If Green is Grass
a rhyming poem in 8/6/8/6147 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
I enjoyed the philosophical thought underlying the poem.I am not sure the waves have a common destiny with us .They seem rush back and forth like nobody's business.They are there from time immemorial.or perhaps they go up as vapour and are reborn as raindrops.I used to wonder who rejects whom, the shore spurns the waves or the waves, disgusted, rush back?This poem put me into a pensive mood and I am sure your next poem will make me smile again.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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I enjoyed the philosophical thought underlying the poem.I am not sure the waves have a common destiny with us .They seem rush back and forth like nobody's business.They are there from time immemorial.or perhaps they go up as vapour and are reborn as raindrops.I used to wonder who rejects whom, the shore spurns the waves or the waves, disgusted, rush back?This poem put me into a pensive mood and I am sure your next poem will make me smile again.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2014
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Sanku, I appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Brooke,
Pondering on the ultimate is always good grist for the poet's mill and you do it exceptionally well. There are stock answers to the questions raised in your poem advocated by various religions and philosophies. It is to your credit that you do not advance any of them but leave the question unanswered for the reader to answer much in the manner of haiku. As always your poet craft and art are excellent.
Preston
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Hi, Brooke,
Pondering on the ultimate is always good grist for the poet's mill and you do it exceptionally well. There are stock answers to the questions raised in your poem advocated by various religions and philosophies. It is to your credit that you do not advance any of them but leave the question unanswered for the reader to answer much in the manner of haiku. As always your poet craft and art are excellent.
Preston
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Preston, for your generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
Two well earned awards. The ponderings of a small boy are well written in this rather amusing poem.
"If waves are nomads with no home
I wonder what's the shore.
If shores are where waves disappear
I wonder what they're for. ..."
{articularly like this stanza - a well posed question. Pete
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Two well earned awards. The ponderings of a small boy are well written in this rather amusing poem.
"If waves are nomads with no home
I wonder what's the shore.
If shores are where waves disappear
I wonder what they're for. ..."
{articularly like this stanza - a well posed question. Pete
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Pete, for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
This is wonderful. At least when I'm so behind that everything is two cents I have the pleasure of some great poetry. This is so intriguing and fun. It does send the mind off in an unexpected way. Greatness. mikey
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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This is wonderful. At least when I'm so behind that everything is two cents I have the pleasure of some great poetry. This is so intriguing and fun. It does send the mind off in an unexpected way. Greatness. mikey
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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mikey, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tatarka2
I shouldn't be giving away another 6, I know - but I did think this was exquisite. I don't know if it's for a contest; if so, it should surely win. Such deep thoughts, so deceptively simply stated, in stanzas that sparkle. I have no critique, because I don't know how it could have been better.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I shouldn't be giving away another 6, I know - but I did think this was exquisite. I don't know if it's for a contest; if so, it should surely win. Such deep thoughts, so deceptively simply stated, in stanzas that sparkle. I have no critique, because I don't know how it could have been better.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend, for your encouraging and generous review for this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Ola Awakan
Nice one here. I am always a fan of nature related poems. Nature is perfectly structured by the creator. I like your presentation. Cool
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Nice one here. I am always a fan of nature related poems. Nature is perfectly structured by the creator. I like your presentation. Cool
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Ola, for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
Your work is enjoyable as always, and I think quite flawless. As I probably said before, I do not much care very much for poetry where you have to guess at some deep obscure hidden meaning that probably only the author really knows. Your works are individual and easily understood; I do not mind having to use my imagination in conjunction with yours. I think your writing is totally awesome.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Your work is enjoyable as always, and I think quite flawless. As I probably said before, I do not much care very much for poetry where you have to guess at some deep obscure hidden meaning that probably only the author really knows. Your works are individual and easily understood; I do not mind having to use my imagination in conjunction with yours. I think your writing is totally awesome.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, evilynne, for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from TOMORAL
This is delightful and makes the mind wonder right along with you. To look at the ocean is wonder itself. Thanks for sharing another fine piece of your wonderful poetry.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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This is delightful and makes the mind wonder right along with you. To look at the ocean is wonder itself. Thanks for sharing another fine piece of your wonderful poetry.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Tomoral, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gargantuan2
There is some wonder in all of us at each of the things mentioned in this poem. As children wondering about the colors and as adults in how nature perseveres. I like how you put them together.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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There is some wonder in all of us at each of the things mentioned in this poem. As children wondering about the colors and as adults in how nature perseveres. I like how you put them together.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Gargantuan, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Cragler
I like the questioning if at the start of each stanza in this piece it works very well. The images are perfect as is the rhyme and flow a great piece.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I like the questioning if at the start of each stanza in this piece it works very well. The images are perfect as is the rhyme and flow a great piece.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Craig, thank you so much :-) Brooke
