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Where have all the children gone

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Comment from honeytree
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I like the art work very much for these words.

Children roaming the streets playing

some get into trouble, police patrol the streets.

Life is different today then yesterday.

honey tree

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

Comment from jonmichael
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Way to go Walter. There is something about a Island Beauty for a traveling Marine. I like the twist of the poem when it goes from mystery to sorrow with the hint of a pregnancy or of a birth that was left behind. None-the-less the poem is filled with carefree time and regrets. A good balance for a good topic.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Dear Walt - this has a solid easy flow as I read it aloud. Great word imagery, there is a sense of frustration I picked up, again you are able to weave many threads and layers into you work.

Always allowing for a more deeply connection to me. Past, present and future...and the journey must go on.

Excellent post my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen

Edit/suggestion:

"Days of a fate " // Would read better without "a"


 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014