No Elephants Live in Encino
a bit of poetic whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from scd41
Writing poetry for children is not a cakewalk and you have shown your talents in writing such a well rhymed poem. How a child's wandering and curious mind works has been captured nicely by you swinging between the giant elephant and the tiny ants. Perhaps, all our minds had similar swings in our childhood. You have surely done yourself justice.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Writing poetry for children is not a cakewalk and you have shown your talents in writing such a well rhymed poem. How a child's wandering and curious mind works has been captured nicely by you swinging between the giant elephant and the tiny ants. Perhaps, all our minds had similar swings in our childhood. You have surely done yourself justice.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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scd41, thank you so much for your encouraging response to my children's poem :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Brooke, this is just too cute. I love the fun and playfulness of these quatrains. A great children's poem, but quite entertaining for us big kids too. Have a good day, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Brooke, this is just too cute. I love the fun and playfulness of these quatrains. A great children's poem, but quite entertaining for us big kids too. Have a good day, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Debbie, so glad you enjoyed this, my friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from Gargantuan2
Very funny ending, and very fitting for the picture used. I can remember going to a zoo to see real animals for the first time... never did see them in town either.
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Very funny ending, and very fitting for the picture used. I can remember going to a zoo to see real animals for the first time... never did see them in town either.
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Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Gargantuan :-) I remember when my sister and I took my toddler son to the zoo for the first time - the Philadelphia Zoo, filled with huge and exotic animals, and he spent the whole morning pointing at squirrels LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Great to see Sawyer so interested in nature, Brooke.
Maybe 'why' instead of 'as' in 4th line (it also alliterates with 'where' in 3rd line), but maybe that's the way you Yanks say it. :-)
3rd last line seems lacking a syllable to maintain anapaestic meter, so maybe, 'there isn't a heck of a chance'.
Lovely read as usual, Brooke.
Cheers, Ray.
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Great to see Sawyer so interested in nature, Brooke.
Maybe 'why' instead of 'as' in 4th line (it also alliterates with 'where' in 3rd line), but maybe that's the way you Yanks say it. :-)
3rd last line seems lacking a syllable to maintain anapaestic meter, so maybe, 'there isn't a heck of a chance'.
Lovely read as usual, Brooke.
Cheers, Ray.
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Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Good morning, Ray - or afternoon there since you Brits have your times all wrong ;-) I'll take a look at those lines. Thanks for your feedback :-) Brooke
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No probs, Brooke. It's still only 11am here, so you Yanks haven't got that much time to CATCH UP. LOL. xx
