Breezes, part1
Breath of God?88 total reviews
Comment from playinaround
I love this song. Not an easy thing to do = to write a song. This song is inspiring and has a powerful message. Thank you for sharing this spiritual song!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I love this song. Not an easy thing to do = to write a song. This song is inspiring and has a powerful message. Thank you for sharing this spiritual song!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you for these uplifting comments and review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Cin
The rhythm and rhyme in your poem is pretty awesome - I love the metaphoric use of wind for the Holy Spirit - you never know if you will be touched by a gentle breeze or a howl to guide or drive. Nice. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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The rhythm and rhyme in your poem is pretty awesome - I love the metaphoric use of wind for the Holy Spirit - you never know if you will be touched by a gentle breeze or a howl to guide or drive. Nice. :-)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comments and review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from livelylinda
royowen: this is a lovely poems and one which entices us to think more about the wind. The subject of wind in poetry is certainly not new, however, your version is original and refreshing; leaves the reader with something nice to ponder during their day. Good writing, Roy. Linda
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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royowen: this is a lovely poems and one which entices us to think more about the wind. The subject of wind in poetry is certainly not new, however, your version is original and refreshing; leaves the reader with something nice to ponder during their day. Good writing, Roy. Linda
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you Linda for this outstanding review and affirming comments, I am truly grateful, blessings, Roy.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Breezes, part I' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Not for a moment would I attempt to answer this talented poet's rhetorical questions. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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'Breezes, part I' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. Not for a moment would I attempt to answer this talented poet's rhetorical questions. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you duchess for your wonderful support and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Roy, you're very welcome.
Bless you too, the Duchess
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Roy - This is very beautiful and I love the use of metaphor for the Holy Spirit. I thought your second stanza was very good - fine description of how things are when the wind ceases. Although your author notes tell us you use wind as a metaphor for the Holy Spirit, your second stanzais more of a real wind missing, rather than metaphor, ie flags on pole hang limp and low, clothes on lines hang limp and wet. This would not be through the Holy Spirit, this would be lack of real wind. But I loved the read - it flowed well, and, as I know, your faith in the Holy Spirit is very evident. Kind Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi Roy - This is very beautiful and I love the use of metaphor for the Holy Spirit. I thought your second stanza was very good - fine description of how things are when the wind ceases. Although your author notes tell us you use wind as a metaphor for the Holy Spirit, your second stanzais more of a real wind missing, rather than metaphor, ie flags on pole hang limp and low, clothes on lines hang limp and wet. This would not be through the Holy Spirit, this would be lack of real wind. But I loved the read - it flowed well, and, as I know, your faith in the Holy Spirit is very evident. Kind Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you Dorothy for these most encouraging, remarks and review, sometimes it feels like God is not around, but of course He is, that's what the illustration is about, my spirit hangs lank and wet, blessings to you, LiC, Roy.
Comment from Dutchie
Wonderful written this song, Roy. Great rhythm, rhyme and a smooth flow of words. I hope you put it on music. A Sacred song and a wonderful methaphor for the Holy Spirit.
Well done my friend it's beautiful!!! Fia
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Wonderful written this song, Roy. Great rhythm, rhyme and a smooth flow of words. I hope you put it on music. A Sacred song and a wonderful methaphor for the Holy Spirit.
Well done my friend it's beautiful!!! Fia
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you Fia, for such a beautiful review and stars, your support is reall appreciated, blessings, Roy.
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You're welcome Roy...
Comment from Hareem.S
This is a beautiful lyrical poem, I must say. It is penned down in a vivid manner and the musings are expressed clearly. I like the rhyme and rhythm of it.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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This is a beautiful lyrical poem, I must say. It is penned down in a vivid manner and the musings are expressed clearly. I like the rhyme and rhythm of it.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Hareem, I appreciate the wonderful comments, and the review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Quire's Gal
Awesome job with this song! Your rhythm is spot on and your rhymes are perfect.
I loved the opening line that you use repeatedly. I can certainly hear this as a song.
Take care and enjoy your week,
Drusilla1
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Awesome job with this song! Your rhythm is spot on and your rhymes are perfect.
I loved the opening line that you use repeatedly. I can certainly hear this as a song.
Take care and enjoy your week,
Drusilla1
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you for this most wonderful review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from gazzagodbod
great description in your words love the vision in the swirling wind and hair great write loved it thank you my friend xxgazzagodbodxx
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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great description in your words love the vision in the swirling wind and hair great write loved it thank you my friend xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for this great review and comments, blessings, Roy
Comment from Leineco
Your meter/cadence is honed to perfection and your rhymes/couplets are nicely done. Your metaphor is clearly painted :-) I'm looking forward to the second half :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Your meter/cadence is honed to perfection and your rhymes/couplets are nicely done. Your metaphor is clearly painted :-) I'm looking forward to the second half :-)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Great review and comments thank you so much, appreciate it blessings,Roy.
