Breezes, part1
Breath of God?88 total reviews
Comment from Lastamen
The Master tells us that "the wind blows where it wills" and we know not. The moving and working of the Holy Spirit is given to those who obey the will of the Lord. This touching series of questions beacons the Spirit to lead, guide and direct and then reveal its Divine presence. Such a glorious thought which gives us all cause to pause. Well done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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The Master tells us that "the wind blows where it wills" and we know not. The moving and working of the Holy Spirit is given to those who obey the will of the Lord. This touching series of questions beacons the Spirit to lead, guide and direct and then reveal its Divine presence. Such a glorious thought which gives us all cause to pause. Well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for your great review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Dear Roy,
Bring on part 2. I really enjoyed 'Breezes.' I am glad you wrote author notes as it clarified some questions the poem had raised. It was an interesting read.
Good night friend,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Dear Roy,
Bring on part 2. I really enjoyed 'Breezes.' I am glad you wrote author notes as it clarified some questions the poem had raised. It was an interesting read.
Good night friend,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the great review and comments, Carolyn, I appreciate it dear friend, Roy.
Comment from ArtGal
Hey friend, I've told you before that your songwriting will get you far here! I'm so glad you're doing this. People love it, now if only you could put some music to it, and I bet you could! The wording here is fantastic, and as usual, I love reading your author notes. Keep them coming, and keep writing, and hope you never have to leave here!!! Whenever I come here to review, I want to see you on that front page! Many blessings. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hey friend, I've told you before that your songwriting will get you far here! I'm so glad you're doing this. People love it, now if only you could put some music to it, and I bet you could! The wording here is fantastic, and as usual, I love reading your author notes. Keep them coming, and keep writing, and hope you never have to leave here!!! Whenever I come here to review, I want to see you on that front page! Many blessings. . .Sharon
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you dear friend, for your uplifting remarks, I covet your opinion and encouragement, bless you, Roy
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You're always so very welcome, dear friend!
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good rhythm and flow. Good alliteration with with/warm...limp/low...friend/foe. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good rhythm and flow. Good alliteration with with/warm...limp/low...friend/foe. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you Bro for your encouraging comments, and review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from honeytree
Beautifully written in every way the art work is superb.
God has given us many gifts within our lives a
one of them is the wind that can be gentle or strong.
We must remember that the breath of wind from God
is so special.
honey tree
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Beautifully written in every way the art work is superb.
God has given us many gifts within our lives a
one of them is the wind that can be gentle or strong.
We must remember that the breath of wind from God
is so special.
honey tree
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you dear friend for your most encouraging comments and review, blessings, Roy.
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I loved what you wrote Roy
I had no six left.
Annie
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed this half of your song and hope you have set it to music. Thank you for the notes for addition context and the ethereal artwork to reinforce the mood as well. Your personifying the "wind" adds to the intensity also. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I enjoyed this half of your song and hope you have set it to music. Thank you for the notes for addition context and the ethereal artwork to reinforce the mood as well. Your personifying the "wind" adds to the intensity also. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Joan, I appreciate your comments and review, blessings, Roy
Comment from loibeth
One of your lines just changed! That is much better: Surround ME with your warm embrace!
Regarding the second stanza: to me the last line interferes with the nice flow the first 3 lines provide somehow. ... Perhaps you can make the last line parallel with the other lines... mentioning a different topic instead (another "when" line if you know what I mean) and end with the question mark. Just wondering!
Another thing: you might want to make use of "?" for the question lines.
Other than that, I truly love your poem. You got great rhymes and a great topic, the wind of the HS. Great job!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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One of your lines just changed! That is much better: Surround ME with your warm embrace!
Regarding the second stanza: to me the last line interferes with the nice flow the first 3 lines provide somehow. ... Perhaps you can make the last line parallel with the other lines... mentioning a different topic instead (another "when" line if you know what I mean) and end with the question mark. Just wondering!
Another thing: you might want to make use of "?" for the question lines.
Other than that, I truly love your poem. You got great rhymes and a great topic, the wind of the HS. Great job!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for your constructive, I guess the questions are rhetorical, rather than expecting an answer! Thank you for your wonderful review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from l.raven
Roy, this is just beautiful...I love the story in your authors notes....and then they were all filled with the Holy Spirit...and their speeches changed...I so love this poem...a wonderful song...and the picture is stunning...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Roy, this is just beautiful...I love the story in your authors notes....and then they were all filled with the Holy Spirit...and their speeches changed...I so love this poem...a wonderful song...and the picture is stunning...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Linda, for these lovely, encouragement and comments, blessings,,Roy.
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you are so welcome Roy...xxoo
Comment from Aussie
Fabulous illustration to compliment your poem. When my mother died, I saw her face when the clouds parted. I liked your song/poem very much and the wind does mean different things to different people; take the Wind walkers a tribe of American Indians who were used during WW11 to send messages across the mountains.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Fabulous illustration to compliment your poem. When my mother died, I saw her face when the clouds parted. I liked your song/poem very much and the wind does mean different things to different people; take the Wind walkers a tribe of American Indians who were used during WW11 to send messages across the mountains.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thank you Kaye for this lovely review and sharing the things you have learnt! You must be extremely well read! I appreciate also the high rating, bless you, Roy.
Comment from Dawny53
An excellent poem, good use of the metaphor of the wind for the Holy Spirit. Your writing is so well put together, I really like it. I enjoy your poems very much. I wondered if in stanza 1 you would want to say Oh breath of wind against my face surround me with your warm embrace.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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An excellent poem, good use of the metaphor of the wind for the Holy Spirit. Your writing is so well put together, I really like it. I enjoy your poems very much. I wondered if in stanza 1 you would want to say Oh breath of wind against my face surround me with your warm embrace.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Good suggestion Dawny, that was very helpful and constructive, I will do it, sometimes it takes others to see what we don't, great review and encouraging comments also, my thanks, blessings, Roy!,
