Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "The Old Farm and Unexpected Guests"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
14 total reviews
Comment from reconciled
hey Mike...well...this was creepy as it comes. but as we know from news footage daily and life experience after recovery from last venture....so I'm hoping for a happy ending....how bout you....-smile-. Alright good luck out there. love Michael
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hey Mike...well...this was creepy as it comes. but as we know from news footage daily and life experience after recovery from last venture....so I'm hoping for a happy ending....how bout you....-smile-. Alright good luck out there. love Michael
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from LoannaLois
Now I have to catch up somehow, because I'm hooked! I love your characterization and it looks like you have a great story line.
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Now I have to catch up somehow, because I'm hooked! I love your characterization and it looks like you have a great story line.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Good establishment of the setting. And the addition of the new kids- they probably know their way around and will be invaluable should Angela escape. Over grown should be overgrown.
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Good establishment of the setting. And the addition of the new kids- they probably know their way around and will be invaluable should Angela escape. Over grown should be overgrown.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
Comment from Nosha17
This was a well written chapter, good descriptive language for descriptions of the house and setting. I hope the showdown with the detectives comes soon to sort that mad woman out. Enjoyable read, as always. Faye
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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This was a well written chapter, good descriptive language for descriptions of the house and setting. I hope the showdown with the detectives comes soon to sort that mad woman out. Enjoyable read, as always. Faye
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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She does need to get sorted out! (I like that term) Glad you liked this, mikey
Comment from Tatarka2
I hope the illness isn't too serious. I'm a little surprised you're still working on this story. I'm assuming from your note that you've also taken a break, at least from this one, and are picking it up now. My only suggestion would be to leave out some of the details, like the description of the wood, house, etc. "Less is more," I think, especially when you're already 28 chapters in.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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I hope the illness isn't too serious. I'm a little surprised you're still working on this story. I'm assuming from your note that you've also taken a break, at least from this one, and are picking it up now. My only suggestion would be to leave out some of the details, like the description of the wood, house, etc. "Less is more," I think, especially when you're already 28 chapters in.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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The description was a request! Ha! This is a sequel. It's coming near an end pretty soon. Nothing too serious. With the mentally ill there are always unexpected issues that pop up. Hard to get a real work flow going. That contributes to me always trying to catch up. A good excuse anyway. :)). Was trying a chapter a day. But have been every other day for a week or so. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
A crisp fast moving chapter. Lots of humor and insights in this chapter. Love the description of the farmhouse. Interesting to find kids squating there and realistic. A sign of the times. Adds realism without hindering the basic plot. Wise. Cool to show the Bard wit a very kucid moment. It only makes sense.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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A crisp fast moving chapter. Lots of humor and insights in this chapter. Love the description of the farmhouse. Interesting to find kids squating there and realistic. A sign of the times. Adds realism without hindering the basic plot. Wise. Cool to show the Bard wit a very kucid moment. It only makes sense.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I was hoping that is how it would be seen. I'm always pleased that little details are noticed. Thanks for all the stars! mikey
Comment from l.raven
Hey you, your doing great....you take care of your household first...some one being sick comes first...
this is great...Elsa( the wicked witch of the south) just found two little kids in the house...and Lucy, Tenaya, and Bard are dead on there feet...need some rest...and Bard thinks there are more kids...just take your time...we aren't going anywhere...love your story...and it's going just fine Michael...Luff Linda xxoo love
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hey you, your doing great....you take care of your household first...some one being sick comes first...
this is great...Elsa( the wicked witch of the south) just found two little kids in the house...and Lucy, Tenaya, and Bard are dead on there feet...need some rest...and Bard thinks there are more kids...just take your time...we aren't going anywhere...love your story...and it's going just fine Michael...Luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you!! Sometimes there doesn't seem to be enough hours in the day. I'm so delighted you are enjoying the story. I didn't even know they were in there until they opened they door. Hahaha. The kids just kinda walked out. More to come. Hopefully tommorow. mikey
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LMAO you...must have been a shock...LOL...ya goof...look for ya tomorrow...or that would be today...hmmmmm....xxoo
Comment from seaglass
Hope everyone is well and healthy again.
This is good. Great descriptions to give the readers a picture of the setting. found one little typo
"No one's lived (her) since we can remember." OOPS (here)
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Hope everyone is well and healthy again.
This is good. Great descriptions to give the readers a picture of the setting. found one little typo
"No one's lived (her) since we can remember." OOPS (here)
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I hope every one is feeling better. I love the story. Elsa now has four girls to watch. Angela is at her best when she is watching out for other children. Samson is on his way. So is the crew that is going to kick some butt. They are better when protecting others too. It will be a unfair fight for Elsa. Great work.
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I hope every one is feeling better. I love the story. Elsa now has four girls to watch. Angela is at her best when she is watching out for other children. Samson is on his way. So is the crew that is going to kick some butt. They are better when protecting others too. It will be a unfair fight for Elsa. Great work.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
loved how you drew this mikey Soldiers look for wars not business opportunities with the devils tools they reap what they sew in pain and suffering love reading from you again excellent piece dear friend
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loved how you drew this mikey Soldiers look for wars not business opportunities with the devils tools they reap what they sew in pain and suffering love reading from you again excellent piece dear friend
Comment Written 20-Jul-2014
