Logical reason
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Comment from Dawny53
logical reason.. yes, where is it? A sad state the whole lot of the world is in, and you have tried to make sense of it with your poem. Sadly, it cannot be done because there is no logical reason for such madness.. am I right? As sad as it is, I enjoyed your p0em.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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logical reason.. yes, where is it? A sad state the whole lot of the world is in, and you have tried to make sense of it with your poem. Sadly, it cannot be done because there is no logical reason for such madness.. am I right? As sad as it is, I enjoyed your p0em.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your meaningful comments. Pili
Comment from robina1978
The sad artwork complements your poem extremely well. It is a sad but beautiful free verse. Nice elements in it.
Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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The sad artwork complements your poem extremely well. It is a sad but beautiful free verse. Nice elements in it.
Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Ine ,meaningful comment. Enjoy today. Pili
Comment from ArtGal
You wrote a really great poem, and oh so very true, unfortunately. Your chosen picture adds a lot to your wonderful wording. I see pictures of war, and they all get to me, but what hurts the most is when I have to look at those lost children, and many of them bloody and torn. So many alone and without parents. This must stop! We must do our part, but where do we start??? I wish you the best of luck in this contest. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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You wrote a really great poem, and oh so very true, unfortunately. Your chosen picture adds a lot to your wonderful wording. I see pictures of war, and they all get to me, but what hurts the most is when I have to look at those lost children, and many of them bloody and torn. So many alone and without parents. This must stop! We must do our part, but where do we start??? I wish you the best of luck in this contest. . .Sharon
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Sharon. Thank you for a very true and moving comment. War has been a constant in human history,,even if I believe most people want peace... Pili
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Pili, you're so very welcome, but would like to help in any way possible, like probably most of us would...Sharon
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I understand , I am sure you will as much as you can. Hugs. Pili
Comment from granny goes viral
Poetry born of anguish, poetry urged on by suffering, some find it difficult, I find it therapeutic. Your life story has the making of books of poetry.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Poetry born of anguish, poetry urged on by suffering, some find it difficult, I find it therapeutic. Your life story has the making of books of poetry.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Oh , granny what a moving comment, thank you so very much. Pili
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Pili,
This is a beautiful work. Love the wonderful photo you chose for this poem, as well - perfect pairing to compliment.
Nicely done - heartfelt. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi Pili,
This is a beautiful work. Love the wonderful photo you chose for this poem, as well - perfect pairing to compliment.
Nicely done - heartfelt. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so very much Jax, great review. Pili
Comment from kiwijenny
all senses buried
under agonized screams
abandoned children
terror in their eyes
Saddest verse.......poor darling little children
God bless...well written
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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all senses buried
under agonized screams
abandoned children
terror in their eyes
Saddest verse.......poor darling little children
God bless...well written
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much kiwi for a meaningful comment. Pili
Comment from adewpearl
the death of logical reason - it makes one cry and cringe, doesn't it? For you are so right, there can be no reason under the sun for killing children, or leaving them orphaned, or leaving them homeless
you convey the agonized fear of these children in a compelling way in this poem of intense social commentary
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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the death of logical reason - it makes one cry and cringe, doesn't it? For you are so right, there can be no reason under the sun for killing children, or leaving them orphaned, or leaving them homeless
you convey the agonized fear of these children in a compelling way in this poem of intense social commentary
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Yes it does my friend, thank you for your very meaningful comment. Pili
Comment from seaglass
There little logic in war and oppression unless greed can be considered logic. The suffering of many in the world is mind boggling. This poem conveys the need for compassion
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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There little logic in war and oppression unless greed can be considered logic. The suffering of many in the world is mind boggling. This poem conveys the need for compassion
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you for a very meaningful comment. Pili
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Pili.
With respect, maybe delete capitals and question mark from 1st verse to match the simplicity of the others.
This is my favourite free verse format, with short lines- and sometimes short and random length stanzas.
No boring 'blah blah' - just short dramatic statements to describe the horrors of war and its aftermath for the children, many of whom have never enjoyeded real peace or freedom.
Best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi, Pili.
With respect, maybe delete capitals and question mark from 1st verse to match the simplicity of the others.
This is my favourite free verse format, with short lines- and sometimes short and random length stanzas.
No boring 'blah blah' - just short dramatic statements to describe the horrors of war and its aftermath for the children, many of whom have never enjoyeded real peace or freedom.
Best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Will do Thank you my friend, very meaningful comment. Thank you so much. Pili
Comment from reconciled
"reasoning" get rid of "is" "tremble in" terrorize their eyes" Hi beauty.....-smile-....yes, Live and let die....our anthem sings sweet misery. I don't care so long as it doesn't touch me. Wonderful expression of loves abandon. love you Michael
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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"reasoning" get rid of "is" "tremble in" terrorize their eyes" Hi beauty.....-smile-....yes, Live and let die....our anthem sings sweet misery. I don't care so long as it doesn't touch me. Wonderful expression of loves abandon. love you Michael
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Have difficulty understanding corrections, but thank you sooo much my Miguelito , meaningful comment and six big ones !!!! Yepyyyyyyy, love you
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its beautiful ...just the way it was born Pili...-smile-
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LOL u cute..
