No Elephants Live in Encino
a bit of poetic whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from James Dooney
Heheh yeh yeh good points huh ! I am sure Encino would look a little odd if it had elephants roaming down it ! Love your work once again here brooke !
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Heheh yeh yeh good points huh ! I am sure Encino would look a little odd if it had elephants roaming down it ! Love your work once again here brooke !
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, James :-) Brooke
Comment from sswartz
I love this! Very entertaining. It relates to reality as such thoughts are often expressed by our young children and that, in itself, adds to the enjoyment of the read. The carefree wonderment never ceases to put a smile on our faces. You did a remarkable job with this. It flows well and is free of errors.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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I love this! Very entertaining. It relates to reality as such thoughts are often expressed by our young children and that, in itself, adds to the enjoyment of the read. The carefree wonderment never ceases to put a smile on our faces. You did a remarkable job with this. It flows well and is free of errors.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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sswartz, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
Oh, boy. Easy pickings. It's gonna rhyme, it's gonna be spag free, it's gonna be whimsical and for the youthful,
and it'll be easy to read. And it was.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Oh, boy. Easy pickings. It's gonna rhyme, it's gonna be spag free, it's gonna be whimsical and for the youthful,
and it'll be easy to read. And it was.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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LIJ, you have left me sitting here with a huge smile on my face - thank you so very very much :-) Brooke
Comment from DionysusDeVille
He'll just have to wait until he goes to the zoo to see those elephants. But at least ants are always in a huge abundance. Great picture by the way
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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He'll just have to wait until he goes to the zoo to see those elephants. But at least ants are always in a huge abundance. Great picture by the way
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Dionysus, thank you so much - yep, he does love his trips to the zoo :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Reminds me a bit of Dr. Seuss. Fun, and a bit of nonsensical images. Your rhymes are terrific, as always and the rhythm is dead on. Always fun to read you, Brooke.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Reminds me a bit of Dr. Seuss. Fun, and a bit of nonsensical images. Your rhymes are terrific, as always and the rhythm is dead on. Always fun to read you, Brooke.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Adrienne, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from McMurry903
This is such a lovely childrens poem, Brooke. While we all know you can write masterfully in any form on any subject matter I really look forward to the childeren pieces. Children can take so much from poetry and it can truly help them express their own creativity.
I liked the questioning tone and creativity here. Excellent work!
Brian
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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This is such a lovely childrens poem, Brooke. While we all know you can write masterfully in any form on any subject matter I really look forward to the childeren pieces. Children can take so much from poetry and it can truly help them express their own creativity.
I liked the questioning tone and creativity here. Excellent work!
Brian
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Brian - I love poetry and children - so it all works out LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent
I like the way your poems and stories flow, not unnecessary stops to look up words that block meaning, just the unfolding of information that is fun to read.
The story seems to be for children, yet it gives any thinking adult the understanding that reality is a major factor in life, although many still live in fantasy as they move through life.
Some poems have rhymes to make the poem but miss the point; you have me looking for ants.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Excellent
I like the way your poems and stories flow, not unnecessary stops to look up words that block meaning, just the unfolding of information that is fun to read.
The story seems to be for children, yet it gives any thinking adult the understanding that reality is a major factor in life, although many still live in fantasy as they move through life.
Some poems have rhymes to make the poem but miss the point; you have me looking for ants.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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ELPoetry, thank you so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - Always nice to read your poetic 'whimsy' and this is no exception. Nice story that always matches the picture of Sawyer - good abab rhyme, last stanza waivers a bit but does not spoil the rhythm or content of the poem. I assume Encino is where Sawyer lives. Encino/so, a good match? - just a thought. Enjoyable read. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke - Always nice to read your poetic 'whimsy' and this is no exception. Nice story that always matches the picture of Sawyer - good abab rhyme, last stanza waivers a bit but does not spoil the rhythm or content of the poem. I assume Encino is where Sawyer lives. Encino/so, a good match? - just a thought. Enjoyable read. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so very much :-) Yes, Encino is their hometown :-) Brooke
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: oh, such a sweet morning starter (before I had my coffee). . .a delightful (I know I use that word a lot but most of your poems ARE delightful, fill me with fun and happiness)look again into the life of this inquisitive, active boy learning about his world. Linda
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Brooke: oh, such a sweet morning starter (before I had my coffee). . .a delightful (I know I use that word a lot but most of your poems ARE delightful, fill me with fun and happiness)look again into the life of this inquisitive, active boy learning about his world. Linda
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Delightful is fine with me, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Capricorn30
When one can't occupy their time with elephants, we must make do with other creatures;
"No elephants live in Encino";
"I think I will look for some ants"--animals from great to small incorporated into a well-crafted poem expressed from a child's perspective;
Pleasurable to read as we watch children explore.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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When one can't occupy their time with elephants, we must make do with other creatures;
"No elephants live in Encino";
"I think I will look for some ants"--animals from great to small incorporated into a well-crafted poem expressed from a child's perspective;
Pleasurable to read as we watch children explore.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Capricorn :-) Brooke
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Sure,
you're welcome:)
