No Elephants Live in Encino
a bit of poetic whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from hifein
i guess he would notice if there were indeed elephants in encino. just saw a pbs special about orphaned wild animals and isha the baby elephant in particular in nairobi. boy would sawyer have a time there -- he wouldn't have to look for ants. fun poem. best hi
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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i guess he would notice if there were indeed elephants in encino. just saw a pbs special about orphaned wild animals and isha the baby elephant in particular in nairobi. boy would sawyer have a time there -- he wouldn't have to look for ants. fun poem. best hi
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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hifein, thank you so much :-) isha the orphan elephant, that sounds like quite a story. Brooke :-)
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it was -- i saw it late last night and was very moved. see it if you can. :-) hi
Comment from DR DIP
WT? lol
you've gone all quirky on us.
Just hope Sawyer doesn't grow up with a Grandma Insanity Complex. (sic) haha
average proximate rhyming with 'Encino' and 'where we go' haha
No elephants live in Encino --
there's none in my neighbourhood --
I don't see them living where we go,
and really don't know if they should.
consider :
No elephants live in Encino --
There's none in my neighbourhood --
Maybe a sheep or merino,
But that wouldn't be quite as good
just as quirky but more perfect rhyming
don't you think? lol
Start branching out a bit with your subject matter. you are such a beautiful rhymer I want to see other topics because when you do them they are really good..give little Sawyer a break ok haha
xxxdip
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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WT? lol
you've gone all quirky on us.
Just hope Sawyer doesn't grow up with a Grandma Insanity Complex. (sic) haha
average proximate rhyming with 'Encino' and 'where we go' haha
No elephants live in Encino --
there's none in my neighbourhood --
I don't see them living where we go,
and really don't know if they should.
consider :
No elephants live in Encino --
There's none in my neighbourhood --
Maybe a sheep or merino,
But that wouldn't be quite as good
just as quirky but more perfect rhyming
don't you think? lol
Start branching out a bit with your subject matter. you are such a beautiful rhymer I want to see other topics because when you do them they are really good..give little Sawyer a break ok haha
xxxdip
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Dip - yep, merino rhymes more perfectly, but I have no desire to bring sheep into the poem or into Encino LOL
You'll have to talk to my muse about your final comment :-) Brooke
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you are such a stubborn woman haha
just for once agree and have no explanation or reason ok haha
xxdip
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You want me to agree to sheep in Encino??? LOL
At least give me something better to agree with ;-)
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is Encino a place? the whole poems a bit quirky who gives a shit whether there's no sheep in Encino just tdo as your bloody told and change the bloody thing ok sheesh hahaha
Christ your a stubborn, anal woman lol
xxdip
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Of course Encino is a place! It's where my daughter and grandson live :-) It's also where Pat Sajak lives, but as far as I know, no sheep! If you don't know Pat Sajak, try Google LOL
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well I haven't heard of it have I!! I'm from the backwoods of Australia remember where men are men and sheep are nervous!! lol!!
like do you know Wagga Wagga or Dubbo towns in Australia? no? well why not!..same same just remember we are all not stubborn yanks ok haha
If ya don't know these towns try google ok? lol
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I bet the list of towns I don't know is pages and pages long :-) But have you never seen that classic movie, Encino Man?? Surely that makes it more globally famous than Wagga Wagga LOL
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I never knew Encino was a place more an adjective describing the man lol
dip
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:-)
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I just wrote a poem that gives Sawyer a break - consider it my gift to you :-)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
He really is fascinated by ants, isn't he? Even your whimsical poems are a pleasure to read Brooke and at this point in my morning I would say a breath of fresh air! Giddy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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He really is fascinated by ants, isn't he? Even your whimsical poems are a pleasure to read Brooke and at this point in my morning I would say a breath of fresh air! Giddy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Giddy, for your thoughtful review. Yep, he and the ants in Encino are on a first name basis :-) Brooke
Comment from MM lives on :)
Brooke you always have a fun and creative
Way with your words and of course the beautiful
Picture of your grand baby makes it all the better
Thanks for sharing always a plesure to read amd reviee
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Brooke you always have a fun and creative
Way with your words and of course the beautiful
Picture of your grand baby makes it all the better
Thanks for sharing always a plesure to read amd reviee
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Christopher, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Nicely formed poem...Very good form and very good content. Reads great. Very good rhyme! This is what poetry is all about! Great job!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Nicely formed poem...Very good form and very good content. Reads great. Very good rhyme! This is what poetry is all about! Great job!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Raphael, I appreciate your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from lappmellott
As usual, it's a great poem, as are the many wonderful photographs of Sawyer. What a cutie he is. His parents must be so proud of him. I think your poems for children would make a wonderful children's book.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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As usual, it's a great poem, as are the many wonderful photographs of Sawyer. What a cutie he is. His parents must be so proud of him. I think your poems for children would make a wonderful children's book.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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lappmellott, thank you so very much :-) His doting parents fairly beam at the mere mention of his name! :-) Brooke
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You're welcome and I'm sure they are so proud of him.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with a good picture of the grandson. Good word flow and rhyming as he tells about no elephants in his neighborhood. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Good poem with a good picture of the grandson. Good word flow and rhyming as he tells about no elephants in his neighborhood. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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GWinterwin, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Lovely childrens poem Brooke. So easy
to read and understand, which is always
a help for me! It is so nice to read
a softer work. There are so many serious
works to be had on our site. And a bit
of whimsey it surely is. eric
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Lovely childrens poem Brooke. So easy
to read and understand, which is always
a help for me! It is so nice to read
a softer work. There are so many serious
works to be had on our site. And a bit
of whimsey it surely is. eric
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Eric, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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my pleasure
Comment from amada
Sawyer has a very "inspective" mind. Great for a child to wander about little ants and nature things. Great play of words with elephants and ants.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Sawyer has a very "inspective" mind. Great for a child to wander about little ants and nature things. Great play of words with elephants and ants.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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amada, thank you so very much :-) He definitely is a curious explorer :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
I don't know how I missed this one, Brooke! I love these thoughts coming from Sawyer. Very insightful. Nice use of alliteration in elephants/Encino; none/neighborhood, and nice perfect and proximate rhyming. Of course, as always, the poem has great rhythm and flow. Thanks, Brooke! Alana
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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I don't know how I missed this one, Brooke! I love these thoughts coming from Sawyer. Very insightful. Nice use of alliteration in elephants/Encino; none/neighborhood, and nice perfect and proximate rhyming. Of course, as always, the poem has great rhythm and flow. Thanks, Brooke! Alana
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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Alana, thank you so much - I'm so pleased you enjoyed this :-) Brooke
