No Elephants Live in Encino
a bit of poetic whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Sawyer learns a valuable lesson- sometimes you have to set your sites ...smaller. if imagination does not deliver elephants, look to the ants (no less fascinating) and imagine them elephants.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Sawyer learns a valuable lesson- sometimes you have to set your sites ...smaller. if imagination does not deliver elephants, look to the ants (no less fascinating) and imagine them elephants.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, ravenblack, for your insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
And what would dear Sawyer do if he actually saw an elephant??? Now that would be something to write about. I love your 'bit of poetic whimsy' poems, they always promise to make me smile as well as giggle. Excellent rhyme,fun subject. and smooth flow as I read it out loud. Very nice work with this one.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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And what would dear Sawyer do if he actually saw an elephant??? Now that would be something to write about. I love your 'bit of poetic whimsy' poems, they always promise to make me smile as well as giggle. Excellent rhyme,fun subject. and smooth flow as I read it out loud. Very nice work with this one.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Valerie, thank you so much - he's fond of the elephants at the zoo and in his books, but yeah, he might do a double take if he saw one on Martha Street. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
What a delight to read, thank you for sharing. Such an interesting poem! Sawyer's thinking shines through in your fine poem.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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What a delight to read, thank you for sharing. Such an interesting poem! Sawyer's thinking shines through in your fine poem.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Bina, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
Yes, think Sawyer might be hoping, though ants, at his age can be a wonder, too...Clever, over the top read, as usual, & enjoyed your poem, even though I'm 63..Far, from being a child.. Know that you are really cherishing all those pics of Sawyer & just being the toddler, he is, helping you to create a new poem, as this one, for his mom or dad to read to him, & think, like this one, will surely bring a smile to his face..
Caressa
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Yes, think Sawyer might be hoping, though ants, at his age can be a wonder, too...Clever, over the top read, as usual, & enjoyed your poem, even though I'm 63..Far, from being a child.. Know that you are really cherishing all those pics of Sawyer & just being the toddler, he is, helping you to create a new poem, as this one, for his mom or dad to read to him, & think, like this one, will surely bring a smile to his face..
Caressa
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Caressa, thank you so very much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) I'm 63 too. Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! This is sooo precious! No elephants... what a bummer. But, hey, you take what you can get. Ants? No chance of bumping into their knees at least. :)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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LOL! This is sooo precious! No elephants... what a bummer. But, hey, you take what you can get. Ants? No chance of bumping into their knees at least. :)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Phyllis - I'm so pleased you got a laugh out of this :-) brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
'Why the big scarecrow on your garage roof?,' the man asked his suburban neighbor. 'To keep the elephants away,' replied the neighbor. 'I don't see any elephants,' said the man. 'See, it works,' replied the neighbor. Ants still fascinate me. Nice comfortable write with an easy meter, and good rhymes. Kenny
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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'Why the big scarecrow on your garage roof?,' the man asked his suburban neighbor. 'To keep the elephants away,' replied the neighbor. 'I don't see any elephants,' said the man. 'See, it works,' replied the neighbor. Ants still fascinate me. Nice comfortable write with an easy meter, and good rhymes. Kenny
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2014
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I love that old chestnut and its many variants :-) Thanks so much, Kenny. Brooke
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You heard it before, but you gave me a new one. Thanks Brooke. Kenny
Comment from Jackarrie
A whimsical poem indeed. a very enjoyable one to read. No elephants in Encino, so ants will have to. I could help out with the ants as they are now in my home Yuk, a nightmare.
Well written
Mary
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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A whimsical poem indeed. a very enjoyable one to read. No elephants in Encino, so ants will have to. I could help out with the ants as they are now in my home Yuk, a nightmare.
Well written
Mary
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Mary, thanks so much. Ants do lose their charm once they decide to come inside to live. :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
A fun kids' poem with a fairly nonsensical proposition and strong rhythm and rhyme.
I liked the feminine rhymes in many of the lines.
Something was bothering me about the last stanza - you missed the rhyme in 1 and 3....
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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A fun kids' poem with a fairly nonsensical proposition and strong rhythm and rhyme.
I liked the feminine rhymes in many of the lines.
Something was bothering me about the last stanza - you missed the rhyme in 1 and 3....
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Steve - I hadn't even noticed that, but having looked it over, I'm not going to fret over it :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
Your usual nice poem Brooke, you are gifted enough to churn them out as often as you want, I reckon you could write a weather report and you'd get 100 reviews, except you wouldn't, you've given me the same response to questions I've posed! Generic response, although it's difficult when you get a load of them! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Your usual nice poem Brooke, you are gifted enough to churn them out as often as you want, I reckon you could write a weather report and you'd get 100 reviews, except you wouldn't, you've given me the same response to questions I've posed! Generic response, although it's difficult when you get a load of them! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Roy - I put my effort into my poems and into giving readers the courtesy of a reciprocated review. I always figured that my thank yous for reviews were accepted in the polite spirit I offer them and not scrutinized for originality. Brooke
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I was just testing actually, Brooke, I asked you a question in the last review, you did not answer, and because your response was always the same, I did it for reaction! I thought it out of character, my apologies! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from Cin
Aahh - you have to love the imagination and curiosity go children when the go exploring or on a walk. Once again, with humour, your poem has captured the delights of childhood :-)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Aahh - you have to love the imagination and curiosity go children when the go exploring or on a walk. Once again, with humour, your poem has captured the delights of childhood :-)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Cin :-) Brooke
