A Violet Tucked Snugly in the Grass
an English sonnet123 total reviews
Comment from Andrewajgblue
A wonderful entry into the competition, I thought the message was really nice and it's true most people are so busy they don't notice the beauty that's around them, good luck ,
Andrew
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A wonderful entry into the competition, I thought the message was really nice and it's true most people are so busy they don't notice the beauty that's around them, good luck ,
Andrew
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Andrew, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
I always appreciate how you have an original way to explore common themes. You're keen observance has produced some extraordinary imagery for me and your words are so true.
My favorite lines are: a rainbow in a shard of broken glass -- A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea Simply lovely.
Hugs,
Lou
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Hi Brooke,
I always appreciate how you have an original way to explore common themes. You're keen observance has produced some extraordinary imagery for me and your words are so true.
My favorite lines are: a rainbow in a shard of broken glass -- A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea Simply lovely.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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Lou, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It's amazing what children will see and learn if they are allowed to explore. I am glad Sawyer is allow this. So many children are not. I loved your poem and good luck in the contest.
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It's amazing what children will see and learn if they are allowed to explore. I am glad Sawyer is allow this. So many children are not. I loved your poem and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara, for your thoughtful review and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from lakeport
A Violet tucked snugly in the grass, Nice photo, that's a beautiful expressed Sonnet poem I enjoyed reading it, good luck at the contest.Good bless you,Hugs!Lakeport.
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A Violet tucked snugly in the grass, Nice photo, that's a beautiful expressed Sonnet poem I enjoyed reading it, good luck at the contest.Good bless you,Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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Lakeport, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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your welcome.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Your sonnet is lovely, Brooke, with a message you often use that I like very much. Every day we are given opportunities to enjoy the blessings of life around us. Your sonnet is of course perfect. Best of luck in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
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Your sonnet is lovely, Brooke, with a message you often use that I like very much. Every day we are given opportunities to enjoy the blessings of life around us. Your sonnet is of course perfect. Best of luck in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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Karyn, thanks so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review of my sonnet :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
A beautiful Sonnet that truly is
a commentary and a philosophy
that I would recommend to the
world, take the time to smell
the roses; look around you at
all the beautiful things that are
there for you to see, to hear, to
enjoy.
Your writing, well what can one say,
each new day brings a new gem for
one to look at and appreciate.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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A beautiful Sonnet that truly is
a commentary and a philosophy
that I would recommend to the
world, take the time to smell
the roses; look around you at
all the beautiful things that are
there for you to see, to hear, to
enjoy.
Your writing, well what can one say,
each new day brings a new gem for
one to look at and appreciate.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so much for your generous response to this sonnet and for your kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
but only to those souls who slow their pace.
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste.
a very beautiful sonnet, with thought provoking stanzas. It is very true that we do need to be aware of the beauty that is free for us all.
I am open to the abundant flow of the universe
I am touch with my soul
I am true to self Deepak Chopra.
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
but only to those souls who slow their pace.
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste.
a very beautiful sonnet, with thought provoking stanzas. It is very true that we do need to be aware of the beauty that is free for us all.
I am open to the abundant flow of the universe
I am touch with my soul
I am true to self Deepak Chopra.
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from James Sarzotti
Inspiring and appropriate to the subject photo.
A violet tucked snugly in the grass, << Nice, the trochee.
the slightest movement of a butterfly,
a rainbow in a shard of broken glass -- << Taking the metaphor further. A modern update, given our disposable culture.
we have a tendency to pass things by.
A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea, << Blake echo.
a hermit crab emerging from its shell,
a seed before it grows into a tree -- << Evolution theme.
miraculous, the world in which we dwell. << Beautiful imagery, begging metaphors, pulling us into nature's great symbol.
Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
but only to those souls who slow their pace. << Good point.
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste. << An even more important point about nature. In not observing it, not curating it, we are inclined to trash it.
May He who made the violets and dew, << Echo of Blake's Tyger.
awake my eyes to all I'm passing through. << Self-exhortation after a profound insight and conclusion to the above argument.
Seems you followed the form perfectly (I've just been studying it again), right down to the declamatory couplet. Very well done. And I like the way you formalize, perhaps rationalize, a Romantic sensibility and poetics within the rational limits of an English Sonnet. You're messing a wee bit with the whole tradition. Nice dialectical touch.
A significant demonstration of the form itself, personalized and with a wonderful message. Thanks for this one!
PS - Please read my latest chapter. Or any of the later ones. I've missed your invaluable criticism and insights.
Cheers, James
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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Inspiring and appropriate to the subject photo.
A violet tucked snugly in the grass, << Nice, the trochee.
the slightest movement of a butterfly,
a rainbow in a shard of broken glass -- << Taking the metaphor further. A modern update, given our disposable culture.
we have a tendency to pass things by.
A grain of sand that sparkles by the sea, << Blake echo.
a hermit crab emerging from its shell,
a seed before it grows into a tree -- << Evolution theme.
miraculous, the world in which we dwell. << Beautiful imagery, begging metaphors, pulling us into nature's great symbol.
Such tiny gems reveal themselves each day,
but only to those souls who slow their pace. << Good point.
For those inclined to hurry on their way,
the beauty of our world is put to waste. << An even more important point about nature. In not observing it, not curating it, we are inclined to trash it.
May He who made the violets and dew, << Echo of Blake's Tyger.
awake my eyes to all I'm passing through. << Self-exhortation after a profound insight and conclusion to the above argument.
Seems you followed the form perfectly (I've just been studying it again), right down to the declamatory couplet. Very well done. And I like the way you formalize, perhaps rationalize, a Romantic sensibility and poetics within the rational limits of an English Sonnet. You're messing a wee bit with the whole tradition. Nice dialectical touch.
A significant demonstration of the form itself, personalized and with a wonderful message. Thanks for this one!
PS - Please read my latest chapter. Or any of the later ones. I've missed your invaluable criticism and insights.
Cheers, James
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
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James, thank you so much for your thorough and thoughtful reading of this poem and for your generous sixth star. I'm off to read your most recent chapter :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Great job, Brooke, with your Sonnet about slowing down to enjoy all the wonders of life, both big and small. I like the last couplet asking Him to help you see them. 8-)
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Great job, Brooke, with your Sonnet about slowing down to enjoy all the wonders of life, both big and small. I like the last couplet asking Him to help you see them. 8-)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Fleedleflump
Great use of the sonnet format, Brooke. I like that your turn is a move from examples to analysis - like a massively expanded (and massively improved) haiku! Beautiful meter and smooth, original rhymes. Loved it!
Mike
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Great use of the sonnet format, Brooke. I like that your turn is a move from examples to analysis - like a massively expanded (and massively improved) haiku! Beautiful meter and smooth, original rhymes. Loved it!
Mike
Comment Written 13-Jul-2014
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Mike, thanks so much :-) Brooke
