Comment from jandeck

Excellent

Interesting battle between two masters of horror. This has a very chilling message. The end was unexpected largely due to the title. I was expecting devil worshipers. LOL. Anyway, great job as always!

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014

Ha=ha, devil worshipers huh, jandeck? Well, maybe I would have fared a bit better in the contest if it had been about that, LOL.

Thanks so much for the review, I truly appreciate it!

reply by jandeck on 05-Aug-2014

Always a pleasure!

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Exceptional

Wow this was intriguing and so enveloping of body and mind. I felt the terror and yet enjoyed the the story knowing the contest. A great write with compelling and captivating vocabulary. Smiles, Robin :)

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks for the exceptional rating and kind review, Robin. I am very glad you enjoyed reading it, and I hope that you were entertained, if only for a moment. :}

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is really horrific with the details you give about the blood and the carving of the body. The narrator declares he gives the gift of death, and some do seek that. The narrator's tone is a kind of boast about what he does--no regrets. The narrator is revealed as suicide. You have excellent AABB rhyme, and the flow is excellent. It certainly fits the bill for a horror poem, and best of luck in the contest. judi

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks, judi, and I'm afraid that the contest is now over. I lost by four votes to DragonSkulls terrifying poem, Many Coats of Skin. So, if you really want to be scared, that's probably your best bet.

Thanks for your kind comments.

reply by judiverse on 28-Jul-2014

You're welcome. Didn't realize the contest was over. With a name like DragonSkulls, that has to mean fright. judi

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Yeah, I just can't beat him, he's far better than me. :}

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

My dear Dean, I have to say you are the master of horror and this contest entry proves behind a shadow of doubt that you are the one and only master. Good luck with the contest, but I doubt you will need it. I'm sure you have the contest in your hip pocket. This is really good.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks, Barbara, but I'm afraid the king of horror in this particular contest was DragonSkulls and his chilling poem, Many Coats of Skin, as I came in second, 22 votes to 18. So, if you want to be truly terrified beyond repair, give that one a go.

Thanks for your kind comments and review just the same. I do appreciate it.

reply by barbara.wilkey on 28-Jul-2014

I am shocked but I will pass on the other poem. Thank you. LOL I should not share this with you but I will. MY husband is retired military, after 23 years. During his stint in the Army he was gone for long periods of time. Somehow my brain decided, only when he was gone, an alligator lived under our bed and would try to eat me. So I wouldn't get close to our bed and would leap from the center of the bedroom onto the bed. Now, I raised 4 boys, once they caught onto my little problem they teased me unmercifully and matter of fact, when we are all together this still comes up. Anyway, my husband is retired, hey, I'm 60, way too old to be leaping onto a bed.

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Ha, well, Barbara, I promise I won't use that to tease you, but you have to admit, it is a funny story, LOL!

reply by barbara.wilkey on 28-Jul-2014

My four boys have not let me forget it and they laugh as they tell it until tears roll down their cheeks. To be honest my husband still gets a kick out of it. He has never seen it in action and has mentioned it might be interesting.

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Ha ha, yes, I imagine it would be very interesting, heh-heh... :D

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Listen. What the hell is that sound? In the computer? Oh.
I thought after the C4 went off and the ball bearings flew
you were supposed to show me the way to paradise and all them virgins.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Well, I tried, LIJ Red, I tried... :}

Comment from Lastamen

Excellent

The author has achieved a chilling personification of the horror of suicide. Providing a voice to this madness of the mind and spirit that for many unfortunate souls becomes the only perceived avenue of escape. Well done.

Till the last amen

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thank you very much for the excellent review, Lastamen. I sincerely appreciate it!~Dean

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

I am using my daughter's computer, it is mine. I haven't had any other problems seeing other stories/poems today. You see you write such spooky stuff my computer is scared. LOL

I am very sorry for any inconvenience I may have caused.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

I'm not sure what you mean, Cajungirl. Others have had no trouble in reviewing it. Please try again, perhaps it is a setting with you computer? It has received over 50 reviews thus far with no problems whatsoever... until now.

reply by Cajungirl on 28-Jul-2014

Dean,

It was indeed my computer. I updated my review. Again, I am very sorry for the mistake.

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Hey, no worries, Cajungirl. You can't very well review what you can't see, right?> I was just concerned that you couldn't see it.

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

Reading that could give a person nightmares. It is well written and rhymes nicely while telling a story of someone who walked into a dangerous situation.

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks, Judy, and it is for a horror poem prompt, so it had to be rather...well-- horrific. I really appreciate your very nice review.

Comment from NurseBarb

Excellent

The words are scary enough, but then the music started playing ever so softly at first and I looked around the room not knowing what it was. Scared the crap out of me. Both are such great entries, however this one truly did scare me. Well done

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Ha ha, that is exactly the desired affect the music is supposed to have on you, NurseBarb, so thank you for confirming for me that it's working. I truly appreciate your very kind comments and entertaining review. :}

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

An amazing and brilliant verse. I think this was done on Photoshop, which is effective tool in perfecting the presentation.

This is horrifying, terrifying, graphic and horrific (smile). You've complied with the prompt requirements and then some. An awesome artwork to accompany.

The last two stanzas are particularly powerful.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thank you, Yelina, I truly appreciate your enthusiastic response. I use the Paint program for Windows, and simply superimpose the font over top of the picture I've chosen. It is a very difficult process, as everything must be made to fit, and it be legible. However, I've created many, and I'm always happy with the end results. This one was no exception.

Thanks again for the outstanding and encouraging review. I know how big your are on presentation, LOL...