Comment from Set in Stone

Excellent

I like this picture of nature as a fly-off-the-handle sort of
entity ready to go at a moment's notice. "Tempest' is a powerful word that does double duty suggesting both weather and anger. Very nicely done.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014

Thank you

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. Great job with the mini haiku. Seems hard to do. Great description in your poem. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014

Thank you

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

Sounds like hurricane season to me. Even your unique color scheme reminds me of tropical weather. I hope we are spared the fury this year. Best wishes with your entry.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thank you

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

it is true...you never know what mother nature has in store....and storms can be the worst....very well written...and good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014

Thank you

reply by l.raven on 24-Jul-2014

you are so welcome...xxoo

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I rate this five stars because it follows the criteria of the prompt. For what it's worth, I think it would be improved by using imagery that is more concrete, allowing the reader to see a specific way in which the stormy weather is unpredictable rather than just describing it as such. (Easier said than done, I'm sure.) Good luck to you. Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014

Thank you

Comment from Pyrrho

Excellent

I suggest you check the prompt. It calls for shot-long-short and you posted a 3-3-4 form.

Change it to:

weather
unpredictable
fury

and no one can toss you out for on-conformance.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014

Hi thanks for your review-I have changed it to 4-5-4. I missed typing a word from the start.