No Elephants Live in Encino
a bit of poetic whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from perpetualwallflower
This is so cute! It brings me back to my childhood. I love how whimsical and fun this poem is. This makes me happy and it is rare that a poem makes me happy. Wonderful job my friend.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
This is so cute! It brings me back to my childhood. I love how whimsical and fun this poem is. This makes me happy and it is rare that a poem makes me happy. Wonderful job my friend.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, perpetualwallflower, for your generous response to this poem and for your thoughtfully encouraging comments :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
I've always admired your child's voice in you poems. You do them so well. This one really captures the adventure in the mind of a little boy. Has Sawyer started that little boy thing of collecting frogs or bugs and bringing them in the house?
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
I've always admired your child's voice in you poems. You do them so well. This one really captures the adventure in the mind of a little boy. Has Sawyer started that little boy thing of collecting frogs or bugs and bringing them in the house?
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Since he is only 26 months old, he is always with his mom when he is outdoors, so I think she has told him the bugs live outside and need to stay there. LOL He'll soon enough reach the age when he can sneak things in :-) Thanks so much, amahra :-) Brooke
Comment from granny goes viral
There you go, yet again. Causing giggles to erupt, tickling my funny bone, making me cross my legs (before running to the loo). Ah it is such a good day when your muse strikes.
Thank you my dear.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
There you go, yet again. Causing giggles to erupt, tickling my funny bone, making me cross my legs (before running to the loo). Ah it is such a good day when your muse strikes.
Thank you my dear.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Granny, I'm so happy my poem had such an effect on you :-) Thank you for sharing that with me :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
i really like the line "No elephants live in Encino" as it not only sets the poem, but provides the music that's pervasive in the poem.
You capture the child-like wonder of the Speaker as he explores his neighborhood. A fun read as always, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
i really like the line "No elephants live in Encino" as it not only sets the poem, but provides the music that's pervasive in the poem.
You capture the child-like wonder of the Speaker as he explores his neighborhood. A fun read as always, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Rod, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from ILovePoetry!
This is a sweet little poem! Very original, written well. I really like how you portrayed the lack of things for elephants in the neighborhood which would make it difficult for elephants to live there. It was done in a very cute way! Good Job!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
This is a sweet little poem! Very original, written well. I really like how you portrayed the lack of things for elephants in the neighborhood which would make it difficult for elephants to live there. It was done in a very cute way! Good Job!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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ILovePoetry, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Whenever my mom takes me walking,
no elephants nibble our trees,
and nobody wants to be gawking
straight into an elephant's knees.
Well written and thought out. You sure have a darling little grandson! How fun! Time for the little girl stories~ :)One day? Much joy you bring through your poetic verse!
Jewell
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
Whenever my mom takes me walking,
no elephants nibble our trees,
and nobody wants to be gawking
straight into an elephant's knees.
Well written and thought out. You sure have a darling little grandson! How fun! Time for the little girl stories~ :)One day? Much joy you bring through your poetic verse!
Jewell
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Jewell, thanks so much. I will send you a PM. :-) Brooke
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ok! Look forward to it.
Comment from Nosha17
The curiosity of a child is a wonderful thing, whether it be for majestic elephants or those creepy ants! Light-hearted view of the world through the eyes and mind of a child. Well chosen rhymes and words to create your lovely verse. Most enjoyable and super pic. Faye
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
The curiosity of a child is a wonderful thing, whether it be for majestic elephants or those creepy ants! Light-hearted view of the world through the eyes and mind of a child. Well chosen rhymes and words to create your lovely verse. Most enjoyable and super pic. Faye
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Faye - the kid sees ants and he's in seventh heaven. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from donnadiann
Nice solution line--to just settle for ants. Adorable photo to complete this poem. Good flow in rhyming. I think I'm starting to see enjambment in the lines now (thanks mostly to your help:) I believe it is most of the lines of your poem, or all; (dashes throw me off a little, but seems the thought is still going even in these lines). Hugs:)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
Nice solution line--to just settle for ants. Adorable photo to complete this poem. Good flow in rhyming. I think I'm starting to see enjambment in the lines now (thanks mostly to your help:) I believe it is most of the lines of your poem, or all; (dashes throw me off a little, but seems the thought is still going even in these lines). Hugs:)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, donnadiann :-) Sawyer isn't settling. He adores bugs. LOL :-) Brooke
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Oh, I know, not that inquisitive child. Just in this poem (ants):):)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
From elephants to ants, what a difference! LOL, but I think comparing them, the ant is probably the stronger of the two. I like this one, it is just what children do and would think. Has Sawyer taken any of his 'animal' friends home for mum to see yet... a worm or something? I had that from both my boys. Not nice! Lovely poem again, Brooke. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
From elephants to ants, what a difference! LOL, but I think comparing them, the ant is probably the stronger of the two. I like this one, it is just what children do and would think. Has Sawyer taken any of his 'animal' friends home for mum to see yet... a worm or something? I had that from both my boys. Not nice! Lovely poem again, Brooke. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Sandra. Since Sawyer is only 26 months old, Mom is always with him. I don't think he has had a worm in his hands yet, but he has picked up a roly poly bug, with her there. LOL Brooke :-)
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Oh, how lovely, just think of all the things Mom has to look forward to! LOL. :)xx
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I bet Mom is thinking just that too - but hey, it's too late to give him back. LOL :-)
Comment from boxergirl
Your poetic whimsy always brings us a smile, Brooke. Strong ABAB rhyme scheme and alliteration of elephant and Encino.
"Nobody wants to gawking straight into an elephant's knees" is one of those lines that makes us smile. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
Your poetic whimsy always brings us a smile, Brooke. Strong ABAB rhyme scheme and alliteration of elephant and Encino.
"Nobody wants to gawking straight into an elephant's knees" is one of those lines that makes us smile. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke