Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "On the Road, Meanwhile In Court"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
10 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
Your story has so many intricate parts to it, all woven well together. I like all the poetic additions when the Bard is around! I hope those females get on the right trail. Good dialogue, narrative and flow. Enjoyable read as always. Faye
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Your story has so many intricate parts to it, all woven well together. I like all the poetic additions when the Bard is around! I hope those females get on the right trail. Good dialogue, narrative and flow. Enjoyable read as always. Faye
Comment Written 17-Jul-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Cat burglar, cat and mouse- I knew I was in for it when I saw the picture of the Toonces wannabe. It is good to see you embedding poetry in the chapters again.as for listening to what the Bard really has to say, maybe he should run for office.
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Cat burglar, cat and mouse- I knew I was in for it when I saw the picture of the Toonces wannabe. It is good to see you embedding poetry in the chapters again.as for listening to what the Bard really has to say, maybe he should run for office.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
Comment from adewpearl
Look, Barry - add comma for direct address
Shut up, you little bitch - add comma for direct address
I like the Bard's satiric take on America the Beautiful
Are they listening again? - add question mark
get to see you're momma soon - your
good dialogue throughout conveys people's emotions and attitudes well
Brooke
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Look, Barry - add comma for direct address
Shut up, you little bitch - add comma for direct address
I like the Bard's satiric take on America the Beautiful
Are they listening again? - add question mark
get to see you're momma soon - your
good dialogue throughout conveys people's emotions and attitudes well
Brooke
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Sounds like Angela is still in for a tough time. I think if people really stopped and listened to the bard, they will find that he's not really all that crazy. Another well crafted chapter.
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Sounds like Angela is still in for a tough time. I think if people really stopped and listened to the bard, they will find that he's not really all that crazy. Another well crafted chapter.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Great tag to bring in some loose ends. Some news that could have a great effect in later happenings. Funny stuff here. Great depiction of children. NG
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Great tag to bring in some loose ends. Some news that could have a great effect in later happenings. Funny stuff here. Great depiction of children. NG
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
Comment from seaglass
Poor Angela, I hope she get her chance to get revenge. I don't know about now but years ago there were some creepy old abandoned farms and places out there. I always wanted to snoop but there's also so many snakes and bitey things, I didn't. You must paint us a picture of the old ranch when they reach it...if they do.
One little fixey
Miss Dancer is not related to the kidnap victim in (any way),---(anyway) one word
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Poor Angela, I hope she get her chance to get revenge. I don't know about now but years ago there were some creepy old abandoned farms and places out there. I always wanted to snoop but there's also so many snakes and bitey things, I didn't. You must paint us a picture of the old ranch when they reach it...if they do.
One little fixey
Miss Dancer is not related to the kidnap victim in (any way),---(anyway) one word
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
A lot going on here, and all of it heading toward excitement. I noticed the Bard's comments on America. Tonight I saw the movie.. AWESOME! You must see it! It gives both sides of the major disagreements about what our nation is, and by the end I was in tears in many places for differing reasons. The music is splendid, the little factlets I never knew are spread all over at a rapid pace. It will blow your mind, whichever side of the aisle you it on. SEE IT, Mikey. You will be SO GLAD you did!
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A lot going on here, and all of it heading toward excitement. I noticed the Bard's comments on America. Tonight I saw the movie.. AWESOME! You must see it! It gives both sides of the major disagreements about what our nation is, and by the end I was in tears in many places for differing reasons. The music is splendid, the little factlets I never knew are spread all over at a rapid pace. It will blow your mind, whichever side of the aisle you it on. SEE IT, Mikey. You will be SO GLAD you did!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2014
Comment from l.raven
OMG Michael, sounds like my father...when you said get out of Dodge...he says it all the time...when we are leaving for somewhere...LOL...and if Elsa hits Angela one more time...we are going to war...LOL...so glad to hear my Bard singing....but felt bad about the homeless part...sigh...now hold off on the court part...lets get Angela first...love it you...Luff Linda xxoo oh and I sooooo love your picture...
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OMG Michael, sounds like my father...when you said get out of Dodge...he says it all the time...when we are leaving for somewhere...LOL...and if Elsa hits Angela one more time...we are going to war...LOL...so glad to hear my Bard singing....but felt bad about the homeless part...sigh...now hold off on the court part...lets get Angela first...love it you...Luff Linda xxoo oh and I sooooo love your picture...
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
Lucy and the gang have caught on to where they are taking Elsa. The cat saved the day. I hope Winston does not get away with anything in court. I am glad the other kids are safe. I think the children are just beginning to realize that. Great work.
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Lucy and the gang have caught on to where they are taking Elsa. The cat saved the day. I hope Winston does not get away with anything in court. I am glad the other kids are safe. I think the children are just beginning to realize that. Great work.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
Comment from Sankey
This is queer, funny quirky but GOOD mate GOOD! Well done so funny! a laugh a minute or second even hehe!
Something really wrong here MIkey NO SPAGS!! What gives!! HEHE!!
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This is queer, funny quirky but GOOD mate GOOD! Well done so funny! a laugh a minute or second even hehe!
Something really wrong here MIkey NO SPAGS!! What gives!! HEHE!!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2014
