.

Love this part:

'Visions
under
a smiling
moonlight,
as we unite
on a foundation
of eternal
and unique
friendship.'

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2005

Comment from Permelia

Excellent

One wonderful aspect of reading your poetry, it takes me back in my memories when Jack were younger, and we danced in the moonlight in Hawaii-

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005

Comment from CYRANOGATOR

Good

Very clean and very simple. Good thoughts even though I thought notice a point of command in there that could be misconstrued (my dreams). Maybe our dreams or life's dreams. I may not want to share your ideas of your dreams, but I might want to share life's dreams to then become enraptured by the thoughts and emotions. Good job

Wally III

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005

Comment from Sarlou

Excellent

This is a truly enticing read from you! It excites all the sense with imagery and decriptions. I can't find faults! Well done, I enjoyed this one!
Sarlou xx

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

moonlight is one word
this is another very well written piece of poetry
this piece has a real good flow
thank you for presenting this wonderful work of art... John

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005

Comment from Jewell McChesney

Good

Ahh another dreamy write.
The word "lushness"....hmmmm
it just doesn't feel right to me here.

let's recapture
the splendid
lushness <<<of our souls


Your poetry has stayed in this dreamy state
for some time now.
It seems you need a challenge to get you out of dream state. :)

Hugs~
Jewell

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005

Comment from TR Stagner

Excellent

This is awesome Pili. I really like it. The flow is fabulous and the wording is sweet. I do have a question for you, my style is very much like this piece you have written and I get alot of complaints about the length of the lines, do you get those same complaints? This piece was absolutely wonderful though. Grats.

TR

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005

Comment from jkhudson

Excellent

Ah, to dance in the moonlight spinning and spinning in a graceful waltz! Such sweet imagery. Just as I have come to expect from you, this poem does not let me down. I love the verse:

Hold me close
in silky
embrace,
play chords
of illusion,
feel life
fully, taste
the sweet honey
of rapture.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

What a lively, happy, music-jamming kind of poem! It gives me images of people dancing out under the moon somewhere... don't know if that's what YOU saw, but it's what I received.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2005