Comment from vapros

Exceptional

My very best grade for this message of horror, showing great imagination and something else, also. I deemed it a great entry for a contest such as this one, until the last quatrain. That one struck a nerve in me, and it came with a jolt. You have scored deeply with this poem. Good work.

v

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks very much, Bill, I sincerely appreciate your complimentary review and encouraging comments. Those six stars are very nice as well!

I wish more voters in the contest felt as stronly about the poems worth as you do, as it is getting trounced in the voting booth. However, it was still great fun to write, and I was very happy with the result. I guess that's all that truly matters, when you get right down to it.

Thanks so much again, my friend.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is definitely horror that's for sure. It is a great entry for the prompt. Great rhyme. Very vivid imagery. Good luck to you.
Teresa

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks for your kind, encouraging review, Teresa. I truly appreciate it.

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Well this certainly meeting the horror criteria, I could almost imagine Vincent price reading out these gory words at the end of a film,Great rhyming and rhythm, and a flow as good as the blood.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Ah, good old Vincent, one of my classic horror favorites. Thanks for the great feedback and kind comments, Eric. It is always a pleasure to hear from you.

reply by Eric1 on 29-Jul-2014

You are welcome Dean.

Comment from tbacha58

Excellent

This poem captured my attention from beginning to end. The picture is incredible as it helped the author to come up with an amazing horror poem. Well done. Terry

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks, Terry. Much appreciated.

Comment from pbroussard209

Excellent

Wow what a powerful poem, I was not expecting the ending, I was seeing demons or vampires. You had a great twist and I love the level of horror you created.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks for the very complimentary review, pbroussard209. I only wish more voters agreed with you. I truly appreciate your encouraging comments just the same.

reply by pbroussard209 on 28-Jul-2014

I never win any contests, I hardly ever enter them anymore. When I do its more because I want the challenge of writing something different than my expectations of winning. If you love what you wrote than that is all that matters. I loved it too, if that helps. :)

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

It sure does, thanks! :}

reply by pbroussard209 on 28-Jul-2014

Welcome

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

This is a rather morbid poetic rendering. But it is well written and flows well within its poetic voice. I found nothing to suggest in this poem, as it seems to be flawlessly written. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... John

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks very much, John, and since it was a horror poem prompt the rules dictated that the poem must be horrific and incorporate a horror theme. Hence, the morbid rendering.

I truly appreciate your kind comments and review, my friend.

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

A very creative well structured poem that scares one to the bone. I do love the macabre. The lady presented looks pretty hot. If I have to go, I'd like her to be the one to come and get me. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Ha ha, thanks, Vic, and yeah, she ain't bad...for a dead dame. I sincerely appreciate the witty review, my friend!

reply by victor 66 on 28-Jul-2014

"Dead Dame", I believe you have the makings of another poem. You are most welcome.

Comment from GangGreen

Exceptional

This poem is truly horrifying from its brilliant opening to its disturbing conclusion.It keeps the reader transfixed throughout with its manipulation language and jarring imagery,lines nine and ten for instance, are particularly sinister.The artwork and musical background are excellent,though this poem is superb in its own right.Good luck with this masterfully macarbre entry.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks so much for your enthusiastic review and six star rating, GangGreen, I really appreciate it. And while it is getting trounced in the voting booth right now, I still had a great deal of fun in writing it.

Thanks so much again, my friend. Much obliged!

reply by GangGreen on 28-Jul-2014

No problem.

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

This is a real horror poem both in conception and in delivery. Very well chosen horrific words so dreadfully put together to really create a state of fear and tremble. Good creative and ingenuity in this.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks, OLA. I sincerely appreciate your review.

Comment from DragonSkulls

Excellent

Thank you. I will admit I was sadly disappointed when I reread this and saw that you changed the last line. Ending it with 'suicide' is far more effective thank what you changed it to. I'm glad you changed it back. This is a fantastic piece for the contest, friend. Thank you for jumping in the fun. "Begging will never provide release." Wow. Great work. I wish I could figure out how you do the writing the words on a pic and still be able to post it without needing words underneath it trick. Maybe some day you'll share that secret with me. Best of luck in the booth, friend. Again, excellent write.

Ron

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks, Ron, I really appreciate that buddy! I changed that last line initially in response to a reviewer who stated it would be far scarier to the the readers decide for themselves who I was speaking about. However, as the many sixes started to drop off to fives, I realized, perhaps too late, that I should have stayed with my original vision in the first place.

Thanks again for your great review, Ron. And congrats on your win, the poem you wrote was truly terrifying!

reply by DragonSkulls on 28-Jul-2014

I hope you didn't lose any votes because of it. Suicide was a better ending. Have a good one, D. We'll do it again soon, I'm sure.

Ron

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

I'm sure I probably did, Ron, but that's no ones fault but my own.

Thanks again.