A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "My Ceremony"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
87 total reviews
Comment from L.M.Mullins
"They warned you, still you wouldn't listen,
O' see the blood--Look how it glistens..."
I should know better than to read you before bed time. Very thought provoking ending. Excellent as always.
LM
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"They warned you, still you wouldn't listen,
O' see the blood--Look how it glistens..."
I should know better than to read you before bed time. Very thought provoking ending. Excellent as always.
LM
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from daeneam
"Do you not know that you are God's temple and that God's Spirit dwells in you? If anyone destroys God's temple, God will destroy him. For God's temple is holy, and you are that temple." 1 Corinthians 3:16-17
With the words you've shared above... no one will ever think about committing such... c", Mae
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"Do you not know that you are God's temple and that God's Spirit dwells in you? If anyone destroys God's temple, God will destroy him. For God's temple is holy, and you are that temple." 1 Corinthians 3:16-17
With the words you've shared above... no one will ever think about committing such... c", Mae
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Cragler
A vivid piece here with wonderful imagery your poem flows very welland the rhyming scheme works well also.You have portrayed your subject well.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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A vivid piece here with wonderful imagery your poem flows very welland the rhyming scheme works well also.You have portrayed your subject well.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thanks you very much, Cragler. I'm very happy to know that you thought so.
Comment from SilverWoulfCreations
This piece is very dark and fitting for the contest entered. A good read. And enjoyable to review. Well structured and put together. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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This piece is very dark and fitting for the contest entered. A good read. And enjoyable to review. Well structured and put together. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thanks to you for reviewing it as well as for the kind comments, SilverWoulfCreations. Much appreciated.
Comment from Chocolate Chip
What a well written piece! I like how you ventured away from the norm & chose horror to describe the taking of one's life. The images drawn from your choice words brought the poem to life. Thanks for taking your reader on an unexpected ride to show another way of how a life can end. Your work here is truly unique & wonderful! Loved it â?¡ ;) CC
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What a well written piece! I like how you ventured away from the norm & chose horror to describe the taking of one's life. The images drawn from your choice words brought the poem to life. Thanks for taking your reader on an unexpected ride to show another way of how a life can end. Your work here is truly unique & wonderful! Loved it â?¡ ;) CC
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from LoannaLois
This is so well-written, it is frightening. Many of us know of suicide in some way...and this reads and becomes the subject matter. It is perfectly stated and built to end as it ends.
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This is so well-written, it is frightening. Many of us know of suicide in some way...and this reads and becomes the subject matter. It is perfectly stated and built to end as it ends.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Sueswrite
Wow! Your collection of thoughts and vivid description bring this one final word, "Suicide", to definite perception. Great imagination and this certainly depicts the "horror" category perfectly! Best of luck to you, my friend!
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Wow! Your collection of thoughts and vivid description bring this one final word, "Suicide", to definite perception. Great imagination and this certainly depicts the "horror" category perfectly! Best of luck to you, my friend!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2014
Comment from Leineco
First let me say. . .that final line (word actually) brought me up short! It was definitely what I expected!!!!
Second - especially in rounding back contemplation, this poem is horrifically effective. What seemed to be a gore-fest suddenly turned into sharp warning.
Had it ended with anything other than the word suicide, I would have awarded a 5 for the talent and imagery. But with that jolting ending, the six is my only option! :-)
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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First let me say. . .that final line (word actually) brought me up short! It was definitely what I expected!!!!
Second - especially in rounding back contemplation, this poem is horrifically effective. What seemed to be a gore-fest suddenly turned into sharp warning.
Had it ended with anything other than the word suicide, I would have awarded a 5 for the talent and imagery. But with that jolting ending, the six is my only option! :-)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Leienco, and I'll take that "option" anytime you care to give it to me, LOL. I truly appreciate the fact that you enjoyed it, and I appreciate the exceptional rating and review.
Comment from DR DIP
You are the master of horror poetry and you do it so well. Just a couple of verses for perfect rhyme you may consider changing but hey who am I to say? its still fantastic as it is:
Begging will never provide release,
For I'm a sapless, savage beast
I'm the one you've been warned about
This path you chose with little doubt
consider:
Begging will never provide the feast,
For I'm a sapless, savage beast
I'm the one you've been warned about
This path you chose with little doubt
just a thought
as always dip
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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You are the master of horror poetry and you do it so well. Just a couple of verses for perfect rhyme you may consider changing but hey who am I to say? its still fantastic as it is:
Begging will never provide release,
For I'm a sapless, savage beast
I'm the one you've been warned about
This path you chose with little doubt
consider:
Begging will never provide the feast,
For I'm a sapless, savage beast
I'm the one you've been warned about
This path you chose with little doubt
just a thought
as always dip
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Dip, I really appreciate your review and suggestions, my friend. Much obliged!~Deano
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my pleasure as always master!
Comment from Trybuck
When suicide come calling
It is extremely appalling
Makes one squeamish to believe
One could be so deceived
To take their own life
Not with a needle or gun
but especially not a knife
Well done with your entry, Buck
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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When suicide come calling
It is extremely appalling
Makes one squeamish to believe
One could be so deceived
To take their own life
Not with a needle or gun
but especially not a knife
Well done with your entry, Buck
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your poetic reply and review, Trybuck. You should post that, give it a whirl and see what happens.
