A Violet Tucked Snugly in the Grass
an English sonnet123 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke, This is a lovely English sonnet in perfect iambic pentameter. Lovely words, quite philosophical and a lovely read. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke, This is a lovely English sonnet in perfect iambic pentameter. Lovely words, quite philosophical and a lovely read. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
Little things of beauty, yes, are all around, even a violet tucked snugly in the grass..Our creator was quite an artist...So much to see & appreciate...Great rhyme and & examples shown Enjoyed reading your poem Thanks for sharing.
Caressa
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Little things of beauty, yes, are all around, even a violet tucked snugly in the grass..Our creator was quite an artist...So much to see & appreciate...Great rhyme and & examples shown Enjoyed reading your poem Thanks for sharing.
Caressa
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Caressa, thank you so much for your generous sixth star and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
I love when you post sonnets, dear B. This one is wonderful and well-crafted too--as usual! Nice picture--also, as usual! I enjoyed your creative rhyme and slant rhyme, especially
through and dew, and pace and waste.
Love this line:
a rainbow in a shard of broken glass --
Good alliteration here and there...and especially nice here:
A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea,
Good assonance of E and consonance of H:
a hermit crab emerging from its shell,
*miraculous the world in which we dwell.
The reverse syntax in this line would sound better if you add punctuation, IMHO. Examples:
miraculous: the world in which we dwell.
miraculous, the world in which we dwell.
miraculous--the world in which we dwell.
Nice subtle alliteration plus consonance of W in the above line.
Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
indeed they do!
Good volta-line:
but only to those souls who slow their pace.
Great line and nice alliteration of W:
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste.
Good assonance of hard I sound with tiny and inclined.
Excellent closing couplet, augmenting the theme to an elevating prayer
May He who made the violets and dew,(why this comma?)
awake my eyes to all I'm passing through.
Almost a six.
Bravo
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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I love when you post sonnets, dear B. This one is wonderful and well-crafted too--as usual! Nice picture--also, as usual! I enjoyed your creative rhyme and slant rhyme, especially
through and dew, and pace and waste.
Love this line:
a rainbow in a shard of broken glass --
Good alliteration here and there...and especially nice here:
A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea,
Good assonance of E and consonance of H:
a hermit crab emerging from its shell,
*miraculous the world in which we dwell.
The reverse syntax in this line would sound better if you add punctuation, IMHO. Examples:
miraculous: the world in which we dwell.
miraculous, the world in which we dwell.
miraculous--the world in which we dwell.
Nice subtle alliteration plus consonance of W in the above line.
Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
indeed they do!
Good volta-line:
but only to those souls who slow their pace.
Great line and nice alliteration of W:
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste.
Good assonance of hard I sound with tiny and inclined.
Excellent closing couplet, augmenting the theme to an elevating prayer
May He who made the violets and dew,(why this comma?)
awake my eyes to all I'm passing through.
Almost a six.
Bravo
Love,
rd
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thank you, rd, for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
This is so true Brooke, we should all open our eyes, take stock and value the things around us, people are always going on about the evil in the world, but there is so much beauty and wonder as well, your poem reflects this beautifully, excellent rhyme and proximate rhyme pace/waste,perfect rhythm and rhyme and a flow to die for.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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This is so true Brooke, we should all open our eyes, take stock and value the things around us, people are always going on about the evil in the world, but there is so much beauty and wonder as well, your poem reflects this beautifully, excellent rhyme and proximate rhyme pace/waste,perfect rhythm and rhyme and a flow to die for.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Eric, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke
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Most welcome Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's amazing what poems you can write from such a simple thing as pointing out a butterfly, and you are right. We don't spend enough time really looking at the tiny glories we have been given to appreciate them. This is a lovely poem and an excellent one for the contest. Good luck! :) Sandra
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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It's amazing what poems you can write from such a simple thing as pointing out a butterfly, and you are right. We don't spend enough time really looking at the tiny glories we have been given to appreciate them. This is a lovely poem and an excellent one for the contest. Good luck! :) Sandra
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Sandra, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful response to my sonnet. Brooke :-)
Comment from Aussie
Miraculous the world in which we dwell - how true! Look up and live. I loved your Sonnet Poetry Contest entry and wish you well with the results. This is a lovely poem and we need to open our eyes to the beauty that surrounds us. Well done nana.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Miraculous the world in which we dwell - how true! Look up and live. I loved your Sonnet Poetry Contest entry and wish you well with the results. This is a lovely poem and we need to open our eyes to the beauty that surrounds us. Well done nana.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Kay, thank you so much for your thoughtfulness, my friend, and your generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from Pyrrho
Interesting adewpearl. As I read you conjured up from my subconscious to my conscious five different poems I wrote years ago in which I wrote of thoughts related to those in your poem.
I like that the last line is in the present/future rather than the past. That had to be a conscious decision on your part.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Interesting adewpearl. As I read you conjured up from my subconscious to my conscious five different poems I wrote years ago in which I wrote of thoughts related to those in your poem.
I like that the last line is in the present/future rather than the past. That had to be a conscious decision on your part.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Pyrrho, for your review. Brooke
Comment from Cancer Butterfly
In this busy world we often forget to stop smell the roses. To enjoy the small things in life. For it is the small things that are often most precious. That message is what I took a way from this poem. Enjoy the fragile things before they are gone.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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In this busy world we often forget to stop smell the roses. To enjoy the small things in life. For it is the small things that are often most precious. That message is what I took a way from this poem. Enjoy the fragile things before they are gone.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Cancer Butterfly, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Gladness
You are just so good at putting things together. I like the tiny things of beauty you picked out to show how easy it is to miss the little miracles all around us.
Thanks, Anita
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You are just so good at putting things together. I like the tiny things of beauty you picked out to show how easy it is to miss the little miracles all around us.
Thanks, Anita
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Anita :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
What an incredibly lovely sonnet, Brooke - the imagery it evokes is sweet, most especially the very originality of the various things you describe.
I especially loved your closing couplet!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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What an incredibly lovely sonnet, Brooke - the imagery it evokes is sweet, most especially the very originality of the various things you describe.
I especially loved your closing couplet!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much, my friend, for your generous response to this sonnet :-) Brooke
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Entirely my pleasure!
