Comment from perpetualwallflower

Exceptional

This is so cute! It brings me back to my childhood. I love how whimsical and fun this poem is. This makes me happy and it is rare that a poem makes me happy. Wonderful job my friend.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Thank you so much, perpetualwallflower, for your generous response to this poem and for your thoughtfully encouraging comments :-) Brooke

Comment from amahra

Excellent

I've always admired your child's voice in you poems. You do them so well. This one really captures the adventure in the mind of a little boy. Has Sawyer started that little boy thing of collecting frogs or bugs and bringing them in the house?

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Since he is only 26 months old, he is always with his mom when he is outdoors, so I think she has told him the bugs live outside and need to stay there. LOL He'll soon enough reach the age when he can sneak things in :-) Thanks so much, amahra :-) Brooke

Comment from granny goes viral

Excellent

There you go, yet again. Causing giggles to erupt, tickling my funny bone, making me cross my legs (before running to the loo). Ah it is such a good day when your muse strikes.
Thank you my dear.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Granny, I'm so happy my poem had such an effect on you :-) Thank you for sharing that with me :-) Brooke

Comment from RodG

Excellent

i really like the line "No elephants live in Encino" as it not only sets the poem, but provides the music that's pervasive in the poem.
You capture the child-like wonder of the Speaker as he explores his neighborhood. A fun read as always, Brooke.
Rod

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Rod, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from ILovePoetry!

Excellent

This is a sweet little poem! Very original, written well. I really like how you portrayed the lack of things for elephants in the neighborhood which would make it difficult for elephants to live there. It was done in a very cute way! Good Job!

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

ILovePoetry, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Jewell McChesney

Excellent

Whenever my mom takes me walking,
no elephants nibble our trees,
and nobody wants to be gawking
straight into an elephant's knees.

Well written and thought out. You sure have a darling little grandson! How fun! Time for the little girl stories~ :)One day? Much joy you bring through your poetic verse!
Jewell

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Jewell, thanks so much. I will send you a PM. :-) Brooke

reply by Jewell McChesney on 17-Jul-2014

ok! Look forward to it.

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

The curiosity of a child is a wonderful thing, whether it be for majestic elephants or those creepy ants! Light-hearted view of the world through the eyes and mind of a child. Well chosen rhymes and words to create your lovely verse. Most enjoyable and super pic. Faye

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Faye - the kid sees ants and he's in seventh heaven. LOL :-) Brooke

Comment from donnadiann

Excellent

Nice solution line--to just settle for ants. Adorable photo to complete this poem. Good flow in rhyming. I think I'm starting to see enjambment in the lines now (thanks mostly to your help:) I believe it is most of the lines of your poem, or all; (dashes throw me off a little, but seems the thought is still going even in these lines). Hugs:)

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, donnadiann :-) Sawyer isn't settling. He adores bugs. LOL :-) Brooke

reply by donnadiann on 20-Jul-2014

Oh, I know, not that inquisitive child. Just in this poem (ants):):)

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

From elephants to ants, what a difference! LOL, but I think comparing them, the ant is probably the stronger of the two. I like this one, it is just what children do and would think. Has Sawyer taken any of his 'animal' friends home for mum to see yet... a worm or something? I had that from both my boys. Not nice! Lovely poem again, Brooke. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

Thanks so much, Sandra. Since Sawyer is only 26 months old, Mom is always with him. I don't think he has had a worm in his hands yet, but he has picked up a roly poly bug, with her there. LOL Brooke :-)

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 16-Jul-2014

Oh, how lovely, just think of all the things Mom has to look forward to! LOL. :)xx

reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

I bet Mom is thinking just that too - but hey, it's too late to give him back. LOL :-)

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Your poetic whimsy always brings us a smile, Brooke. Strong ABAB rhyme scheme and alliteration of elephant and Encino.
"Nobody wants to gawking straight into an elephant's knees" is one of those lines that makes us smile. Thanks for sharing. :)

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014

boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke