Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "The Old Farm and Unexpected Guests"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
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Comment from adewpearl
You set the stage well with vivid detail of setting
What's your name, little girl - add comma for direct address
good dialogue
The girls looked at Angela, who nodded - add the comma
Interesting plot developments...
Brooke
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You set the stage well with vivid detail of setting
What's your name, little girl - add comma for direct address
good dialogue
The girls looked at Angela, who nodded - add the comma
Interesting plot developments...
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Is that tracker chip still in that cat, Sampson? Was a surprise, about them kids. i GOT A FEW CHUCKLES OUT OF BARRY'S CAR. YELLOW BRICK ROAD AND ALL. HUMOROUS. NICE ADDITION TO YOUR NOVEL. I LIKE THE PICTURES. THIS IS ONE HELLUVA SLIDESHOW. ESPECIALLY LIKE THE PICTURE OF THE OLD HOME. THAT PRISCILLA SURE LOOKS HOMELY LOOKIN' RUN FOR THE HILLS ... HUCKLEBERRY! LIKE YOUR WOODSHED TOOLS. COUNT YOUR DOUBLOON, SIR MIKEY.
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Is that tracker chip still in that cat, Sampson? Was a surprise, about them kids. i GOT A FEW CHUCKLES OUT OF BARRY'S CAR. YELLOW BRICK ROAD AND ALL. HUMOROUS. NICE ADDITION TO YOUR NOVEL. I LIKE THE PICTURES. THIS IS ONE HELLUVA SLIDESHOW. ESPECIALLY LIKE THE PICTURE OF THE OLD HOME. THAT PRISCILLA SURE LOOKS HOMELY LOOKIN' RUN FOR THE HILLS ... HUCKLEBERRY! LIKE YOUR WOODSHED TOOLS. COUNT YOUR DOUBLOON, SIR MIKEY.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter and see you are utilizing your new picture talent mate. For how long huh! For how long? I will probably just get it figured out then whish!!! All gone!
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Great chapter and see you are utilizing your new picture talent mate. For how long huh! For how long? I will probably just get it figured out then whish!!! All gone!
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Okay, now there are MORE kids in danger. But more to rescue then. Since it's just Elsa and Barry, the cops should have no trouble overpowering their defenses. They'd be stupid to shoot a hostage, so the kids are safe too. I hope.
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Okay, now there are MORE kids in danger. But more to rescue then. Since it's just Elsa and Barry, the cops should have no trouble overpowering their defenses. They'd be stupid to shoot a hostage, so the kids are safe too. I hope.
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Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
