No Elephants Live in Encino
a bit of poetic whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from vfbryant
Oh, my gosh...no matter what mood I'm in, your poems always move me into a delightful space somewhere between my own childhood and the experience of sharing my grandson's. What a wonderful place to spend a few moments! Thank you.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Oh, my gosh...no matter what mood I'm in, your poems always move me into a delightful space somewhere between my own childhood and the experience of sharing my grandson's. What a wonderful place to spend a few moments! Thank you.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, vfbryant, for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Selina Stambi
chance/ants does not rhyme with a British, Australian accent ... expect a nitpick or two (or three)! Make a wee note in author notes, perhaps ...?
The delightful title draws one in - and, as always, your reader is not disappointed!
Have a great weekend, Brooke.
Sonali
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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chance/ants does not rhyme with a British, Australian accent ... expect a nitpick or two (or three)! Make a wee note in author notes, perhaps ...?
The delightful title draws one in - and, as always, your reader is not disappointed!
Have a great weekend, Brooke.
Sonali
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Sonali :-) It is going to take me forever to figure out how people in other parts of the globe pronounce certain words. You're the first person to mention this pairing :-) Brooke
Comment from JudyS
Very cute poem. I think kids are probably just as happy with ants are they would be with elephants. :) Great writing on this. I enjoyed the read. Judy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Very cute poem. I think kids are probably just as happy with ants are they would be with elephants. :) Great writing on this. I enjoyed the read. Judy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Judy, I am sure you are right. He has no idea that some creatures
are more sought after than others - in his yard he loves the squirrels, in his house he loves the cats, at the pet store he loves the iguanas, at the zoo he loves the giraffes, at the petting zoo he loves the goats... LOL Thanks so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
Love the theme of the little boy looking for elephants. Love the line, straight into an elephant's kness,a priceless line that adds to the whimsy of the poem. Your words take the reaer into the mind and world of a child.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Love the theme of the little boy looking for elephants. Love the line, straight into an elephant's kness,a priceless line that adds to the whimsy of the poem. Your words take the reaer into the mind and world of a child.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Elaine :-) Brooke
Comment from Irish Rain
Yes...ants would be more my style, although I'm sure a little boy will still keep his eye out for those elephants! Wonderful, as usual, Blessings to you tonight...Judy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Yes...ants would be more my style, although I'm sure a little boy will still keep his eye out for those elephants! Wonderful, as usual, Blessings to you tonight...Judy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Judy, thank you so very much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello, Brooke
Well, at least you don't have to watch where you step! Lol. Loved your concept, of the mind of a child in wonder. I appreciated the astute observation in the last couplet of the second verse, "You'll never see elephants going, where there is no elephant treat." Sweet!
Sawyer looks like he's having a great time with the ants. Best wishes, Bill
BTW, are you having summer out your way, yet? Every time I see a weather map, it appears your in the thick things. B
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Hello, Brooke
Well, at least you don't have to watch where you step! Lol. Loved your concept, of the mind of a child in wonder. I appreciated the astute observation in the last couplet of the second verse, "You'll never see elephants going, where there is no elephant treat." Sweet!
Sawyer looks like he's having a great time with the ants. Best wishes, Bill
BTW, are you having summer out your way, yet? Every time I see a weather map, it appears your in the thick things. B
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Bill, thank you :-) We've had some heat waves and then lots of storms and now a few days of cooler weather but the heat is due to come back again next week. The thunder storms have been really bad - so far I'm not one of the people who lost electricity for a while, but I always worry. I appreciate your caring :-) Brooke
Comment from The Death
Hi, Brooke.
Very playful and cute poem! Nicely voiced. I like the theme of elephants, and yes--they won't be seen where there's no treat. LOL!
We have no banana trees growing --
they wouldn't have breakfast to eat --
You'll never see elephants going
where there is no elephant treat.
It sounds innocent and funny as well. Nice use of N consonance here.
The ending is more entertaining:
No elephants live in Encino --
there isn't the slightest chance --
so next time my mom takes me walking,
I guess I'll be looking for ants.
I think ants will be better to look at, and safer too. :)
It has good beats and flows nicely.
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
Very playful and cute poem! Nicely voiced. I like the theme of elephants, and yes--they won't be seen where there's no treat. LOL!
We have no banana trees growing --
they wouldn't have breakfast to eat --
You'll never see elephants going
where there is no elephant treat.
It sounds innocent and funny as well. Nice use of N consonance here.
The ending is more entertaining:
No elephants live in Encino --
there isn't the slightest chance --
so next time my mom takes me walking,
I guess I'll be looking for ants.
I think ants will be better to look at, and safer too. :)
It has good beats and flows nicely.
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Aumpam, thank you so much :-) Yep, ants are certainly the tamer alternative LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Heidixoxo
Hello friend,.
This is such a wonderfully written piece of poetry. I thought it was such a cute way to talk about elephants and just all the way around a GREAT write!! My favorite part was the final sentence on looking for ants....I have always enjoyed reading your work and although this sure deserves the full six stars, I have no more to give. I apologize for that. Thank you for sharing with us all and as always, best of luck to you!! xoxo
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Hello friend,.
This is such a wonderfully written piece of poetry. I thought it was such a cute way to talk about elephants and just all the way around a GREAT write!! My favorite part was the final sentence on looking for ants....I have always enjoyed reading your work and although this sure deserves the full six stars, I have no more to give. I apologize for that. Thank you for sharing with us all and as always, best of luck to you!! xoxo
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Heidi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from skye
What a whimsical and fun poem. Who thinks of elephants on a walk in the city.... except creative poets and children. This is well written, drawing upon the things we know, the bananas, the size, and the impossiblity of seeing one on a walk.
Excellent, and such fun to read.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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What a whimsical and fun poem. Who thinks of elephants on a walk in the city.... except creative poets and children. This is well written, drawing upon the things we know, the bananas, the size, and the impossiblity of seeing one on a walk.
Excellent, and such fun to read.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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skye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from S.Yocom
This is very sweet, Brooke. (Sawyer has inspired enough poetry to fill a good sized book.) I like the repeated opening line. This poem is cute and clever.
Sally
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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This is very sweet, Brooke. (Sawyer has inspired enough poetry to fill a good sized book.) I like the repeated opening line. This poem is cute and clever.
Sally
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Sally, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
