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Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Lonely dreams."Mostly romance.
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Comment from CYRANOGATOR
Very beautiful! Good strong subtle format. You painted your canvas with quicksilver and its thoughts were beautiful and simple. There will be a time like that in my future I know... Thanks for making one for me this evening! Good job!
Wally III
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Very beautiful! Good strong subtle format. You painted your canvas with quicksilver and its thoughts were beautiful and simple. There will be a time like that in my future I know... Thanks for making one for me this evening! Good job!
Wally III
Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from naji
o Imagination (Dreams)
o Reason
o Passion
o Bliss (Love, Agape)
o Divine Courage
o Divine Compassion
o Divine Knowledge (Gnosis)
In Neopagan philosophy, the seven veils of romantic love were as above.
It was accepted that as you become more experienced and broadened your knowledge, then off came another veil. The most famous biblical dancer Salome would dance for King Herod the Dance of the Seven Veils. What does this have to do with your poem.?
It is a very well written, beautiful poem. It demonstrates Imagination, reason, passion, and bliss.When you add Divine Courage,Divine Compassion and Divine Knowledge you will have written the complete Love Poem
naji
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o Imagination (Dreams)
o Reason
o Passion
o Bliss (Love, Agape)
o Divine Courage
o Divine Compassion
o Divine Knowledge (Gnosis)
In Neopagan philosophy, the seven veils of romantic love were as above.
It was accepted that as you become more experienced and broadened your knowledge, then off came another veil. The most famous biblical dancer Salome would dance for King Herod the Dance of the Seven Veils. What does this have to do with your poem.?
It is a very well written, beautiful poem. It demonstrates Imagination, reason, passion, and bliss.When you add Divine Courage,Divine Compassion and Divine Knowledge you will have written the complete Love Poem
naji
Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hi Miss Pili,
you have painted a wonderful work of art. The scope and depth of the poem warms the heart of the reader bringing them into a world of magic and wonder. Thanks for sharing... Buddy
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Hi Miss Pili,
you have painted a wonderful work of art. The scope and depth of the poem warms the heart of the reader bringing them into a world of magic and wonder. Thanks for sharing... Buddy
Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from Permelia
I have a fascination with sunsets, and often run out into the middle of the street to take a photo of the setting sun, so immediately, I loved your choice of a photo to go with your equally beautiful poem. I could picture you doign this"
At the beat
of my heart,
I dance
barefoot
over soft grass,
gentle breezes
caress my body- and wished I were with you!
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I have a fascination with sunsets, and often run out into the middle of the street to take a photo of the setting sun, so immediately, I loved your choice of a photo to go with your equally beautiful poem. I could picture you doign this"
At the beat
of my heart,
I dance
barefoot
over soft grass,
gentle breezes
caress my body- and wished I were with you!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from obrotund
A very beautiful poem. Full of soft welcoming imagery. I like the relationship you build between the emotions and the tranquil imagery. I also like the overall structure and visual 'look' of the piece. It also 'reads' well. There are no 'lurches' or harsh twists within the structure which would certainly be odd considering the theme of the piece. I really like the gentleness of the poem and how the way that it is written compliment each other. It is a 'seamless' piece of writing.
Suggestion - first five lines - make a 'stand alone' stanza
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A very beautiful poem. Full of soft welcoming imagery. I like the relationship you build between the emotions and the tranquil imagery. I also like the overall structure and visual 'look' of the piece. It also 'reads' well. There are no 'lurches' or harsh twists within the structure which would certainly be odd considering the theme of the piece. I really like the gentleness of the poem and how the way that it is written compliment each other. It is a 'seamless' piece of writing.
Suggestion - first five lines - make a 'stand alone' stanza
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
wow
i LOVED this one
especially the first stanza!
totally great imagery
could almost feel the grass
and breeze
"At the beat
of my heart,
I dance
barefoot
over soft grass,
gentle breezes
caress my body,
whispers of nature
creates
magical music,
love song
flows over
lonely dreams."
thanx for sharing :-)
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wow
i LOVED this one
especially the first stanza!
totally great imagery
could almost feel the grass
and breeze
"At the beat
of my heart,
I dance
barefoot
over soft grass,
gentle breezes
caress my body,
whispers of nature
creates
magical music,
love song
flows over
lonely dreams."
thanx for sharing :-)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from Soup Sup
Again, another well-written piece. I love the shape of the poem, the sound, the flow. It's a very soothing poem. It takes you away from reality by describing the natural, simple beauties of reality.
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Again, another well-written piece. I love the shape of the poem, the sound, the flow. It's a very soothing poem. It takes you away from reality by describing the natural, simple beauties of reality.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
Comment from Sandisan
That is a really beautiful poem. It soothes your soul as you read it. The rythm and flow is terrific. I love all the lines, it reflects the beauty of nature so well...I would change nothing.
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That is a really beautiful poem. It soothes your soul as you read it. The rythm and flow is terrific. I love all the lines, it reflects the beauty of nature so well...I would change nothing.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2005
