Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

Hi Ine,

A great, though sad, poem, and good author notes. Good imagery throughout. Easy to see how the warm bath would be good therapy.

His worried face became (becomes) empty and beautiful,

Lois

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2014

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Comment from granny goes viral

Excellent

Yes, it was, and it wasn't at all poetic. Although considering the other "treatments", it was relatively benign.
The visual is impact full as well. Good job.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I was unaware they did that to mental patients, but I guess, if it has good effect and gives the patients satisfaction, why not! Informative poem with good choice of words and imagery to convey your message. Enjoyable read. Faye

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014

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Comment from JudyS

Excellent

robina, I found this a very interesting poem. I can see where the warm water would calm a patient. I don't care for the thought of cold water as punishment tho. I'd like to think we've come farther than that in our therapy methods. Good job. You got the point across well. Judy

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is quite the story Ine. I can't believe the way they used to treat mentally ill patients in the hospitals.
~teresa~

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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Comment from sunnilicious

Exceptional

I'm all for showers once per day. Baths once a week... Eewwhhh. Good story in a poem. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good work.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine Thanks for the lovely six.

reply by sunnilicious on 21-Jul-2014

It goes well deserved. Enjoy!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

vivid descriptive detail
good use of enjambment to keep thought flowing from line to line
good use of action verbs to create tone and to show action
stiff, hard cloths - clothes
good alliteration in stayed a scared
a moving depiction of how this man is offered brief respite in the bath only to be removed from it and returned to the harshness of life
Brooke

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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Comment from judiverse

Excellent

I remember reading about this form of therapy some years ago but haven't heard much recently. You give an excellent description of the man and his reactions to receiving the treatment. It seems like the therapy works, as he has a beautiful smile. I love your description of his feet as standing up like pale flowers. It doesn't sound like this treatment does any lasting good for the man. He just enjoys the experience while it lasts. Excellent flow throughout this. In next to last stanza, cloths should be clothes. judi

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine. Thanks

reply by judiverse on 21-Jul-2014

You're so welcome. judi

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I actually like soaking in a jacuzzi or a steam room/sauna--I hadn't thought about the connection with the mother's womb--but they are calming. Your description is quite vivid, and even without the picture I could visualize the patient being reborn, only to be returned roughly to his "scared" state. (The first line of the second stanza needs only "of" not "from".) Your "pale flowers" and "birch-stem" similes are very effective. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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Comment from gazzagodbod

Exceptional

wow could almost feel the warm soapy water and given my share of baths in the past some love em some hate em thanks my freind well worthy of a big six xxgazzagodbodxx

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week , Ine. hanks for the lovely six.