Breezes, part1
Breath of God?88 total reviews
Comment from TOMORAL
Oh, I've always felt the Holy Spirit when the wind blows, caressing my face with His gentle hands. Thanks so much for putting your feelings into this one. Very well done, poet.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Oh, I've always felt the Holy Spirit when the wind blows, caressing my face with His gentle hands. Thanks so much for putting your feelings into this one. Very well done, poet.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you sir, only others can you poet, so thank you for this wonderful review and comments blessings, Roy.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Such a stunning work! Loved your song lyrics - flawless rhyming and flow. Great imagery here.
I adored the picture of these clouds - are they real? The picture matches the work very well.
Some favorite lines:
Oh breath of wind against my face,
Surrounding with your warm embrace,
This breath of wind now dips and swirls,
It whips my hair and tangles curls!
Terrific!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Such a stunning work! Loved your song lyrics - flawless rhyming and flow. Great imagery here.
I adored the picture of these clouds - are they real? The picture matches the work very well.
Some favorite lines:
Oh breath of wind against my face,
Surrounding with your warm embrace,
This breath of wind now dips and swirls,
It whips my hair and tangles curls!
Terrific!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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I'm not sure, I downloaded from bing, thank you for the great review and wonderful comments! Blessings, Roy!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Royowen,
Charming piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme - a very good quality.
Smooth and pleasant flow throughout the poem.
Lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
"Oh breath of wind against my face,
Please be my friend, please show me grace,
But once again he flees, he hides,
Where does he live, where does he bide!" (Chorus)
Excellent!
[I'll certainly like to read its 2nd Part, Keep it up!]
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Hello Royowen,
Charming piece of poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme - a very good quality.
Smooth and pleasant flow throughout the poem.
Lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
Picture enhances beauty of the poem.
"Oh breath of wind against my face,
Please be my friend, please show me grace,
But once again he flees, he hides,
Where does he live, where does he bide!" (Chorus)
Excellent!
[I'll certainly like to read its 2nd Part, Keep it up!]
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you RP, for you for these most encouraging review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Bryan G
Your gentle wind reminds me of the still small voice heard by Elijah in the cave at Mount Horeb. Often we wait for the fantastic mighty rushing wing when it is the still small voice we should be seeking after. This is a wonderful poem as it stirred the emotions of a cynical man.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Your gentle wind reminds me of the still small voice heard by Elijah in the cave at Mount Horeb. Often we wait for the fantastic mighty rushing wing when it is the still small voice we should be seeking after. This is a wonderful poem as it stirred the emotions of a cynical man.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you Bryan, that's my experience with God, not a booming voice, but the voice that spoke to Elijah, you know it's God because of the absolution it brings! Great review and very encouraging! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I will rather crown this poem as a spiritual poem rather than a general poem. Nicely thought out with deep imagery. The personification of wind for Holy Spirit and also in "Oh breath of wind your cousin groans
He bends the the trees and breaks their bones." Nice work
ola thomas
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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I will rather crown this poem as a spiritual poem rather than a general poem. Nicely thought out with deep imagery. The personification of wind for Holy Spirit and also in "Oh breath of wind your cousin groans
He bends the the trees and breaks their bones." Nice work
ola thomas
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you Ola, for the wonderful comments and review! Blessings, Roy,
Comment from chasennov
"Breezes, part1" A very lovely poem/song you have created here which I enjoyed no end. I liked its power, and its message. Well done.
one little spag: He bends the (the) trees and breaks their bones.
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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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"Breezes, part1" A very lovely poem/song you have created here which I enjoyed no end. I liked its power, and its message. Well done.
one little spag: He bends the (the) trees and breaks their bones.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for this splendid review and comments, blessings, Roy.
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You are most welcome, Roy.
Comment from krys123
Roy;
I really like your song/lyrics very well and being a professional songwriter I thought this was brilliantly and exceptionally written.
Just for syntax purposes you have to two (the's) in your first verse after your chorus: "He bends the the trees...".
This song is very innovatively creative and uniquely inventive and energy use set of the wind and breeze is very descriptive and constructively expressive throughout.
Your rhyming is neither forced nor labored and your imagery flows smoothly throughout your song.
It grabs you and has a great hook (Something that entices the reader in makes it remember this song).
Thanks for sharing this with everyone and made the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Roy;
I really like your song/lyrics very well and being a professional songwriter I thought this was brilliantly and exceptionally written.
Just for syntax purposes you have to two (the's) in your first verse after your chorus: "He bends the the trees...".
This song is very innovatively creative and uniquely inventive and energy use set of the wind and breeze is very descriptive and constructively expressive throughout.
Your rhyming is neither forced nor labored and your imagery flows smoothly throughout your song.
It grabs you and has a great hook (Something that entices the reader in makes it remember this song).
Thanks for sharing this with everyone and made the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Wow! Thanks Alex, I really appreciate you words and very uplifting, encouraging words, I wrote another one called " dust " it was in a similar vein, I might revive it! I sing it in the nursing home ministry I'm in, and they love It! Thank you so much, it means a lot! Blessings, Roy
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You are more than sincerely welcome Roy.
Alex
Comment from Ben Colder
Reminds me somewhat of Songs of Solomon. Poetry in my book is suppose to sing and I must admit lots here on F/S/ just don't make sense. Well done Bro. HE LIVES+
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Reminds me somewhat of Songs of Solomon. Poetry in my book is suppose to sing and I must admit lots here on F/S/ just don't make sense. Well done Bro. HE LIVES+
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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That's why I write, Ben, the 2nd part of this song, brings it together! Thanks again bro, for the wonderful support and encouragement, I was conversing with someone online, they called you the FS missionary! Wow! Blessings, Roy.
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What an honor. I hope someone can be blessed by something I say or do. Love you Bubba, My blessings
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We are waging a war, with love, my bro, Roy. But we 're winners!
