Comment from krys123

Excellent

Steve;
I found it very amusing this story and it made me laugh very much at the end. Your imagination and this is truly inventive and creative while your imagery is very expressive and descriptive without.
I really like the way you turned this story around believing that I thought the guy was going to get himself beat up and interned in acts down 50 motorcycles with his big rig.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Alex, thanks for the kind review.

Steve

reply by krys123 on 26-Jul-2014

You are so sincerely welcome Steve.
Alex

Comment from Tsukuyomi969

Excellent

Now that's how you handle a biker! lol Good idea using dialogue for something this short; that along with the language really set the scene and made it funny. Like a joke with a punch line. Good luck in the contest, too.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thank you.

yes, it was a challenge to hone the original idea down to just 50 words. Glad you felt it worked.

Steve

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Steve, Funny! But I bet you took this idea from the movie, "Smokey and the Bandit." Regardless where the idea came from, its a fun little story. Carole

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks, Carole.

I've never seen that movie, but you may be right that the joke is one that's been around for a while. It's something I dredged up from my memory banks with no idea of where it came from.

Steve

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Ho-h-o-o-o-o-o-l-y crappers! There's gonna' be hell to pay when those bikers catch up to the truck driver who can't drive a truck. A biker's Hog is his baby, his most prized possession -- even more so than his old lady, and he will kill you if you even look at her the wrong way, so...

Good luck, truck drivin' man. You're sure gonna' need it!

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Now how in hell are those mean ol' bikers going to catch up with him when they don't have any transport?

Thanks for the fun review.

Steve

reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Jul-2014

Well, the Black Widows always caught up with Clint Eastwood and his orangutan, Clyde, in the Every Which Way but Loose movies. So I figured, why not? LOL...

Your very welcome, Steve.

reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Jul-2014

Well, the Black Widows always caught up with Clint Eastwood and his orangutan, Clyde, in the Every Which Way but Loose movies. So I figured, why not? LOL...

You're very welcome, Steve.

reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Jul-2014

Well, the Black Widows always caught up with Clint Eastwood and his orangutan, Clyde, in the Every Which Way but Loose movies. So I figured, why not? LOL...

You're very welcome, Steve.

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

I enjoyed your fifty word story. What a great job and a perfect picture to match. best of luck in the contest, this is excellent.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your story. Great job with your 50 word story. It flowed really nicely from start to finish. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

reply by rrabinow on 25-Jul-2014

You are welcome.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

LOL, Steve,

Very funny! He, who is the quiet gentleman can have the last laugh.

Well done. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks, Jax.

I always love it when the underdog comes out on top.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Kiwi engine-uity....if I ever saw it and in fifty words......who counts asterixes?...Harley know what to say....good job and good answer to the prompt ....very clever........
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks, Jenny.

Did you notice I even sneaked in a New Zealand biker?

Steve

reply by kiwijenny on 25-Jul-2014

Steve I didn't recognize the biker but I have been gone too long...I enjoyed my 2 weeks home....it's beautiful even when waves are lapping over roads and we are driving and can't see the dotted lines for water.....:o)

Comment from Donna McNaughton

Excellent

Haha, poetic justice, I'd call it. You did a fine job of keeping it short and to the point but with character. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Thanks, Donna.

I always love it when the underdog comes out on top.

Steve

Comment from pafaust

Excellent

I like the way the story is captured, wonderfully, in dialogue. If you had had more words to work with, I would have loved to hear the bikers' responses. Thanks for little guy with the big truck win. I can imagine the bartender giggling to himself that he felt that is what his regular patrons deserved.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014

Don't think I would have been allowed to tell you their response! Lots of expletives deleted.

Thanks for reviewing.

Steve