life
what is life to you?2 total reviews
Comment from DionysusDeVille
Trying to figure out life is like an infinite puzzle and this poem expresses that very well. No one ever has all of the answers but we live life searching for them
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Trying to figure out life is like an infinite puzzle and this poem expresses that very well. No one ever has all of the answers but we live life searching for them
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, Miranda - welcome to FanStory and congratulations on leaping in with your first post.
Unfortunately, you haven't grasped that the 5-7-5 refers to syllables, not words. Your first line is OK because you use only one-syllable words, but line 2 has 11 syllables.... line 3 is wrong too.
Did you mean 'maintain' or is that a typo for mountain?
Steve
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Hi, Miranda - welcome to FanStory and congratulations on leaping in with your first post.
Unfortunately, you haven't grasped that the 5-7-5 refers to syllables, not words. Your first line is OK because you use only one-syllable words, but line 2 has 11 syllables.... line 3 is wrong too.
Did you mean 'maintain' or is that a typo for mountain?
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
