Comment from rod007

Excellent

Perfect rhyming, and you've captured the child's imagination well. The last line was very effective in forcing us to look at the stark difference between the huge elephant and the tiny ant. Brilliant! Well done, Brooke.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Rod, thanks so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Obviously, you have a large mouse population that keeps the elephants out. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

thanks so much for the laugh and the review, Charlie :-) Brooke

reply by c_lucas on 16-Jul-2014

You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie

Comment from Bryan G

Excellent

Necessity is the mother of invention. Sawyer has a inventor's mind that thinks outside of the box. Once again you have taken the simple things of life and taught us a powerful message. Thank you for your encouraging words.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Bryan, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

I was so glad to see you had posted so early today. I usually end my busy day with one of your posts, but today I get to start it with one. Yippee!! Great rhythm and very fun to read. You have sucha gift of taking the little things and turning them into events. Not everyone has this capability. Great job as usual.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Gretchen, thank you so much :-) I posted so early because I only got the poem half finished last night and then stewed on it in my sleep. LOL I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Excellent. This is so smooth. You have such talent with the meter and rhythm of all your poems.They all just roll off the tongue, It is a pleasure to keep up with Sawyer's antics, Great job!

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

RYME4U, thank you so much :-) I'm so glad you're enjoying Sawyer's journey through Encino and life :-) Brooke

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

lol are you sure elephants are very good at hiding and are they eliph-ants lol great write gave me a big smile xxxgazzagodbodxxx

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

gazza, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

So so cute, your rhyming is always so natural and easy to read, and your wording is so consistent that each line builds the story up to the final punch line, and it was incredibly cute to top it off,
Well done,
Andrew

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Andrew, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from Deniz22

Excellent

Dear Brooke, a great poem as always with the wonderful picture of Sawyer, the ant observer. However, my main message to you is that I have been highly honored here on FS! I entered a "blind" prompt contest and someone mistook me for you! I'm saving that reply! :) Dennis

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Dennis, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

The Cute Little One knows he can get much closer to the ants while on his tummy :) He definitely won't find elephants there :) This is another superb poem.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

16 July 2014
Adewpearl: I like the poem about the elephants and ants! What a different environment for the elephant compared to city life. We need to be more child like and study small things like the busy ant. I like your rhyming. Good thing you don't have to clean up the elephant presents with a plastic bag!
flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

flylikeaneagle, thanks so much - yeah, an elephant pooper scooper would have to be gigantic LOL :-) Brooke